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cofface killah69
09-07-2006, 04:35 PM
Dayz wit stormy weather, findin wayz to get myself together

ive scaled mountains with cliffhangers, so high, i could write god a letter

"Dear Lord our world is both unusual and cruel

and now its overtaken by some C average students rule

fake terrorists demolishing tall towers

not the middle east goverment, responsiblity is on OURS

so lord, undo our wrongings and make them into rights

hoping somedy the whole world will follow the right light."

the succes will be enormous, fixing up the worlds status

most of the shit will be madness, like playing ping pong with atoms

wait, who am i trying to kid, the world will never be like that

ive run away from my mind and cant seem to find my way back

using the illumination of headlights to guid my way home

i walk and ponder this subject, wondering if i am alone

finding lies in the governments "truths"

people who voted for kerry and not bush

lets sit back and smoke some tree, smoke some silver kush

we chill and watch the TV's lies, bullshit now cuz we so high

we gotta stand up, do somethin, somethin we'll empithize

leagalization of marijuana keeps the blood in our eyes.

flowin blood, smoke in lungs, gives you a whole new perspection

what people need is to get high before elections

ArcherPriest
09-07-2006, 07:32 PM
has potential fo sho... keep droppin

Grongle
09-08-2006, 04:59 AM
Not bad 4 your 2nd