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hollywoodrealty
12-10-2006, 09:36 PM
give it a listen, click the link,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=401654&songID=4762084

GameOfDeath
12-10-2006, 09:58 PM
Feeling the intro. Ahh, your vocal mix is weird. Beat is sick as hell You did it? First verse sounds a little off beat to me in some parts. Like when you say "Remember to keep" in the second verse. The lyrics is dope but your delivery at the beginning is killing the vibe. And your cadence seems off in a couple of places wh. The line Bloody murder redrum breadcrumbs is ill though. I think your last line should've been my realty's hollywood. then the outro the talking throws the rhythm off again and the other was corny.

You got a ill concept here on some Killah Priest/GZA type vibe but your execution is off. I'd rerecord this. Hope that was constructive.