View Full Version : UNdissPUTED vs. Hollow Dartz ( UNdissPUTED WINS )
03-04-2006, 07:08 PM
1 verse each
8 bars (16 lines) max.
House voting rules (short explanation)
No dickriding votes
You know the deal,
Set it off Hollow
03-04-2006, 07:31 PM
I don't need no gun to split ya wig, watch these dartz I got I bust em' Hollow to ya head/
You ran out of luck steppin' to me, decapitate ya head , now u lookin like a chopped wilderbeast/
you can't see me but this ain't wrestling , blow ya thinking cap off nigga have u guessing/
you should've learned ya lesson after the first line, fuckin with mine is like tryna stop the sunshine/
if u want war bring it we can put it on wax like candles, ya crew get dismantled, have ya ashes sittin on the mantle/
u can't handle the kid im wild like a loose cannon, my rhymes will have u stranded, u feel like u on another planet/
u at a disadvantage, nigga this ain't spanish , i'm speaking clear, like leftovers u can have it/
fell like u had a crash landing, after im landing, these dartz over brain ya scattered, u shouldve followed ya manners, now u a target for the cannon/
Hey what up I didn't get to introduce my self to you. My name is Hollow Dartz......
BRASSKNUCKLED PAI MEI
03-04-2006, 10:34 PM
I'm checking in...Lets Get tHIS SHIT gOING!!
03-05-2006, 06:01 PM
With a lyrical scalpel in hand I begin this kid’s dissection,
I’ve seen tighter rhymes than his in a newspaper’s business section.
Hollow shouldn’t be textin, cuz if he had skill he’s now lost it,
That tangled ass verse flowed like an outdoor Arctic faucet.
I rewound played and paused it, but your rhymes didn’t make sense to me,
I’ve got such a “leg up” on Dartz you can call me a centipede.
That verse you sent to me was primitive like a clay pot,
You couldn’t “split a wig” with a knife in a toupee shop.
This gay’s got battle wit like bareback riders have saddle fit,
He can’t handle diss’ with his style as boring as soil analysts.
This man is just, not gonna get votes like John Kerry,
With grammar taken straight from a Made In Compton dictionary.
Like Pictionary, this battle has been “drawn out”,
You set yourself up for ridicule like an Asian with his dong out.
Dartz didn’t have a strong bout so I’ma keep my clean slate,
I just ate this Philadelphian like a Philly cheese steak.
03-05-2006, 06:06 PM
03-05-2006, 09:19 PM
lol, u got me....votes please
03-06-2006, 07:26 AM
Quit talking shit about overseas mc's and come to T.O. if you got heart to say that shit bitch!! I'll eat your food on a verse anytime anyplace. Then I'll get a bunch of homies to breakdance on your fuckin head! Tell me when you wanna battle faggot.
03-06-2006, 10:02 AM
Shit...this was pretty close.
flow - closest one giving it too....UNdissPUTED
wordplay -Hollow Darts
creativity - Hollow Darts "fuckin with mine is like tryna stop the sunshine"
vocabulary - UNdissputed used words wit more syllables
punches - gotta go to UNdissPUTED
UNdissPUTED for my vote
03-06-2006, 12:00 PM
UNdissPUTED gets my vote top to bottom, word. Up-north rippin shit for sho, but I wanna get at dude for that weak comment about overseas rappers.
03-06-2006, 12:25 PM
ok here is my vote, i hate to do this to hollow darts, but even he admitted that undisputed got him, but for voting sake here is the breakdown
i feel hollow forced this rhyme a lil bit, but that happens to the best of us, so undissputed gets my vote, peace ya'll
03-06-2006, 01:58 PM
So I guess that's 3 votes to 0 for me
Seriously good battle Hollow Dartz, and nice verse (the sunshine line was ill)
THANKS for the votes yall -> Liquid Lines, CREEPY FOLLOWS, and hollywoodrealty
03-06-2006, 03:21 PM
I'll watch your whole world fall apart/
that shitty verse from HOLLOW DARTZ/
ain't equivalent to one of CREEPY FOLLOW's farts/
so fuck your combos and punchlines, you ain't shit/
you probably convo with wontime, a true plain snitch/
I'll backsmack ya till you catch asthma/
this fuckin backpack rapper 'll get stabbed in his bladder with a black dagger/
sliced with a boxcutter/
'll get placed in a box like a dvd from Blockbuster/
you stupid ignoramus, son of a bitch/
sperm in your anus is the only way you comin with shit/
dissin overseas mc's, don't get me mad/
'cause I'll make you feel more unwanted than your deadbeat dad/
so quit biting all that WU-TANG slang/
go and call the ku klux klan 'cause over here you can't hang/
so holla back at me and respond to the fight/
but if I'm not back it means I'm with your mom for the night!
lol ur good^^^
but i dont think theyll count ur vote creepy, cuz u didnt use the guidelines, so since thats the case..i got u un
flow - un
creativity - un
vocabulary - un
punches - un
u got this 1 dude, mos def better structured and thought out
03-06-2006, 10:16 PM
thanks Dusk, I didn't even realize that...peace
03-06-2006, 10:17 PM
----bigben I guess you can close this thread----------
$icka Than Aidz
03-06-2006, 11:42 PM
yo dog, creeepy
should done this, flows tight
"I'll backsmack ya till you catch asthma/
this fuckin backpacka rappa 'll get stab up his bladda,/
doesnt matta, the black gat will stop your chatter when your brains get splattered.
I unno man, just tryin to make your shit sound phatter
03-07-2006, 04:03 AM
It's cool homie, you're entitled to your own opinion whether you think my verse needed improvement, but I cooked that verse off the top in quick time,
fuck it, it ain't nothing.
I know how to write music whether it's conscious or grimecore, spittin 6 hour freestyles off the top, the whole shabang!!
Been doin this 13 years so when you see me online I'm just fuckin around but still showcasing real skill.
So tellin me "I should've done this" really ain't movin me.
I'm an underground pro, ya know?!
I'm a take it as a compliment whether you hatin or not, so good lookin for even takin the time.
03-07-2006, 02:33 PM
His flow and punchlines rolled of neat neatly while i was reading it...
Holly darts had a few lines which were coo, but the structure frew me off key...
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