View Full Version : Verbal Obsticles

12-29-2007, 02:46 AM
i thought "writer's block" woulda fit the title better but, that name's played out as fuck,
so it is what it is....

no question uncontrolled, deception of the soul,
reflects in an effect of context in a scroll
I need a blank sheet before my shank meets tha ink,
lyrics altered enough to make a skank seek a shrink
twisted so much that the devil's son himself couldn't warp this,
but deep enough ta keep a hundred thousand corpses
the torch is, dimming, I can't find the time,
I'm struggling line ta line, tryna' design a rhyme
but when I fail to impress, and have to hail to the best,
thats the day I'll confess n finally put this nail through my chest
a suicidal kid, music has confused who is idol is,
cuffs, visions of drug dealing, how do I fight all this
the only role model I have's, this whole bottle of tabs,
"swallow in halves," I aint followin' that
I take them all whole, at least untill the spark that I search,
gets provided so bright that it lights the darkness I lerk
till I depart from this earth, Im'a put my heart in each verse,
and till Im ready for god, Im'a play each card he dispersed
cuz I'll be damned if I stand here as a man n just quit,
when writer's block sets, and I ain't understanding this shit
when beef escalelades to crap, hits the fan n just spits,
my direction, i stick to scripts, keep my plannin' as thick
as I possibly can, not let any obsticles beat me,
I'll still piss off any cop though, n flip off the whole precinct
fuck em', hip hop for bitches?, I ain't messin' wit that,
I have the talent to strictly stick to the essence of rap
no matter how hard it gets at times, im blessed wit the lack,
ta wanna quit, which tought me more then any lesson in math
heres a lesson, music n school lead you two different lives,
one teaches future, the other, what ta do ta survive
I keep my crew by my side, through any shit when it happens,
face any clique wid a challenge n flip the script when Im rappin
I'ma inflict any damage, ta herbs who jux my mic,
n plus no bodies a vergin, we all get fucked by life...

01-02-2008, 04:44 PM
comments anyone...?

01-22-2008, 07:26 PM

can i get at least one person's opinion

01-23-2008, 10:11 AM
hey drift-j...ya got a good rhyme scheme. You should try and not use a statement or sentence in every line. If ya had more absract passages with words linking together by terminology/linear thought as well as the syllable then you'll write far better verses. :o

keep up the good work ^O^

01-23-2008, 10:12 AM
oh and dont go fishing for feedback cos cats wont bother. if yer rhymes are good then someone will reply at some point. just keep hitting us with ya tomes