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noel411
12-13-2007, 10:21 PM
No matter where youíre coming from, life is never easy,
From the seedy camps where the poor and needy refugees be,
To the rich and scenic suburbs where life appears breezy,
Back to the sleazy slums where most incomes are measly,
Disease free streets with people walking bare feet,
To run down neighbourhoods where it is a rare treat,
To share a street with not one single hooker or dealer,
Cause the residents find drugs when they look for a healer,
A tramp sets up camp just below the expansion,
While a million dollar actor paints the walls of his mansion,
In a sporadic pattern of chunky grey and thin red,
After wearing through the final strands of a thin thread,
A wealthy lawyer heads downtown after losing two-
Important cases, thoughts are racing, now heís choosing to-
Buy some smack of a pusher whose homeless daughterís using too,
And the thugs are snoozing soundly once the drug abuse is through,
Around me Iím seeing everybody getting by,
It surrounds me, Iím being very dotty letting my-
Mind convince me that theyíre all better of than me,
Thereís an easy road to peace but nobodyís coffinís free,
And we often see the outer shell as adequate to function-
As a definitive portrayal for making judgements and assumptions,
Thereís a man I know from work, always calm and full of charm,
At night he sits alone with a needle in his arm,
He implements with instruments to bring about self harm,
He wears gloves to cover scars and slashes in his palms,
Alarm bells ring, and they calm hellís king,
But even he wonít drink the water that this farmís well brings,
Cause heís seen the way it tainted us and painted us with greed,
Which leads us to compete for all these things that we donít need,
And the size of your greed might be the size of your feed,
And the wise and the meek might rise while you bleed,
Thereís a time and place for all of us, depends which voice is calling us,
At any rate it may dictate the fate which is befalling us,
And who you choose to hear will reflect your personality,
You can choose to lose your fear in a programmed burst of clarity,
See Iíve had an easy ride through life in many ways,
But youíd find Iím struggling inside on almost any day,
When we say weíre ok, how often is it really true,
Would we change what we say if we knew we were nearly through?

In an attempt to get paid, Paul robbed a liquor store,
Though he drew his gun quick, the attendant had a quicker draw,
William made millions and invested them in stocks,
Now he works Ďround the clock loading ships at the docks,
Jack sold crack, weed and smack, and all the others,
Till he had his eyes gouged out by a customerís brother,
Bill lived to make a mill, and finally he did,
But during the chase he lost his wife and kid,
Though Marguerite seems sweet, she makes her money on the street,
They found her in a black jeep, murdered on the back seat,
Raquel went through hell before she got her dream promotion,
Then killed herself to finally end the stress and the commotion,
Peter is a wife beater, loves the rush of power,
For roughly half an hour he forgets that heís a coward,
Earl rapes girls so often now that itís the norm,
Does it almost daily, only way he can perform,
Susie Porter beats her daughter like it doesnít even phase her,
Does it out of frustration that she donít know how to raise her,
Jan will sleep with any man who can maintain an erection,
To combat the disdain and pain of rejection,
Problems find people from all walks of life,
From the rich to the poor, we can all talk of strife,
A lot of us unconsciously contribute to the problems-
Of others tryna live free, and effectively we rob them-
Of their freedom and right to have an equal opportunity,
By hurting them we hurt ourselves, my people stop and you will see,
We feed the same fire that slowly chars our souls,
And the solutions are polluted cause the problems are the goals.

bad boy T
12-14-2007, 06:19 AM
Ill bars

BornPower
12-15-2007, 05:07 PM
simple cuts...
deep

Dr Sleepwalker
12-16-2007, 09:20 AM
good read.. you can see the time and thought you put into your rhymes..
it shows, consistant.. good stuff noel

pea2e

noel411
12-18-2007, 02:00 AM
Cheers for the comments my people, my people, my people, my people, from everywhere watchin' the show, payin' top dollars because they know, that when we're on the stage we're in a motherfuckin' rage, so Dre (what up?), why don't you get the 12 guage?

I appreciate it.

Lost Sun
12-18-2007, 11:02 PM
I thought this was nice. Long read but you didn't lose my attention.

Fav Linez:

Cause the residents find drugs when they look for a healer,

Peter is a wife beater, loves the rush of power,
For roughly half an hour he forgets that heís a coward,

^^My two favorite but you had a lot of quotables. It was a simple topic but you came strong.

I especially liked the 2nd verse where you gave all the different people with their seperate issue. That painted a ill picture to me fam. Very nice work. Keep it up.

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noel411
12-21-2007, 07:09 PM
Thanks heaps for the reply.

Interesting you should single out the wife beater lines. When I write something I don't put pen to pad until I have constructed a line I'm entirely happy with in my head. When I wrote those lines I was a little unsure of them, and almost removed them after I wrote them. Then when I finished the whole written and read it back those 2 lines actually stood out to me as 2 of the best bars. Strange stuff.

ChamberSlave
12-27-2007, 09:34 PM
cool message, i esp liked the 2nd verse and how u went through different personalities.
Thought Provoking so good job

TeknicelStylez
12-31-2007, 03:40 AM
To share a street with not one single hooker or dealer,
Cause the residents find drugs when they look for a healer,


Thereís a man I know from work, always calm and full of charm,
At night he sits alone with a needle in his arm,
He implements with instruments to bring about self harm,
He wears gloves to cover scars and slashes in his palms,Alarm bells ring, and they calm hellís king,
But even he wonít drink the water that this farmís well brings,
Cause heís seen the way it tainted us and painted us with greed,
Which leads us to compete for all these things that we donít need,
And the size of your greed might be the size of your feed,
And the wise and the meek might rise while you bleed,

Jan will sleep with any man who can maintain an erection,
To combat the disdain and pain of rejection,

Beautiful written, the careful attention you put to each bar is definately recognized, but the ones I pointed to up above stood out to me. It was a long written but I remained focus the whole way through because there was no filler.

Never disappointing as usual Noel.

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
12-31-2007, 01:42 PM
this was some deepness right here man fire bars especially the openning

KERZO
01-03-2008, 09:29 AM
gotta say i'm feeling the verse noel...thought i'd single out the bits that stand out -

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Thereís a time and place for all of us, depends which voice is calling us,
At any rate it may dictate the fate which is befalling us,
And who you choose to hear will reflect your personality,
You can choose to lose your fear in a programmed burst of clarity,
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Peter is a wife beater, loves the rush of power,
For roughly half an hour he forgets that heís a coward,
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Jan will sleep with any man who can maintain an erection,
To combat the disdain and pain of rejection
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keep up the good work chief :cool:

noel411
01-07-2008, 05:20 PM
Cheers for the comments everybody. Always appreciated.