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Albert_Napalm
04-11-2006, 04:34 PM
satellites, blasting them down
putting the last of these clowns back in the ground
spent too much time just laughing around
blow hash by the pound I'm relaxing for now
been a minute since beautiful days
watch yourself because snakes move in unusual ways
stop your health when I shake rooms from a musical stage
nuclear fallout aftermath resident evil
144 doesn't include the president's people
pestillence lethal bosnia fields of death
insomnia steals the breath
fucked up belief systems
I release wisdom to heal what's left
wildin out like insurgents assassinating politicians in Iraq for spare change
so I'ma stick around and see if CIA will teach me how to hijack some airplanes

GuardianOne
04-12-2006, 12:34 AM
You shall have to improve on how you portray your verse. But it was a good verse. And quite some interesting thoughts...
Nice verse, nice title also!

Peace
PS: Keep up the good work

Albert_Napalm
04-12-2006, 05:15 PM
yeah
the title actually came from "Island of Dr. Warcloud"

Father N Dangerous
04-12-2006, 06:35 PM
yup good vocab too..real good read

Albert_Napalm
04-12-2006, 07:22 PM
it's all right, I just felt like typing some shit real quick, it's substance is very random I guess

Albert_Napalm
04-13-2006, 01:05 PM
you can't stop the god
chasing your dreams getting wasted with fiends you lost the cause
walk with frauds
i was head bandaged and red handed when I got off the cross
got you on constant watch, red scare busting rockets off
rotten plots led me down trails of tears and fed me now pales of beer
stone sober drunk my mind blown over, fuck
is this how it's suppose to go, I didn't know my luck
pyroclastic, you can't oppose the flow
seven campfires
no treaties signed to see me die
leave the skies with other forms of breathing life
rappers felt their crystal distractions torn off by missile diffractions
obtaining knowledge and wisdom while kids with pistols are laughing


feedback?

Tha Double-P
04-13-2006, 01:21 PM
yeah its pretty good, but keep working on ur sentence structure and ur flow, keep practising, u got a good imagination!

Albert_Napalm
04-17-2006, 02:22 PM
united snake black magic orchestrating apocalypse
french henchmen the castle of darkness fornicating arsonist
spread the seeds of napalm
now all prophets appear liberating mankind
explosives staying beneath the surface just like land mines
rename the lords carrying flaming swords
brains of war colliding planets
epidermis comprised of granite
hundreds come from the fetus
the second coming of jesus the blind and dumb are defeated
guns from atilla the hun slugs are filling the lungs
hung sums of hundreds depleted
crying corpses flying saucers fire forest
I'll hold your hand when no one on the earth is left
roaming planet with women giving birth to death
accursed breath reading scriptures of psalms
cia tachticians slash voodoo black magicians holding triggers in palms
so when a universal hologram is programmed and replacing the planets
I'll be leaving belief systems wasted to fragments

Locust
04-18-2006, 03:48 PM
every line seemed totally random to me but the multies are sick none the less, keep posting

andrem
04-19-2006, 10:49 PM
word son, you got some hot lines but it lacks a flow. you gotta structure ya lines better and not force too many words in. you definately got potential, stay scriptin b.

Albert_Napalm
04-20-2006, 01:00 PM
shit happens, thnx for the feed