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Meridian Logix
07-14-2005, 07:15 PM
a verse and chorus for a mixtape me and my boy doin

ill tear your face of cuzzin/
leave you lookin like you went chain saw jugglin/
sray bombs, see the napalm bublin/
got my axe lookin like an insane paul bunyan/
i dont see your lyrics, like i was ray charles/
prolly pink in its appearence, covered in gay sparkles/
carry a knife, im a scarry guy so/
ill pull the plug on your life, like you was teri shivo/
im spittin these horror hits/
leave you hangin from your balls like christmas tree ornamnets/
its collesum time/
sceaze your life, i rock the carpe diam mind/
leave you lookin like barney, purple and green/
my knife infects with termanil disease/
slice necks with surgical ease/
diced heads hang from vertical beams/

we intellegent heavenly/
you remeber us like you had an elephant memery/
make more inscions in your body/
were like something out the horror visions of Ghotti/
we psychological crazy/
so when we say that we'll skin you its a possible maby/
we got closets of babies/
chek outside your window we been stalking you latley/

raezah
07-14-2005, 07:34 PM
i like it it's good

Meridian Logix
07-14-2005, 07:37 PM
thanks, feed back is always appreciated

KBilly
07-14-2005, 08:18 PM
I liked it, it was some good shit

Meridian Logix
07-14-2005, 10:22 PM
thanks man

PsYkOsUs
07-14-2005, 11:12 PM
decent... some good lines (though played out) and some filler... some good multies... spellin' was terrible, but i'm picky like that... keep practicin', and you'll definitely get better...

PEACE

PSY

Meridian Logix
07-15-2005, 12:11 AM
decent... some good lines (though played out) and some filler... some good multies... spellin' was terrible, but i'm picky like that... keep practicin', and you'll definitely get better...

PEACE

PSY
haha, ya i dont usually spell chek my verses... thanks for constructive critisism, i gotta long time to practice and im using every second...

Rebel_INS
07-15-2005, 06:17 AM
Decent shit bro, keep it up

PsYkOsUs
07-15-2005, 10:17 PM
haha, ya i dont usually spell chek my verses... thanks for constructive critisism, i gotta long time to practice and im using every second...
that's what i like to hear...

PEACE

PSY

PS. spellcheck is your friend... LOL

GuardianOne
07-16-2005, 05:32 AM
It was a decent verse, i suppose you were busting. Ya your speeling was not checked. Your content was not creative as i think you are able to . You must improve


Peace
PS:Keep posting