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SID
05-01-2007, 08:11 AM
Bones of atomized ash, gravesites packed, bounds of beaten bodies brash
Mounds of bloody trash, pounds of unholy cash
Sly slash, die fast, swarms of killer bees in soulless stance
Storms of sinner disease stacked, lord I need release.. fast
I breathe only for the peace task, lease the beast mask
To the weak deceased mass, compound the clash of lost class
Astound with a mash of lost tasks, I freeze from the last lash
Laciration of my peoples dash for freedom of unjust attack
No life left intact when you resort to catastrophic contact combat
Diabolic tracks of earth crack-in tanks and blank shanks
Until stained with a childs chilling chance of emanci—pation
Stance, slain before it came to pass, I dash to find the reason for this elas-tic
Mad-ness, strands of landless lifless cand-idates for deduction minus
Inside us we can that the force that blinds us is the one that also guides us
Justly binds us, times us, our actions find us, in a place highness
Or in a place of terror and torment timeless, so I give a “little kindness


feedback welcome!

OTB
05-01-2007, 01:51 PM
nice- feelin this one sidious

remindz me of one i wrote called 'HELL'
i'll post it on this thread tomorrow if i remember to

it started out..

unleashing a thrashing beast
weeping and gnashing of teeth
binge eating heaping feasts of bleeding beef, fasting's brief
...
i dont remember the rest, i wrote it a while ago-

nice tho sidious, 'bonez of ash' iz dope-

peace-

noel411
05-01-2007, 07:32 PM
Nice drop. Seemed to change direction for the last 6 bars or so. Line structure and rhyme patterns were pretty nice. Content was good. Flowed pretty well. Good piece overall.

SID
05-03-2007, 03:28 PM
thanks........ any more feedback peeps