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Lyrical Genius
03-30-2006, 02:04 PM
here is one of the first verses i actually sat down and wrote, i was of course high while writing all this, so tell me what you think...

Check this shit, heres a little story of my life
My thoughts are sharper than a blade from a knife
Come with me to the top with the mic in my hand
Verbal grandslams, leavin your mind in a traffic jam
Im speakin to the masses of all the nations
put your brain on vacation, with no anticipation
of ever leavin my deep thought and insperation
Deadly vibrations, hittin you with no hope
Dreaming of being me, and still wishin you were this dope
I'm the bad guy, the one that stole your lunch money
laughin in your face, while you look at me hungry.
In the SRC our blunts are strickly honey
I know its kinda funny
You can't stop me like Roadrunner and Buggs Bunny
My storys not about the success from rags to riches
in a mic fight, i smack all the fags and bitches
Now im the Hump, the one that'll make your head bump
I'll knock you off you game, and put you in a slump
Keepin rap real when you hear my voice
It's either death or defeat, you never had a choice
Not in the mainstream, im tryin to realize my main dream
Like Eric B and Rakim, ima microphone fiend
But it seems, that the game is goin in the tank
Even i remember the good Lloyd Banks
But the world moves in mysterious ways
So i gotta put down my pen and light us a J
Cuz my only escape is to be up in the clouds
That's when I choose to be the leader of the crowd

Headfried
03-30-2006, 02:08 PM
good...keep writting

Claustrofobic
03-30-2006, 02:39 PM
Damn you remind me a LOT of me dude, I just started writin couple a weeks ago, usually write about 6 or 8 bars a day now, will get into this shit much more soon, but yo you check my threads too I think we are a bit similar considering wordplay and rhyme schedule. If u ever care for a duet just holla

peace

oh I like your shit A LOT by the way, deff good for your first verse

Lyrical Genius
03-31-2006, 07:12 PM
Thanks for the feedback guys