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Ebo
08-01-2005, 11:40 AM
I'm about to tell a story that isn't unique.
I got four eight-fours and two-tens a week.
I get up, go to work, I eat and I sleep.
Surrounded by shallowness i try to stay deep.
Submerged in myself, way below the surface.
Sometimes relaxed, though mostly nervous.

martyr
08-01-2005, 01:41 PM
....this has a nice start.... keep going with it... add another ten bars or more***... make it complete... maybe tell us why it isnt unique... if you start writting and feel you cant write anymore, don't just post it uncomplete, wait awhile, maybe you'll add some or rewrite what you have and make it better... just a though....


for everyone, not directed specifically at you Ebo:

***ONE BAR IS ONE LINE. YOU ARE STUPID IF YOU THINK OTHER WISE. A BAR IS READ OVER (NORMALY) FOUR BEATS ON A MEASURE. THAT IS ALSO A LINE. TWO LINE DOES NOT EQUAL TWO BARS. TWO LINES MAY BE A PASSAGE BUT IT IS NOT A BAR. A BAR IS A LINE IS A BAR IS A LINE. THIS RIDICULOUS CONCEPT IS ALL OVER THE INTERNET LIKE PORN AND IT IS JUST STUPID. SORRY, THANKS FOR YOUR TIME.

Ebo
08-01-2005, 01:46 PM
thanks for the advice, much appreciated

tekunique
08-01-2005, 02:16 PM
lol.. yeah.. a line that fits into the '1, 2, 3, 4' count is a bar. let it be known..

Ebo
08-01-2005, 02:19 PM
...so how many bars are this than??? I'm confused. :)

tekunique
08-01-2005, 02:48 PM
I'm about to tell a story that isn't unique.
I got four eight-fours and two-tens a week.
I get up, go to work, I eat and I sleep.
Surrounded by shallowness i try to stay deep.
Submerged in myself, way below the surface.
Sometimes relaxed, though mostly nervous.
you learn to speak and talk but dont listen.
us humans have 2 ears and 1 mouth for a reason.
think 2wice before you speak 3times before you act.
learn to separate gossip non sense bullshit from fact.
try what i suggested and come see me in the morning.
youll be an individual takin part in the tru art thats forming.

[wast goin at you Ebo, just adding..]

martyr
08-01-2005, 03:14 PM
...this is six...

GuardianOne
08-02-2005, 09:56 AM
It rhymes yes, but is a bit too direct to make the most sense out of it.But has its own realness to it, kind of discribes what you go through but although evereyone knows that there is more to that, than what you have mentioned (i suppose that's what makes this verse a bit boring- cause there's more to that).

Peace
PS: Expound more

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
08-02-2005, 08:04 PM
Switch onto six click off the knicks
They losing shit now we got brown better gold now/
Force ya hand close plants armedgeddon past to present
Leaving local residents dusted like angels get flustered/
Grab the gat oil the snubs get emcees catch eím wit a 22
Sticking blue for his suede shoes gamma rays didnít hit doc doom/
Blew this baffoon know the rules or get school scholaring hollaring off the chain break the links we ainít slaves of this industry getting paid/
Iím independent lyrically wealthy put cha top up leave eím dumpped cuz their gimmicks stunk worst pussy that ainít been cleaned in a month/