basho
07-13-2006, 05:13 PM
Peace all. I'm attempting to come on a conscious tip here and shine through for the God. I don't claim 5% never having undergone any lessons though I do identify with their purpose: to unite all human families with the God, the Reflector, the Universal Mind....99 names; pick one. This is the first rhyme I ever wrote and I have no idea if it's capable of registering the way I want it. There's more but my time is limited. Any feedback much appreciated....
Shake the sediment
on bullshit sentiment
you lost your scrolls but I saw where they went
so I vent
supreme fullfilment
from this mighty testament
you get rent
asunder
what a tragic blunder
I flip you over under
my mouth echos thunder
you nasty prick
I swallow obscurity like Moby Dick
for what you acting sick?
I puncture skull with the ink stick
unleash lyric flames lick brain like wick
and melt wax
I weild the small axe
for a big tree
catch the fire like Marley
and have a cookout
roasting devils inside out
then lead the ignorant by the snout
to the river
drink the water it's not bitter
as we flow ever deeper like the ancient scripture
you get the picture
like Van Goh
I'm in the spectrum like indigo
Christ robe rainbow glow
circle walls of Jericho
withstand furnace like Abednigo
Shadrach or Meshack
track the mind like a map
from the relentless attack
Nebechadnezzar gets a spinal tap
knowledge the true and living fact
or get snapped in the trap
gums go flappity, flap, flap
what follows? rat-a-tat-tat
guts go splat
in the Valley of Jehosephat
I stand; remain wrecking shit like Chow Yun Fat
why is that?
must be the clean digestive track
I sip the mint tea you eat gabage like the rat
mass stack of bacon back
your poor diet lay you flat
like the rat race
running rapid pace
absent of all grace
until I slap my palm on your face
make all man one race
the youth pay for the older mistakes
save the babies
That's one. How's that?
Another short one:
Vanity of vanities; all is vanity
the devils double face perpetuates insanity
the greatest sin is poverty
the few stacking paper like monopoly
expose the many to mephistopheles
ignorance and misery
the sum and the total
my equation the jade flesh immortal
throw your punk ass through the portal
the conjurer Doctor Strange
make dimensions re-arrange
???
peace
Shake the sediment
on bullshit sentiment
you lost your scrolls but I saw where they went
so I vent
supreme fullfilment
from this mighty testament
you get rent
asunder
what a tragic blunder
I flip you over under
my mouth echos thunder
you nasty prick
I swallow obscurity like Moby Dick
for what you acting sick?
I puncture skull with the ink stick
unleash lyric flames lick brain like wick
and melt wax
I weild the small axe
for a big tree
catch the fire like Marley
and have a cookout
roasting devils inside out
then lead the ignorant by the snout
to the river
drink the water it's not bitter
as we flow ever deeper like the ancient scripture
you get the picture
like Van Goh
I'm in the spectrum like indigo
Christ robe rainbow glow
circle walls of Jericho
withstand furnace like Abednigo
Shadrach or Meshack
track the mind like a map
from the relentless attack
Nebechadnezzar gets a spinal tap
knowledge the true and living fact
or get snapped in the trap
gums go flappity, flap, flap
what follows? rat-a-tat-tat
guts go splat
in the Valley of Jehosephat
I stand; remain wrecking shit like Chow Yun Fat
why is that?
must be the clean digestive track
I sip the mint tea you eat gabage like the rat
mass stack of bacon back
your poor diet lay you flat
like the rat race
running rapid pace
absent of all grace
until I slap my palm on your face
make all man one race
the youth pay for the older mistakes
save the babies
That's one. How's that?
Another short one:
Vanity of vanities; all is vanity
the devils double face perpetuates insanity
the greatest sin is poverty
the few stacking paper like monopoly
expose the many to mephistopheles
ignorance and misery
the sum and the total
my equation the jade flesh immortal
throw your punk ass through the portal
the conjurer Doctor Strange
make dimensions re-arrange
???
peace