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singodsuperior
11-22-2007, 02:52 AM
Dazzle Your Mind With Subatomic Particles

In The Attic, Beware Of Your Marbles

Split Electrodes And Watch The Light Strobe

From The Dead I Arose As You Sat And Froze

Hold The Globe On My Back, Computerized Like A Mac

Positive I Attack To Bring That Old Thing Back

Its Addictive Like Crack Hold This Sacred Jewel

Because Now I Walk In The Realm Of Fools

Drown In Pools Of My Blood To Keep Yourself Up

Underground You Can See Cumulus Clouds

Amplify The Sound As I Read Aloud

Abhor Other People When You Fight With Yourself

Unspoken Wealth Go Deep Within Myself

I Go Stealth For My Spiritual Health

With Absrtact Logic My Flows Melodic, Able To Be Irrelevant And Never Go Off Topic

I Bounce On Stars To Shatter Pluto's Moons

My Hand Froze As I Tried To Bring Doom

Flooded Mars With My Sonic Booms

Rest At A Lodge While I Took My Shrooms

KERZO
11-30-2007, 10:19 AM
I'm liking the spit singodsuperior...

you kinda got the same mind concept as myself, i look forward to seeing some more rhymes on here :hooray:

singodsuperior
12-11-2007, 09:46 PM
My scientific notation brings out my creation/have remedy for self just like an asian/i'm persuadin any mc that fakin to drop the mic so it can be vacant/to the 4th power i devour, bite off the top of mics that were just left sour/in the dark hour, i stalk paper with my pen/evidence is left from the ink and the gems/others use white-out to take an easy route/its pathetic you will never get the message/traveled 10 billion years at the speed of light to see the universe/intergalatic warzone the milky way immersed/the last shall be first beautiful nightmare is cursed/leave in a hearse actin inrovert/myplatonic ways will keep you dazed/use technology from russia to bring about haze/the secret agent eradicates electronic smog/then where we went wrong.

BLIZZARD.9
12-30-2007, 11:53 PM
I Call Niggaz Acne... Cause They Walk Around Wit Parachutes Full Of Spoons And Tricks... Fallen Out They Parachutes... I Be The Brick Mason... Whpping Up Hella Toot... Cosmic Slop, Germ Anthropologist... Fuck What U Heard I Study Weed Biologist... Pill Poppas Couldnt Swollow This... Call Me Jack Black... And I Shallow Hal All This Shit.

singodsuperior
12-31-2007, 02:16 AM
bend time with my mind, still A niggas shine drinking red wine

chillin sippin arabian sunnani from a civil war chronicle

i spawn different agents of masons they invadin'

every government agency that loves me sacred

singodsuperior
12-31-2007, 07:34 PM
I Call Niggaz Acne... Cause They Walk Around Wit Parachutes Full Of Spoons And Tricks... Fallen Out They Parachutes... I Be The Brick Mason... Whpping Up Hella Toot... Cosmic Slop, Germ Anthropologist... Fuck What U Heard I Study Weed Biologist... Pill Poppas Couldnt Swollow This... Call Me Jack Black... And I Shallow Hal All This Shit.

WERE YOU TRYIN TO MAKE FUN OF MY LYRICS?LOL

Lost Sun
01-01-2008, 01:29 AM
THIS WAS STRAIGHT MAN...

Its Addictive Like Crack Hold This Sacred Jewel

Because Now I Walk In The Realm Of Fools

Drown In Pools Of My Blood To Keep Yourself Up

^^MY FAVORITE LINEZ.....KEEP IT UP FAM

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singodsuperior
01-01-2008, 04:52 AM
Thanks A Lot Fam

TeknicelStylez
01-01-2008, 08:53 PM
It's decent. Your rhyme schemes are kind of simplistic and the flow gets broken up in a lot of areas that it shouldn't be. You should try expanding and rhyming multiple syllables so you can be more original. A lot of the words you're rhyming now have been done to death and it makes your verse sound redundant, which is why everyone should incorporate multi's, it's the only way to keep hip hop progressing in written form. Good work though, at least you're attempting to drop knowledge.

singodsuperior
01-01-2008, 09:05 PM
Thanks For The Feed

KERZO
01-03-2008, 05:54 AM
you should put up some more rhymes chief...

singodsuperior
01-03-2008, 10:27 PM
Here You Go:



Metaphorically Speaking , Yall Hypocrites Like Pharisess

Your Life Looks Bleek Being What You're Not, Defeat

The Suns Heat Ground Temp 7,000 Degrees

Atomic War With A Sword The Earth's Crust 1 Thrust

Exodus Is A Must Breathe In Angels Dust

Drip With Blood From War In Atlantis Pray To Me Like A Mantis

I Wrote In Script When The Sun Lit

Payed Constatine A Visit Im On A Mission

Those Who Follow The Stauros, Thats Your Decision

Wake Up To Breakfeast With A Royal Sibling At Day Break

Holy Wars Bybonic Plague Uncivilized Ways

It Left Me Amazed Don't Know What To Say

Its Okay, Superior In My Own Way

The Desert Is Where You Lay In A Mirage

Frostbitten Stories Of Guts And Glory Are No More To Me

KERZO
01-07-2008, 05:59 AM
keep up the good work chief

J.T.S.
01-11-2008, 01:20 PM
I rate you up there with Jeru, and Afu ra!
Fucking scientifical madness!!

singodsuperior
01-11-2008, 05:13 PM
thanks a lot for the feedback

J.T.S.
01-14-2008, 12:58 PM
You should get more feed man your a beast lyrically.

KERZO
01-17-2008, 10:17 AM
Yeah i agree with J.T.S, you should be getting more feedback for writing wicked rhymes like ya do...

I just wrote this lil verse while listening to 'The Pillage' instrumental, I can honestly write verses to that beat ALL day and never dry up, that shit sparks ya mind -

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My sharp darts spit faster than a MK rifle
I stifle all talent and send it off the eiffel
Tower top drop, I chop up haters around the clock
Dead ahead, stop, saved from a potential drop
I make phonies quake when they make the mistake
Brainsick styles cured from the eternal lake
At the bottom is where the low end of the gene pool hang around
Surround sound underground but ya'll nowhere to be found

It's the renowned Fermex, so light up ya cigarettes
The ones with the weed in em, best not forget
I smoke a bong before i walk out on stage and shock
With rhymes that kill swifter than a red-tailed hawk
Paradox abstract thoughts, tie knots, bred a scotsman
I stand up and get counted as a man with no suntan
But i'm closer to the american dream, a fan of the supreme
Mind god spirit duality than most cats aint never seen

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