First rhyme

[horrorflick soulja]

aight, heres my first post as a new memember hope yall like it -

Feel the rhythem feel the beat
blowin away n**** but not wid da heat
never except defeat
if need be leave a white boy bleedin in his sleep
so what ya know how ta creep
try dat round me, leave a six feet deep
but i keep goin
keep my lyrical verses flowin
not knowin, where to start or stop
never fall from da top
try ta cop
every jewel out there
so yall n**** can stop and stare
hopin this is what the lord sees fair
I'll scare ya ta death, like the boogey man in ya nightmare
so feel the beat and love the rhyme
would've kept goin but i ran out of time

[Mattlocka]

Good if you go a little long i could picture what you trying to say
overall i give it 7/10.

[martyr]

...this shit sucks man, first should be your last... STOP rhyming...