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AcidPhosphate69
11-30-2007, 11:48 AM
Some shit I came up with a in June or some shit.

Slack jaw dropped, stop look listen
Drool lip glisten, slob hobble hunched
Bunches baked, staked an' taken
Mistaked awaken, heart flutter
Breast place quaken, start an' stutter
Sheep guided, tried and true
Smitten children, wide eyed few
Math the path, most never grasp the task
Ask little, spittle drips backwards tip
Follow guiding star, far shining above par
Marred in thought, sparred for not
Nothin, flesh an' stuffin, huff an' puffing
Waste of space, graced with taste
Savor the flavor far too late
Disintigrated ingrates, instigated dead weight
Intigrated meditations, destroy weak vibrations
Patience pays, but lazy ways daze
Opiate and wait, to be told ya fate
Great minds debate, while state slimes
The massed lines, of sheeple entwined
Amassed crimes, under steeple I find
Too many content to stay spent, while dunce dance never relents.

KERZO
11-30-2007, 11:56 AM
i like the fast flow you got going in the verse and the wordplay was good...keep them coming chief :mexico:

Bigot Hitman
12-01-2007, 12:15 PM
The rhyme scheme reminds me of deck's song off of resident patient "all i want is mine", except shorter lines and his is easier to understand. Wit yo style your only gonna get your point across to a few who take to time to read/listen close, shit's still ill though.