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Olive Oil Goombah
02-12-2007, 10:45 PM
Gutter raps saran wrapped up now back up/
My rat traps you cheesy dont eat it u fat fuck/
Seek luck, invisible flows like black holes/
shakespeare prose, ears froze like carbones/
mob zone,smart darts i shot dons, the ex con/
im proton nucleic attract electrons/
u bronze, im gold, holed up carpenter cups/
sole control global leave u red like ground chuck/
beefed up, i loan shark with the martial art/
trick marks like pool sharks middle aged and dark/
fuck quarks, i ignite space like race riots/
rape hiltons fuck diets ill buffet at the hyatt/
stay quiet, or lie like rap album pictures/
my crew ironman cal ripken-like fixtures/
indie wit a twist on ur set buena vista/

J.T.S.
02-13-2007, 02:59 PM
Liked the whole piece, beginning to the end. Good read.

Bigot Hitman
02-13-2007, 07:48 PM
Sounds like u left one line off on the end, substance that i could understand was good, didn't really get the metaphors. The flow except for the closer, was even for the most part though. 7.0/10

Olive Oil Goombah
02-13-2007, 08:13 PM
Lemme break it down for ya, just for fucks sake, cuz i wasnt just writin jibberish, but i could understand....

Gutter raps saran wrapped up now back up/
My rat traps you cheesy dont eat it u fat fuck/
(SELF EXPLANATORY)

Seek luck, invisible flows like black holes/
shakespeare prose, ears froze like carbones/
(BLACK HOLES ARE TECHNICALLY INVISIBLE, EARS FROZE LIKE CARBONES REFERS TO GOODFELLAS WHEN THEY FROZE FRANKY CARBONE IN THE MEAT TRUCK)

mob zone,smart darts i shot dons, the ex con/
im proton nucleic attract electrons/
(SELF EXPLANATORY..ELECTRONS CIRCLE PROTONS)

u bronze, im gold, holed up carpenter cups/
sole control global leave u red like ground chuck/
(HOLED UP CARP. CUP REFERS TO THE HOLY GRAIL,INDIANA JONES 3, SECOND LINE, NO EXPLANATION NEEDED)

beefed up, i loan shark with the martial art/
trick marks like pool sharks middle aged and dark/
(MIDDLE AGED AND DARK WAS A PLAY ON THE DARK/MID AGES, AND THE LACK OF ENLIGHTENMENT AND SMARTS A LA POOL SHARK MARKS)

fuck quarks, i ignite space like race riots/
rape hiltons fuck diets ill buffet at the hyatt/
(QUARKS ARE SMALLER THAN PARTICLES, AND ARE SAID TO HAVE IGNITED THE UNIVERSE, HENCE IGNITE SPACE...ETC)

stay quiet, or lie like rap album pictures/
my crew ironman cal ripken-like fixtures/
indie wit a twist on ur set buena vista/

Olive Oil Goombah
03-23-2007, 05:57 PM
bizzump!

Sun Supreme
03-30-2007, 06:27 PM
That cool that you can break yo shit down like that. U would be surprised how many people can't do that.

Mattlocka
04-09-2007, 05:42 PM
nice rap wise Nicky tooch touch to it

Peace Mattlocka damege oppenents