Nasty Nak's Thred

[VernakuLa]

yo, i'll drop several writtens in here, to recieve feedback on what i can improve on

[mashqauck]

word up vern, sounds nice

post soon

[hollywoodrealty]

ok weakula, u can start by writting dope rhymes rather then weak ones, stay off my dick asshole, peace

[DVSK]

ouch

[mashqauck]

damn whats with the hatred

[hollywoodrealty]

akabobbyd, go in my thread and see how my stalker vern shows me love, peace

[hollywoodrealty]

come see me in the battlefield dumbakular

[VernakuLa]

since we're doing weak play on names

You still suck "FagWood Realty"

ur name sounds like a damn car dealership u stupid fucker

[jallainINS]

yo forget the negativity and drop a verse that i can feed for ya, and check out my verse while ya at it.

[VernakuLa]

tribe dont post anything in here

[hollywoodrealty]

now that we can sit like men and say peace, lets see what u can drop

[VernakuLa]

now that we can sit like men and say peace, lets see what u can drop

lol, that sounded mad funny to me but aight yo, ima be doin some tracks and postin lyrics

PEACE

[T-ribe]

tribe dont post anything in here


Fuck you Fool I'll post anywhere I want too!!! Nucca!!!!

[INF]

Haha, all these post an buzz still aint posted shit as far as rhymes he need to hang it up and call it a day an quit for the last time.

[tha god concept]

my thread is the best on the corp.....lol

it is tho

werd vern drop sum fresh spit

[Da Dishonourable Don]

where's da rhymes at V?

[VernakuLa]

Haha, all these post an buzz still aint posted shit as far as rhymes he need to hang it up and call it a day an quit for the last time.



ur a bitch

and the rhymes are coming soon be patient my babies

[VernakuLa]

a work in progress... from a collab wit White n dangerous about life

As my life cycles, rhymes at a whirling peak
Passed by high trials, times were I couldn’t speak
I stare vague at old photos, pounding heart, I scream inside
The snare plays to mold vocals, resounding charge, I free a sigh
I sculpted my face to my own liking, herbs can’t talk shit
Foldin pages I feel enlightened, words, rants in chopped print
I was birthed in to a dungeon; I don’t feel right in this scene
Where the perves go clubbin’, Why won’t I survive in this dream?


again a work in progress ill hit this up tommorow

[VernakuLa]

no fizzle?

[jallainINS]

As my life cycles, rhymes at a whirling peak
Passed by high trials, times were I couldn’t speak

this is an okay opener, could be improved

I stare vague at old photos, pounding heart, I scream inside
The snare plays to mold vocals, resounding charge, I free a sigh

this is the best bar of it clearly. definately layed it down here

I sculpted my face to my own liking, herbs can’t talk shit
Foldin pages I feel enlightened, words, rants in chopped print

solid, not as good as the two before it, but definately nice

I was birthed in to a dungeon; I don’t feel right in this scene
Where the perves go clubbin’, Why won’t I survive in this dream?



decent closer, if this is the closer. could be stronger, but it doesnt take anything away from the rap. obviously this verse is longer so im lookin forward to seein/hearin the full version.