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Majestic
04-26-2007, 03:39 PM
put the adrenalin in the suringe, pump it into my veins,
recievin hyper hype speedin straight into my brain,
eyes dilated, skin colour faded, tongue inflated,
who ever said this shit was over rated?
outta space, smak my bitch up, spitfire,
listenin to prodigy as they fuel my fire,
unaware that my heads bobin to the beat,
stumble on my knees as i try and find my feet,
lookin in the mirror, he looks even higher than i am,
hes gotta grin on his face, hes listenin to pendulum-slam,
i wanna kill the man whos lookin bak,
he put a gun to his head then the room faded to black.

J.T.S.
04-27-2007, 10:38 AM
put the adrenalin in the suringe, pump it into my veins,
recievin hyper hype speedin straight into my brain

i liked how you started the flow ill.
lookin in the mirror, he looks even higher than i am,
hes gotta grin on his face, hes listenin to pendulum-slam
And these lines were good too, ony thing you shouldv'e kept it flowing.

Majestic
04-28-2007, 09:37 AM
cheers m8, id like sum more feedbak plz

Dr Sleepwalker
04-28-2007, 11:53 AM
it's brief, but I liked how you wrote it, it flowed nice
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