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Lost Sun
01-05-2008, 11:19 PM
My premise is...venomous from the 'Genesis'
Original serpent, I made the reptile infamous
decieved Eve to ensure Adam wasn't Infinite
questioned ya rule and spread moral impotence
still heaven sent...its there I made my 'Exodus'
Woe to earth...waged war on the exorcist
strikin' wit vengence, knowing my days are 'Numbered'
oh how I dread that thousand years of slumber
till u rain fire & sulphur my schedule is quite hectic
controllin' 'Kings' & 'Judges' to meet my objectives
phuck up the whole world like Unicron or Galactus
appear as an angel of light and thus con the masses
its close to the final chapter in my 'Chronicles'
& knowin' Armageddon is near I catalog my arsenal
launch attacks with my henchmen from within debasement
and stress mankind to the state of 'Lamentation'

I see all...from the womb to Sheol
your evil influence & how man see sawed
in & out of my favor, sparking my anger
despite their defiant 'Acts' I still gave them a savior
I watched as my people fell victim to your snares
some seek me in vain, others put you in theirs
foretold you'd bruise my heel, I'd give u a concussion
followin' will be all those 'Marked' for destruction
your accomplices, workers of lawlessness'll share your fate
I'll gather the wheat & skate tho u weeds try to infiltrate
futile, like the sand tryin' to stop the ocean's tide
when I weild my Power Absolute no creature can subside
you & your legions'll crumble like the 'Roman' empire
tossed along with Death into the Lake of Fire
excuse the symbolism, Titan jargon is lost in translation
therefore I seal these scrolls untill the Final 'Revelation'



Feedback is appreciated it. Thanks

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SAI-VU
01-06-2008, 12:03 PM
shit is dope... couldn't understand 90% of it, n you still came through... had turn of my music and and read it three times just in case i missed something... keepin it abstract for real dawg... you do any audio or something? could do with a collabo if your down with that... pm me if youre interested, got studiotime, beats n all that shit... peace bro

KERZO
01-07-2008, 05:59 AM
Nice verse chief...you have some good meaning behind the context i must say you flip between metaphors too quickly like in this part -

till u rain fire & sulphur my schedule is quite hectic - this line has a demonic feel
controllin' 'Kings' & 'Judges' to meet my objectives - then a royal feel
phuck up the whole world like Unicron or Galactus - then a sci-fi feel (transformers)
appear as an angel of light and thus con the masses - then angelic feel

so in those four lines you jumped through different topical motives. You should maybe stick to one topic and explore it more through the verse then it would have more feel of a flow rather than a poem.

keep up the good work chief :hooray:

Lost Sun
01-07-2008, 04:09 PM
^^^appreciate the feed back....

I FEEL WHAT YOUR SAYING ABOUT STAYING ON TOPIC....MY POINT WAS TO USE THE TITLE OF THE BOOKS OF THE BIBLE TO TELL A STORY BUT I SEE WHAT YOUR SAYING...A LOT OF CONTENT....THANKS FAM

noel411
01-07-2008, 05:17 PM
Good shit fam. Interesting content and a good job of throwing the bible book titles in there. Keep up the good work.