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Dumb & Dumber
09-13-2012, 02:50 PM
Hey yall, so I like making funky beats, here's one I just made on the Maschine Mikro

http://soundcloud.com/armanwhagwan/m-ancient-lions2

I HOPE U HAVE SUBS, BASS-HEAVU

If you heard the original, re-listen, i originally uploaded a bad file and its fixed now.

Dumb & Dumber
09-13-2012, 05:31 PM
EDIT: HOLY SHIT, I released this without my left channel and GOD THAT WAS GROSS.

I uploaded the fixed version now. Sorry for anybody that listened to the original.

Please give it another try, lmao.

Dumb & Dumber
09-14-2012, 10:24 PM
I'm serious, the first version I produced without my left channel, imagine my surprise when I heard it elsewhere, song sounded fucked up because I only produced hearing the right.

Listen to it now even if you listened to the original, it's nothing like it!

Bumpin to request for criticism :D

Drunken Monk
09-15-2012, 02:25 PM
dope beat fam, i see u been practising and gettin betta, i would hear mo powafull drums but sounds aight keep workin hard and dont give up

LORD NOSE
09-15-2012, 02:30 PM
:no:

Drunken Monk
09-15-2012, 02:33 PM
:fucku:

LORD NOSE
09-15-2012, 03:01 PM
#(

Dumb & Dumber
09-15-2012, 03:23 PM
:no:
Not sure if you're giving criticism or just being insulting, but what don't you like about it so I know what to improve?

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 03:16 AM
Rly love to know what Skamp/Jig/Style/Mumm/Graveyard/Hologram think

bump for CRITICISM

Drunken Monk
09-16-2012, 03:33 AM
this place is fucking shit, back in the day used to be good but since sunny and their Faggot team are over here itz pure trash

LORD NOSE
09-16-2012, 09:51 AM
Not sure if you're giving criticism or just being insulting, but what don't you like about it so I know what to improve?


it wasn't an insult - it just sounds very amateur to me - i expected it to change up more but it didn't - it just doesn't move me -

this place is fucking shit, back in the day used to be good but since sunny and their Faggot team are over here itz pure trash

so i'm supposed to like everything i hear in here or else ?

lol - my faggot team ?


who is on this team ? - tell me


pattin each other on the ass for their efforts and saying good job is whats killing Hip Hops image - i could teach yall a whole bunch of shit but yall too arrogant so why bother - son asked for criticism and i replied - stop crying

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 11:18 AM
I feel you though, I could have added a whole dimension by making random changes in the melody or its effects. That woulda been nice. Thanks.

Well of course it's amateur, I'm an amateur -_-

It doesn't change up much because it's my rap beat, not an electronic instrumental track. I left the focus for my vocals, but it does change (sometimes subtly) in case you didn't notice:

Howl/dinging -> four bar full melody sans hats -> two bar bridge -> four bar with hats -> four bar without hats -> four bar without kicks and fade of string melody -> outro howl/dinging

And the kickpattern alternates every four bars as well.

Keep in mind, I made it with my own rap over it in mind. Check out how it worked for my last full song (vocals and all): http://wutang-corp.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118338

Criticism appreciated.

LORD NOSE
09-16-2012, 01:01 PM
I feel you though, I could have added a whole dimension by making random changes in the melody or its effects. That woulda been nice. Thanks.

Well of course it's amateur, I'm an amateur -_-

this reply right here was all you needed

but you had to go and try to school me


It doesn't change up much because it's my rap beat, not an electronic instrumental track. I left the focus for my vocals, but it does change (sometimes subtly) in case you didn't notice:




YOU left the focus for YOUR vocals but asked US to criticize YOUR "rap beat" - and that is what i gave you -

it is an electronic instrumental - because you made it using electronics and posted it here with no vocals on it for us to criticize electronically -

i noticed the small changes - i notice everything -




Howl/dinging -> four bar full melody sans hats -> two bar bridge -> four bar with hats -> four bar without hats -> four bar without kicks and fade of string melody -> outro howl/dinging

And the kickpattern alternates every four bars as well.


lmao - maybe being so technical with it is taking away from you expressing your shit

Keep in mind, I made it with my own rap over it in mind.


then maybe you should have kept it in your mind and "rapped" over it



Check out how it worked for my last full song (vocals and all): http://wutang-corp.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118338

Criticism appreciated.



i'll check it in a few - but keep in mind that when i come into this section, i'm not going to baby niggas about they craft - no disrespect - if you just started, great - keep going - when i was coming up, i studied my elders - now as an elder, i study the youth -

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 01:03 PM
I appreciate the criticism bro, why you crying?

It's a general response so others can read and criticize better with the further context I've provided, not everything is aimed at you.

Def listen to my linked track though, it's a better representation of my music.

Don't be so internet-sensitive again lmao.

LORD NOSE
09-16-2012, 01:13 PM
I appreciate the criticism bro, why you crying?

It's a general response so others can read and criticize with the context I've provided, not everything is aimed at you.

Don't be so internet-sensitive again lmao.


sensitive ?

this is about you and your rap beat - i'm a part of the general population here so i responded - if you aimed it at everyone, i'm one of everybody - stop trying to be so smart and stupid at the same dam time (Future) - i'm helping you here - if you are an amateur, ask questions - sincere ones - humble yourself if you indeed want to grow -

i listened to the other link you posted and i got to tell you.........

we are in 2012 - i just expect to hear an evolution of the kultures expression
i am spoiled with and used to high grade shit - i've seen niggas get beat the fuck up for saying wack shit in a cypher - the standards here gotta be raised

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 01:29 PM
True, link me some of your shit then, let's see at what standard this criticism is coming from.

:)

LORD NOSE
09-16-2012, 02:39 PM
True, link me some of your shit then, let's see at what standard this criticism is coming from.

:)


start here - some of my shit


0pwoIFyWE1M


Bhuupz0fr5I


E5i87R3R0Oo


the music i've made is not up here for criticism - YOURS IS




there is your standard -

Rakim was about 17

Teddy Riley was 14 when he made the beat for The Show



http://soundcloud.com/armanwhagwan/m-i-think-i-love-you-too

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 06:38 PM
Everybody starts somewhere.

LORD NOSE
09-16-2012, 06:55 PM
egg zack lee

Mumm Ra
09-16-2012, 10:31 PM
love the sample but gotta step those drums up imo
drums are probably the most important and hardest aspect to master tho, just gotta get a lot of practice and research in

Dumb & Dumber
09-16-2012, 11:14 PM
Ayye!!! Drums have always been my weakest trait, and I've been putting a lot of research n grind lately in improving them. Comes with practice.. I am getting better though.

Thanks for the constructive criticism, really appreciate it comin from you.

LORD NOSE
09-18-2012, 07:52 PM
drumming on tables and counters with your hands will help you improve on your drums

Uncle Steezo
09-18-2012, 08:40 PM
've seen niggas get beat the fuck up for saying wack shit in a cypher

lol!!!

Uncle Steezo
09-18-2012, 08:46 PM
i can dig it. co-sign the drums critique.