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SickSide
11-22-2006, 02:11 AM
electrical but well selected
so surprising but quite expected
sounds so good when i write them down
king of the mike so gimme that crown
im a regal royal but i just dont know
even i cant predict my flow
sometimes to fast to move my own lips
ill try anyway and kick the hips
im a hasty headlong nimble mc
quick proficient also lively
full of animation on the stage
guarenteed to rattle your cage
im a lyrical genious - so serious
ok-party crew-dont make a fuss
the crook is rough enough!

Killer Falcon
11-22-2006, 03:38 AM
this ok. a good effort for a first verse. some decent lines for a first verse, flow was ok as well. not too many sylabbles in each bar, which is good, many people on here have problems with that. keep it up and you should be onto something decent.

peace

J.T.S.
11-22-2006, 11:22 AM
shouldv'e kept it going a little longer, just when you get into it.
You adrubtly stop, i see potential in ya style so far so good. just remember when you rhyme, rhyme what you believe is true to you.