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White N Dangerous
07-02-2005, 11:46 PM
Trials and tribulations got me hopen for new inovations/
Revolations become a #1 because of soul elimination/
Hopen for a better life, rappen about the same subject every night/
Gotta fight to survive, liven in the darkness with no light/


~SKKKKKKKKKKKEEEEEEERRRR~ NOW THE REAL SHIT...

The grains of sand observe the pains of a man with indifference/
When freefalling re-calling shameless plans of increments/
An instant is defined by a second thats combined with a lesson/
Time is perspective a seductive ocean, condutive lotion/
Tastless, invites you to waste it, but sum obstruct the motion/
An instrutive potion of enlightenment, thats heightened when/
Innocence Nixes ignorance inside divine and righteous men/

The past effects the mind, through deja vu, it's passed a second time/
I have to press rewind, far away enough the track makes a U turn/
but few learn from the relationship the past drapes the future/
Flooded with cynical thoughts i release the first notion/
and freeze the time by suspending the earths motion/
A surge potent enough to tear the surfaces texture in a sense/
Like weight is measured in pounds, time is mesured in events/
Text words can't impress, so i'll help you invison this incertinty/
A old timer has a short life, while a teen lives an eternity/
it opens the next chapter and captures the bland design/
that we can live long and leave our footprints on the sands of time/
Draw it, it'll boost progression, and it will erase the proceedings/
It's time to throw away my clocks and put faith back into my feelings/

wat ya'll think?

Sicka than aidZ
07-03-2005, 02:36 AM
its really good, i have a hard time concentrating...so i read half, its a dope drop, keep tearing shit up,.1

I-Legit
07-03-2005, 02:41 AM
Trials and tribulations got me hopen for new inovations/
Revolations become a #1 because of soul elimination/
Hopen for a better life, rappen about the same subject every night/
Gotta fight to survive, liven in the darkness with no light/


~SKKKKKKKKKKKEEEEEEERRRR~ NOW THE REAL SHIT...

The grains of sand observe the pains of a man with indifference/
When freefalling re-calling shameless plans of increments/
An instant is defined by a second thats combined with a lesson/
Time is perspective a seductive ocean, condutive lotion/
Tastless, invites you to waste it, but sum obstruct the motion/
An instrutive potion of enlightenment, thats heightened when/
Innocence Nixes ignorance inside divine and righteous men/

The past effects the mind, through deja vu, it's passed a second time/
I have to press rewind, far away enough the track makes a U turn/
but few learn from the relationship the past drapes the future/
Flooded with cynical thoughts i release the first notion/
and freeze the time by suspending the earths motion/
A surge potent enough to tear the surfaces texture in a sense/
Like weight is measured in pounds, time is mesured in events/
Text words can't impress, so i'll help you invison this incertinty/
A old timer has a short life, while a teen lives an eternity/
it opens the next chapter and captures the bland design/
that we can live long and leave our footprints on the sands of time/
Draw it, it'll boost progression, and it will erase the proceedings/
It's time to throw away my clocks and put faith back into my feelings/

wat ya'll think?
i swear it sounded like you were talkin about masturbating....

but, erm, i didnt undersand your point or your plot if that was suppose to be some type on story........

jjh_38
07-03-2005, 04:11 AM
lmao @ 7th..
This is a pretty good piece man, nice vocab and internals. This shit could be real tight if the flow was smoothed out just a bit... good work tho..peace

GuardianOne
07-03-2005, 07:59 AM
It was a tight verse, got a different style not yet in this temple. Nice verse keep posting.

Peace

White N Dangerous
07-03-2005, 02:55 PM
tight, as you can tell i've switched up everything and got my own shit going on. I hope to see sum of u that i use see back in da day. thxs for all the feed