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Gubbi
05-28-2006, 12:40 PM
Yo, this is some shit i wrote down about the facts of me, and what i belive in.. Credit please :)

Everyday i see the same face, motherfuckers get in the race/
I donít pretend to be somebody that i ainít/
I aint a present but i know who i am, so be a pimp? Bitch i cant/
I wear dirty baggys thatís the way, to day and tomorrow too/
This is my words this is what i do, problem? Well fuck you/
I ainít gonna give up, i donít say stop i keep doing hole-in-oneís/
I ainít Donna, but i live up the life, and i hate cheap lunch and guns/
I am gonna be the man, well i do what i can, and i love The Young Ones/(english television show/
Fuck my lines? That would be like diss Butsa Rhymes, times up/
I scream louder than heavy metal, so get back to your day job/
Iím have nothing against black people, i hate George Bush and his evil/
I hate discrimination, i hate the KKK-orginasation Ė Fuck Ďem!/
I wait a 100 years, to see tears from you, but when i do i say: Love Ďem!/

Gubbi
05-28-2006, 12:42 PM
The Young Ones = English Television Show!

Mr:Merrick
05-28-2006, 02:31 PM
Everyday i see the same face, motherfuckers get in the race/
I donít pretend to be somebody that i ainít/
I aint a present but i know who i am, so be a pimp? Bitch i cant/
I wear dirty baggys thatís the way, to day and tomorrow too/
This is my words this is what i do, problem? Well fuck you/


those lines are awsome yo, the ryme words maybe where a bitt cheap but still quite great.. peace

Gubbi
05-28-2006, 03:13 PM
Hey thanks dude!

Classic
05-28-2006, 05:17 PM
Everyday i see the same face, motherfuckers get in the race/
(Nice attempt at a opener, but this didn't end-rhyme with anything.)
I donít pretend to be somebody that i ainít/
I aint a present but i know who i am, so be a pimp? Bitch i cant/
(Half-rhyme for the end-rhyme here. Good though.)
I wear dirty baggys thatís the way, to day and tomorrow too/
This is my words this is what i do, problem? Well fuck you/
("Today", a single word. Okay here.)
I ainít gonna give up, i donít say stop i keep doing hole-in-oneís/
I ainít Donna, but i live up the life, and i hate cheap lunch and guns/
I am gonna be the man, well i do what i can, and i love The Young Ones/
(Kinda stretched out at the end here. Good here.)
Fuck my lines? That would be like diss Butsa Rhymes, times up/
(This didn't end-rhyme with anything. Not a good line either.)
I scream louder than heavy metal, so get back to your day job/
(Look above, except this line was good..)
Iím have nothing against black people, i hate George Bush and his evil/
(Same.)
I hate discrimination, i hate the KKK-orginasation Ė Fuck Ďem!/
I wait a 100 years, to see tears from you, but when i do i say: Love Ďem!/
(Good closer.)


This was a subpar drop. It could've been better if you used better creativity, and topics. You also had a choppy flow since the end-rhymes were messin' it up for me. Just keep workin' on it.

Gubbi
05-29-2006, 04:39 AM
Yeah yeah, thanks dude. I will work on it :)

Thanks both of you.