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NASTY NAK
12-24-2006, 03:11 PM
I'm almost 18 and woke up from of a coma
Base pipes, late nights, smelling dungeon aroma's
Insprisoned and trapped, my whole living is crap
Stimulated everyday by odd visions of rap
The beauty is cool, but the game is misleading
Having no bread after buying j's on the weekend
I'm slaving and thinkin, how im gonna stay up n breathing
After im done praying and dreaming, its all shameless and eating
So I hit the pipe to forget my pain and sorrows
Stay up late at night, just to save Tommorow
Death never came and got em, though it doesn't mean shit
Sum it up, I'm a druggie fuck...live by other means, BITCH!

for a project i realalalalalallly wanna do

feed please on how i could make it better

noel411
12-24-2006, 09:21 PM
Pretty nice verse you fucken little creep. Could tighten up a few lines maybe. This line I wasn't feeling and didn't understand the second half of, "After im done praying and dreaming, its all shameless and eating". The rest of it was good enough. A few nice lines in there.

Father N Dangerous
12-26-2006, 12:34 AM
nice feelin the beggnign the most short but sweet, would like to see more from you good short read stay up kepe blesin

Visionz
12-26-2006, 12:41 AM
feed please on how i could make it better

you could start by learning to respect the roots of the art muhfucka

http://wutang-corp.com/forum/showthread.php?t=30839&page=2

NASTY NAK
12-26-2006, 01:29 AM
damn vern...
you really don't know hip-hop. lol.

damn spoken...
My right testicle is huge. lol.

how come u dont post here anymore?

ArcherPriest
12-26-2006, 11:15 AM
pretty nice drop... i didnt understand that shameless and eating line either tho.. this line was dope...Stay up late at night, just to save Tommorow