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Livin Blade
07-05-2005, 06:05 AM
Ma rhymes,ma technik,makes ya feel agony.
Cause ya now a victim of ma tyranny.
Make ya feel pain for all eternity.
Cause Im an ancient evil divinity.

Ma order,the Black Shadow Disciples.
Rip thru ya rhymes jus like ur principles.
cause they weak like beyond compare.
And that weakness make ya feel despair.

We use shurikens and ninja swords,
as if we were Deadly Ninja Lords.
Pray to ya god for protection,
Bitch,now u in need of Divine intervention
Cause ya aint gonna survive the infection,
caused by our venom sword intersection,

Here come the Shadow Shogun,flyin silently
The weapon of choice,the Livin Blade,cuts efficiently
Leavin ya in the dust,a dim worthless memory
Victim to deadly Ninjutsu weaponry.



Pls comment on this cuz i need help!

crastuf
07-05-2005, 08:24 AM
it's straight, I felt it could have grabbed more attention though

GuardianOne
07-05-2005, 09:42 AM
You have a wild imagination!!!!!!!!!!!
But it was cool,simple. Keep posting.

Peace

Racailla
07-05-2005, 09:43 AM
To be honest, I'm feeling at best the last 4 lines

You need to check if words really rhyme, you know what I mean?

Livin Blade
07-05-2005, 09:45 AM
yea, i dig ya dawg