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40s_and_blunts
08-08-2005, 02:24 AM
yo, my ryhmes are real dark
the type that will molest you in a park
they block clouds and shadow the earth like a tarp
getting real attached to someone is not a thing to do
Even if its a tight ho or crew
Because with the oppertune moment they will betray you
You know who is a fuckin' dick rider? /
R. Kelly is a petophile why do o think he calls himself the pie-piper
He leads them into a cave and only fvcks them when they are riper
I'm more lethal than Jason
I'll cut you up with a pizza cutter/
the next day your blood will be my jam on my butter/
kid don't fuck with it because my mind is straight out the gutter

well, what do you think?

Ebo
08-08-2005, 02:56 PM
Keep it up. I'd suggest you keep the content more on one line. Building up a story. It seemed to me you switched a lot in this verse.

Peace