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Dr Sleepwalker
03-10-2007, 03:54 AM
Alrite, follow me on this one..


I am what I am, and thats what I have been/
Imma inflate those flats n' watch em' back spin/
Part of a bad dream.. my hearts dis-card for sad things/
Hard, because I played my part in bad things/
I hold this art, like my soul plays the part/
Lyrical mozzart.. dusty piano/
Ugly diablo, struck me, and dumped me in Seattle/
Never struck me as odd, why I never loved me no God/
Lovely with no heart, you must trust my bleedin' lips/
When I say, duck from the lust of the screamin witch/
Trust in love from the reading chick../
Your eyes listen better than your ears do/
Your cries live inside my letter that hears you/

noel411
03-10-2007, 04:31 AM
Hey man, that was pretty interesting, but I didn't understand some of it. Not sure if it was metaphorical or what. You reckon you might break it down for me?

Dr Sleepwalker
03-10-2007, 04:39 AM
ya man, i think abstract.. it all makes sense bruv...

jus let me know what your not sure about and i'll break it down

smokebongoncliff
03-10-2007, 05:18 AM
but they want the jewel it aint hard to tell

noel411
03-10-2007, 05:35 PM
When I say, duck from the lust of the screamin witch/
Trust in love from the reading chick../
Your cries live inside my letter that hears you/
Ok, could you break down these lines for me?

Dr Sleepwalker
03-10-2007, 09:25 PM
aite forsure..

from my past, I kinda wentt fer the more seen, obnoxious.. popular kinda girl, and got fucked up in a relationship, when ther was a quiet girl that saw deep into me and i kinda ignored cuz i was occupied fuckin wit the other crazy bitch.. i talked wit the quiet girl, but she was deep into her whole skool stuff 'n all.. n wen shyt fell apart wit the crazy bitch, it was to late to go for the other girl cuz she left for college.. n i gave a letter to her friend to give to her and didnt get a response.. cuz she felt hurt n wat not

Dr Sleepwalker
03-10-2007, 09:26 PM
and not appreciated

Dr Sleepwalker
03-20-2007, 04:47 PM
I slept walked,.. woke up inside of a sharks stomach../
Threw my sword up and cut the hearts summit../
Cut up from it.. what's up, jumped up out em'/
Stood up from it.. fucked up, woulda sunk with out em'../
Walked to a palm tree, climbed up, talked to a monkey/
Passed me some coke, dimed up, I walked the long beach/
Jacked up runnin', fell in the sand/
A hand grabbed somethin',.. hell's in the land../
Pulled me in.. I laughed, I'm half departed/
It's all peace tho, I'm just back where I started/
Hell's home, welcomed at the door-mat/
Checked it for my key, walked in, pushed the door back/

Sun Supreme
03-20-2007, 05:00 PM
that shit is crazy. was this a real dream? I ain't even scoring this shit we'll just call it crazy.

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
03-20-2007, 11:00 PM
that is real crazy shit loved the concept homes

Dr Sleepwalker
03-21-2007, 04:03 PM
respect bruva's... I don't really see alotta feedback on my rhymes on this site, so its good ta hear that a couple headz appreciatin' my word play... much respect from BK fam..

Still wanna know what all of ya thought bout it..??

Dr Sleepwalker
04-08-2007, 09:26 AM
Inspired.. by the rose she sat on/
Desired... by all those who she passed from/
Now her laughs gone, too ugly now to even keep her mask on/
My honey's staffs gone, too lovely to even leave her mask on../
She walks like nothin' matters.. talks like nothin' chatters/
Hope's for nothin', but nothin' captures her emptiness in strugglin' chapters/
She's too far to touch now, she's too scarr'd to blush now../
Nothin' inside her, I love her, can't stand there's somethin' inside her/
It's killin' her, I've watched for a minute,../
Lived it, and died with her.. comitted, shyt was vivid/
I woke up, she didn't.. crawled out my grave to visit hers/
Kissed her headstone, sprawled out my pain to finish words/
I'm finished, it hurts..


THoughtz?

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
04-09-2007, 12:07 AM
Nice Love The Verse Short N To Da Point

Mattlocka
04-09-2007, 04:26 PM
I was like nice when I read it.

Dr.Sleepwalker when get a battle let me know so I can read it.But if not
I still look for other drop.

noel411
04-15-2007, 04:31 AM
Ahhh, refreshing. It's good to see a creative writer come through here once in a while. I like these verses a lot. Definately appreciate your style. Your style of writing is quite interesting. Not just on some straight forward bland lines. I like the thoughtful use of language and varied rhyme patterns. Your lines leave something for the reader to explore for themselves. Keep up the good work.

Dr Sleepwalker
04-15-2007, 09:03 AM
feedback means alot comin' from a vet, i love seein' people read and respect my writing, and i mad appreciate your break down of the writin' and how it made you felt.. pea2e

Locust
04-15-2007, 10:37 AM
i loved your last verse, these lines in particulair

She walks like nothin' matters.. talks like nothin' chatters/
Hope's for nothin', but nothin' captures her emptiness in strugglin' chapters/