View Full Version : What you think off these bars

bad boy T
10-05-2007, 08:42 AM
I start the bars my pen goes automatic
Touch the stars through dreams and more than tactics
Get my swagga through all the graphics
Don't trip and stagger like a guy with daggers and axes
Soldiers who bustle, tussel, hustle, struggle like smackdown
You no you gonna back down in the back ground where I put my rap down
What's that now, we feel the holocaust
Obsticles, binoculars, the life cycle to do with the philosophers
Prosperous 7 ring octopus
We charge down like a rhinoserous
I'm a veteran still going up a rank
Taking out tanks with my bare hands untill the world war blank
End of crematorium close the curtains
Coffee stiring opened up like a surgeon I'm not carrying your burden
I'm a ledgend in my own strategy
Hold soldiers up untill the end of the calamity
Let the bacon sizzle in the pan
Get down throw a whole missle at your clan
Untill your shit goes bang and clang
Then your whole army starts screaming man down !
We going global in the continents
Prodominence we prominent straight up with the confidence
No documents we feel the opulence
We gamble the sample and live with the consequence
Rims on the benz feeling suspense
Protection fortification in our defence
But it's not enough if we can take lead and succeed
Unless we can take lead and succeed in peace

10-05-2007, 04:41 PM
It was irright b-boy yo lets battle.

10-20-2007, 11:42 AM
i felt content was lacked for multisyllable rhymes chemes in the begining... some structural errors possibly... lagged toward the middle to end...flow was on point for the middle... keep at it...

10-22-2007, 09:59 AM
U have potential to be ill just keep writing.
Spound better than alot of mainstream fiends.

10-22-2007, 11:04 AM
U have potential to be ill just keep writing.
Spound better than alot of mainstream fiends.

agreed cha lyrics were on-point but ya structural errors and lacked many multis