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TheWriter07
04-18-2007, 07:06 PM
Still (COLD), now I’m Gassed with words my dialect is pneumonia in Motor Oil/
Nympho Arsonist, making you “FUCKS” ~burn-down~ till its Syphilis in the Soil/
Dyslexic author, I write Entire bodies of water into de-hydration/
Alter My “MIND” to the point my Lobotomies are prayed on by entire Congregations/
Absorb war tote Eleven “9”s in my (iris), Indent Pentagons Where My Sight is/
Every *JOINT* is painfully –ON- Point like a Hand full of needles and arthritis/

TheWriter07
04-19-2007, 06:17 PM
uppin

Bigot Hitman
04-19-2007, 06:48 PM
The last two lines are pretty good, everthing else was stretched out and below average writing. 1.5/5