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alayyar
07-06-2005, 05:09 AM
Lords Hand recreational hazard death to all killing me gentley devil in light God will fall i will be victorious murder from poll to poll the stink of my influence money spent roll to roll i got my hands on your eternally blasfomous soul i will win this time gain power win for all completely disrupting times ever so delicate halls destroying creation with the world biggest menacing ball revenge in mind i pull you to the depths of hell convince you that your soul is what you need to sell pin it to my chest and try to pass the pearly gate with a fake id obceneley horass these assed out saints teach them how to sass the almighty himself common now lets start the class

GuardianOne
07-06-2005, 09:21 AM
Your verse was hard to follow. And the rhymes well i would not want to go into that. But i noticed you used some word effects (reversing or repeating-quite interesting). Your subject has a lot on it. But i can imagin the way you tried to bring it. Keep posting.

Peace

the messiah
07-07-2005, 03:33 AM
nice wording, but needs structure. peace