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Sirkulayshun
03-23-2006, 03:16 AM
leave comments on my rhymes

Sirkulayshun
03-23-2006, 03:31 AM
yo im hot like the sun,
wen i come out u cud fry an egg on da pavement until its well done
so face it, wen i step up there aint no replacement
my rhymes connect like 2 hotel suites adjacent

i be the non-extortable, non abortional
with the verbal kills me and skillz directly proportional
dese cats is horrible, twistin up distortable
im known to be so explorable people call me DORAble

im the leader better follow, skoolin rap students on yesterdays tomorrow
the reason why i spit? i cant swallow
20/20 vision cant see me wit eyewear
skies clear things distant even when my minds here

i delcare ya ass whoopin from mild to severe
n****z see my rhymes and they goin under repair
leave ya wit fear like bomb scares
stop and stare cuz Sirkulayshun's mirror image is closer than it appears

tha god concept
03-23-2006, 04:49 AM
i like ya style homie 4reel.....hit me up on a pm and lets build....peep my shit in the temple under godconcept officail thread juss so u no im a killer emcee......werd up ~1~

Sirkulayshun
03-26-2006, 01:27 AM
Betta b prepared mentally when ya feet step ta me,
head to toe but i strike left right and centrally,
respectively, developin supreme rap tendency,
If spittin words was bombs i'd create damage extensively,

listen attentively, the rap criminal-another felony,
lyrically murder fools potentially,
i make an enemy lose it mentally from jealousy,
so much that his cerebrum cant function effectively,

fake mc's put crowds to sleep anesthetic-ly,
but i wake em up kinetically wit my energy,
if i had to put it generally,
my flow is ill with a sickness that'll spread epidemically,

and it cant be healed medically or chemically,
im speakin lone facts not speakin hypothetically,
technically, im Sherlock Holmes yall elementary,
the road to millenium the kid of the century,

yall broken and assembly's a necessity,
treat folks like water, my rhymes shock folks electrically,
i gat people thinkin skeptically,
cause they cudnt get the picture with a photographic memory!!

to be continued EVENTUALLY

Sirkulayshun
03-26-2006, 02:43 PM
yall leave sum comments plz. let me kno

denaturat
03-26-2006, 09:37 PM
I read your posts and I can hear the fuckin beat! Good flow, dope rhyme structure, I`d say your one of the best I`ve seen on here...are you really 15 years old? yo, even if you are 35, your shit is tight. peace.

ArcherPriest
03-26-2006, 11:02 PM
Your flows not too bad... you had some good lines and i like your choice of words, vocabs pretty good... Creativity is lackin in some parts tho... your metaphors are bland...example... "Im hot like the Sun"... " You couldn't see me with Eyewear"... I dunno.. just found that shit boring

Sirkulayshun
03-27-2006, 12:06 AM
aight aight i feel yall...an yea im 15...thx 4 takin time 2 read thru

Sirkulayshun
03-29-2006, 07:01 AM
yo im known to spit approximately 3 million punches per verse
flow so nasty people call it perverse
the hardest act ta follow, and ya forced ta rehearse
its a drought when im hot people dyin from thirst

my flow is dope, cant deal my rhymes ya cant cope
off the ropez, leavin faithful people with no hopes
my verbal pain cause extreme brain loss
my flo is liquid on ya head and ya mind is brain washed

these cats had 9 lives and died the games' over
total shock caused by my sting like king kobras
in charge im still lietenant of rap soldiers
i stun wit paralysis and have n****z cast in comas

degreez like im solar, holdin galaxies in orbit
absort it by the black hole, take it, transform it
my bees sting and attack when i swarm it
broke the chainz unleash harnessed superpower upon it

verbal rage i wage war then engage
young age but i view thin skin like x rays
rhymes pumped like 12 gauge, lock and load it sprays
peripheral force back and forth blast shots in both ways!

Luther Large
03-30-2006, 04:38 PM
son your flow is def on point and you have alot of potential with the metaphors

my advice just word the lines that you want to stand out a little bit better

Sirkulayshun
03-31-2006, 03:08 AM
Grab ya pen and paper sit back listen closely
Ima teach team players how ta win a rap trophy
yall need oven mits just ta catch my rhymes
ultimate thoughts supreme lines from the master's mind

the daily emcee massacre
venom flo like tarantulas, Sirkulayt blood my flo is vascular
i clean up acts like janitors, until the stage is spotless
i drop this, potatoes hit the ground wit the hotness

your topless, thats why yall never reach the peak
ahead of time my voice speaks ya future looks bleak,
my flow be like water on the infinite creek
flowin wit streaks of lines that never have leaks

my generation my era, double truth triple darer
my rhymes leave calculators sayin "syntax error"
i stand out like im conspicuous, rhymes be meticulous
crazy flo psycho crack the back its rediculous

Raptica
04-01-2006, 01:43 AM
ya ya my boi Kulayshin hard a creative mind def lines hit me up|(

Sirkulayshun
04-03-2006, 02:38 AM
im on my toes like a tic tac, break fools like kit kats
i smack back "wacks" wit the paddy "wack" knic knack
git back, faget lean my words make ya sit back
me against you im ontop its a mismatch!

Click clack! the lyrical gun wen i grip that
never even left an still i bring the kid back
i spit dat rap speeches scratch idle chit chat
i tackle obstacles that'll sack Michael Vick back

minor groups dispatch, at ease as i kick back
yall inaudible, its DEf wen my voice hit max
i be the boss wit verbal pimp slaps
intact, presently i gat it wrapped up like im spittin "gift raps"

to lost wanderin souls i give maps,
my flo is dig-all-the-way-to-china deep with a pick axe
fatal vocabulary cuz i rhyme with major syntax
we toss raps for keeps...u sure u wanna risk dat?

Sirkulayshun
04-10-2006, 12:44 AM
im takin up third, second, and comin in first too
im so sick im fly, i guess i gat bird flu
cant cop this, the non contagious germ too
symtoms of pain cuz Sirkulayshun works thru

never silent, vocal tiger style vibrant
hardcore with the soft touch no need to be violent
stay above most, open skies as i pilot
magnified aura rays burn niggaz like ultraviolet

the internal side of my mind is personal, i keep it "versonal"
im on my rise to the highest summit goin vertical
careful procedures like its surgical, come to me and be cautious
doctors lookin for cures but my flo is forever nauseous

in this world u live with the lions in the den
the only One, divide a perfect ten into ten
i must have swallowed ink cuz im sick with the pen
ressurect dead emcees just to kill em again

Sirkulayshun
04-11-2006, 03:41 AM
raps killin villains way too rough to feel gentle/
take the beat out a *instru*-ment and make it *mental*/
spittin sick verbal illness till it infects my dental/
eager for the next line suspenseful/, rhymes are my credentials/
gat niggaz followin me im influential/
your unsuccessful/ in tryna dismantle my potential/
perfect aim never miss spittin darts up in the temple/
face to face bullseye collide the target central/
revengeful/ jealousy, ya thoughts become vengeful/
cant take the pressure sick to your stomach until its ventral/
i keep spreadin my words till the speech is continental/
containin these "raps" "wrapped" up like its confidential/
erase the supplementals/no vitamins im essential/
english is broken cant assemble/ rhymes intellectual/
speakin in general/ never defeated by accidentals/
incompetentials/ i forget these inconsequentials/

Sirkulayshun
04-13-2006, 12:58 AM
yo im on point like a sword tip
just stepped into the house of rhymes, didnt knock i made the door flip
the floor ripped permanently on this short trip
in these rap battles cruisin the invincible warship
holdin tight like spandex with the sure grip
riskin life like coin toss or dice that make the board flip
u gat singles and my lyrical weapon packs a fourth clip
stain with blood of rhymes until the core drips
the claw rips captains that abort ships on the sea,
probably, warning shots fired cautiously
cant corner me into the walls of defeat
all cannot speak of the swords of my heat
Sirkulayshun, ultimately creation illustrations
tearin holes on the paper, pen written devastation
my voice aim for ya legs an hurt ya stances, hurt ya chances
of ever walkin again -Sirkumstances-

Emcee Kao
04-15-2006, 11:57 PM
YA SIRKULAYSHUN I FEEL YA RHYMES DAWG.......UNIQUE LINES
two thumbs up man!

Sirkulayshun
04-28-2006, 02:51 AM
blaze as the sunburned with ultravilot beams,
the silent schemes, solid thoughts iron dreams
the pilots team fly as skies we shoot down birds,
roamin teens bend the roads like we move roun curbs,
never enter in my premises, the arch nemesis
never ending sound my voice eternal genesis
fly like pegasus, too sick to quarantine
lyrical guillotine, raps will kill a fiend

Luther Large
04-28-2006, 07:23 PM
blaze as the sunburned with ultravilot beams,
the silent schemes, solid thoughts iron dreams
the pilots team fly as skies we shoot down birds,
roamin teens bend the roads like we move roun curbs,
never enter in my premises, the arch nemesis
never ending sound my voice eternal genesis
fly like pegasus, too sick to quarantine
lyrical guillotine, raps will kill a fiend

yo this was short but virtually flawless
the ryhme shceme was on point
and the subject matter and vocab
u used made it seem alot more intelligent

peace........keep it up

Sirkulayshun
04-29-2006, 02:21 AM
just sumthin i thought up

just a teenager witness these raps you've seen danger
remake your opinions the official view changer
u view me different as a major not a minor
forget one liners, intense aura rap blinders
blaze raps ta learn infernal internal ta burn
absent presence temporary but the Sirk returns
cant cope the next verse or withstand the previous
above average cause damage technicaly its serious
flo drippin deeper seepin in fluid like boat sinkers
i drunk most drinkers and astonish most thinkers
surrender before you enter the mind state of the mentor
clash the center mind bender, criminal rap offender
the mass lyrical destruction sender, never pretender
the supreme court of rap attender, masculine rap gender
i predict killer lyrics and my future u remember
ricochet vocal shots double damage as i render
bringin real reality from january to december
severed the fibre on the site the thread mender
the flo blender, mixture in ya thoughts ya minds tend ta,
the hardcore stone grey never soft as magenta
journey quest or path its the same rap adventure
resistance is futile the ultimate lyric thirst quencher

Sirkulayshun
05-03-2006, 02:29 AM
yo i didnt even know what ta spit about,
but the lyrics just kept stackin on my tongue so i jus had ta spit it out,
no ifs or doubts tearin the threads that im rippin out
thoughts in and out proceeded from a different route,
listen out, detailed vivid metaphors its drastic
yall stretched to the limit like elastic, broken plastic
automobile raps create the rush hour traffic
"four" lanes "fantastic", technical mind tactics
yall rhymes dead like them items inside caskets
im the rap-ro-batic spittin tip top hip hop-nastics
dangerous when the raps mix
caution sight seein displayin talent with next generation graphics
no ideas on ya head the lights broken, mic stolen from ya palm,
my vision clear as water when i sight oceans,
i write potent illness cuz my pen be nice
cool like dentyne ice blazin till the heated ice smokin!
im on ya mind enter ya thought from the left and leave it right open
i amaze the sight seein sight spoken
ya eyes open, u understand that i see envy
cuz i'll soon be blowin up like im tnt
other brothers aint hatin but they despise my ways,
they watchin me shine so much till their eyez are dazed,
take notice, the closest you come to me
is actually obtainin those mirages seen on commercials for Hostess!
pen corrosive sick probable verbal prognosis
u should know this, tongue packed with explosives
lookin for someone to beat? GO FISH
im too captivatin, u cud be a camera lens you and still cant FOCUS
then it hits ya, u fail to unscramble the mixture
so hold this in ya head till ya thoughts get the picture
cause double trouble, soarin over like the shuttle
im the last piece in the rap augmentation puzzle
its ~SirKuLayShun~

Sirkulayshun
05-03-2006, 11:25 PM
let me know what yall think of those last 2 verses

Sirkulayshun
05-06-2006, 11:06 AM
feedback???????

Vernakular
05-06-2006, 11:11 AM
decent could be better but you have the right idea i would try to incorporate punches more within' your lyrics and use a stronger vocab. I really enjoy reading the double meanings of some of the words in your verse, here is an example of what i mean

How can half steppin rappers today live with thenselves?
They crumble like bread, then they're put back on the shelves
Walkin' as tall as an elf, i believe that this is all a mental trap
Matter of fact, I don't see vigor in any of their raps
Heres the facts, they act like they are brolic bitches
Thinkin' that havin' rep on the net will actually enrich-em'
Quick to save them, there rhymes frozen more than an artic caveman
get worked like slave men, but in the end, we can only blame them
This is a monolithic act, While I laugh at them with a sadistic laugh
Because if you do the math, you find, that they all spit mesolithic crap
Not really focused enough, walk on them like a pebble
Because, I'd have to drop a 'story' to lower to their level

Killer Falcon
05-07-2006, 01:55 PM
yeah these are ok, you've got some good lines in there but i think it needs to be more lyrically precise in places. like most of the material i read on here the structure needs work, some lines are much longer than others and that messes up the flow. you've got some good shit for your age tho man, keep doing your thing

peace

Jay_Cross [7th sun]
05-07-2006, 02:11 PM
Agree with winte - cut some lines into shorter ones - then success is guaranteed! :) Keep diong It! NAIZZ SHITE :D :D :D

Sirkulayshun
05-30-2006, 01:57 AM
i aint dropped a verse in a long time....

in the temple of darts, i DRAW raps cuz im the mentor of ARTS,
the brush as a pen in my hand that will never depart,
words i render a dart to the center of hearts
speakin against me an its the end from the start
genius raps in my head what i remember is smart
the end of its sharp, the sword as i tear it apart
i aint the fearin' type i made that very clear in sight
plus the aura heats with 601 degrees Fahrenheit
so i can let off steam and watch the weak evaporate
when i activate watch the facts that the raps create
verbal gats blow the wigs off old time magistrates
decapitate i agitate kindergarten under-graduates
these feather type dudes heavy as a hampster's weight
i eradicate and captivate so i dont really have ta hate
many punches down boxers,
supercalifragilisticexpialidocious gat u searchin thru ya Oxfords!!

Mr:Merrick
05-30-2006, 04:58 PM
yo your shit is so tight that i dont know whitch parts to focus on, you got some really nice lines, and your flow i amazing dawg.

and it cant be healed medically or chemically,
im speakin lone facts not speakin hypothetically,
technically, im Sherlock Holmes yall elementary,
the road to millenium the kid of the century,

yo that shit was awesome.

yall need oven mits just ta catch my rhymes
ultimate thoughts supreme lines from the master's mind

Im sorrry bout not comin with any critics, but i cant find much to say on that area.

that one broke some kind of a reckord for a 15 year old in my opinion.. keep droppin dawg cuz your somewhat of a genius..

Killer Falcon
05-30-2006, 07:38 PM
the last verse was dope. some really good punchlines and the flow was more solid on this one. keep improving, you've got potential.

peace

Sirkulayshun
05-31-2006, 12:04 AM
thx 4 the comments yall....really appreciate it
peace
anymore feedback?

Raptica
06-01-2006, 02:25 AM
solid flow
gettin better wid each spit

White_Mouse
06-01-2006, 05:00 PM
I read your posts and I can hear the fuckin beat! Good flow, dope rhyme structure, I`d say your one of the best I`ve seen on here...are you really 15 years old? yo, even if you are 35, your shit is tight. peace.


man i ain't EVER hear stuff like that on my thread!!!! LOL
anyway your stuff is pretty dope, i guess i got lucky when i beat u. . . syke!!
naw man i'm just playin, you have a WAYYYY better flow thatn mine, i can tell when u think my flow is "creative" whether that's a compliment or just trying to be nice. LOL
Anyway keep up the good work and if you want to work with the vocally challanged mouse, maybe we can doa colab.

Sirkulayshun
06-02-2006, 06:34 PM
lol thx mouse.....an i said u were creative cuz i heard ya song an it was pretty good^O^
an yea we cud work 2getha in the future:thumbup:
peace

Sirkulayshun
06-03-2006, 12:09 AM
young nigga, BAD to the BONE its leukemia
SirK poison raps, verbal septicaemia
fly travel, been airborn before Expedia
i agree ta ya, tryna find my name in encyclopedias
strike with a meteor so i cud shake the whole planet
with this rap habit, i keep at it like a crack addict,
shock with the style, just so i cud pack static
yall could panic, give em the jumps like jack rabbits
spit automatic, disaster outcome is graphic
the gunnin raps i stack it so i gata pack it,
im above your basement status like i was an attic,
tricks are for kids, an im real no magic
all natural kid wit the style dats organic
this mic is a weapon run for cover when i grasp it
dispersal tragic, rap fanatic in my mind circle
i drop this VERSE an watch it spread uniVERSal!!

Father N Dangerous
06-05-2006, 02:22 PM
young nigga, BAD to the BONE its leukemia
SirK poison raps, verbal septicaemia
fly travel, been airborn before Expedia
i agree ta ya, tryna find my name in encyclopedias
strike with a meteor so i cud shake the whole planet
with this rap habit, i keep at it like a crack addict,
shock with the style, just so i cud pack static
yall could panic, give em the jumps like jack rabbits
spit automatic, disaster outcome is graphic
the gunnin raps i stack it so i gata pack it,
im above your basement status like i was an attic,
tricks are for kids, an im real no magic
all natural kid wit the style dats organic
this mic is a weapon run for cover when i grasp it
dispersal tragic, rap fanatic in my mind circle
i drop this VERSE an watch it spread uniVERSal!!


Real dope shit here Sir!! really feeling this verse alot of quotables if you know wat i mean

Sirkulayshun
06-05-2006, 02:57 PM
^^^thx for the comments man....appreciate it