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SnakeyeS
06-21-2005, 10:07 AM
I come with the wrath of Lucifer,
Hell couldn't contain the heat I bring through to ya,
I come strap, with perfect format, battle raps, to break mother fuckers backs,
Don't take my name in vain, I'll stomp your little ass and put you shame,
Y'all ain't even worth reconition so fuck calling out your names,
You know who you are, Just little wannbe stars,
I'll kill you little dudes in just 2 bars,
Your soul I'll take, Your spirit I'll break,
Crack your foundation open and found a pit of Snakes,
I'll reach down your throst and rip out vocal chords,
This is a declaration of war,
And I done gave the orders,
To knock down your borders,
I got snipers hiding in your camp in every corner,
I got this thread perfected with every stich,
I just had to scratch this little itch,
I'm the best at beatin pussies up just ask your bitch,
Why did yall wanna act foolish,
I know your parents ain't raise yall to be that stupid,
So next time yall wanna throw some shit out,
Be respectful when grown folks talking and shut your mouth.

OG Kane
06-21-2005, 03:59 PM
it was ok, elevate, and try not to use multies like this,

I come strap, with perfect format, battle raps, to break mother fuckers backs,
whack..

its better if you just make bars like your first one and try not to worry too much about how it looks, once you got that down and start being more creative with your multies start working on them, like your first bar, try to make the whole shit like that next time,

I come with the wrath of Lucifer,
Hell couldn't contain the heat I bring through to ya,

cool name

OG Kane
06-21-2005, 04:11 PM
cool name

GuardianOne
06-22-2005, 02:31 AM
Your lyrics were simple, and the way you put them accross - i noticed that sometimes you seemed to return to the same "want-or wanna", just check. But i guess you were busting so there's no problem there.

Peace
PS: Hey we want to check more of your posts!!!!!!!!!!!

BlaK FuRYaN
06-22-2005, 05:41 AM
Honestly...!

It didnt make me wanna skript a new dart, but i can tell you just startin out....

I wud always encourage a new swordsman to elevate.....it means more soldiers against tha system and global domineers fo me...

so ride wid tha advice above, that'll sharpen your sword son

'stay awake'