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i_ecca
03-20-2008, 11:26 AM
8 bars:

Dim dark shadows sparking in the parks darkness
One part wants to embark the other part is heartless
Moody artless surround-sounds pounding my mind
and leaving it without any kind of grounding in time
An astounding fine wine are served through veins
I pass the glass untouched n let my words chew brains
Like two chains connected to eachother in both ends
i form a strong unshaped zero so I can coat trends

PhD
03-20-2008, 02:13 PM
Nice, but I don't get it; which ain't necessarily a bad thing.

x.l.nc
03-20-2008, 02:22 PM
i was thinking the same^^ a bit warcloudy

i_ecca
03-23-2008, 07:53 PM
hehe thx guys

x.l.nc
03-30-2008, 10:47 AM
by the way being abit warcloudy wasnt supposed to be a bad thing - just deep - nameeen

Death the Kid
03-30-2008, 11:58 AM
Liked the 1st one better, dark and gloomy !

Prototype
04-01-2008, 10:34 PM
8 bars:

Dim dark shadows sparking in the parks darkness
One part wants to embark the other part is heartless
Moody artless surround-sounds pounding my mind
and leaving it without any kind of grounding in time
An astounding fine wine are served through veins
I pass the glass untouched n let my words chew brains
Like two chains connected to eachother in both ends
i form a strong unshaped zero so I can coat trends

8 bars:

i am a crazy ill minded kid like the one
asian young hun from the crazy 88's
u spray the strays as i mace ur face
this aint ladys nites, u better take the gate
hit the road cuz u cant compare with my flow
sharp, it slits ur throat n i spit the dope
on tracks, whack cats gets bomb'd like iraq
laid back, i lay back, rest and stay phat

these 2 8's are not connected to each other ^^ just some rand lines i wrote. second one is kinda battle stylish but dunno. ill post more later.




OK. the first 8 was good. Nice vocab, etc. Only problem is that you tried to hard to make it deep, which made some of it not make sense.
The second half is blah. Simple, played out gangster lines. Not being a bitch just giving criticism. It's like..you can't just go from "Wine served through veins" to "bomb like iraq, i be phat blah ba blah". But yes, I liked first one.


Oh, and hit up my shit. Need some advice. My verses in Temple of Darts I mean.

i_ecca
04-02-2008, 01:57 PM
OK. the first 8 was good. Nice vocab, etc. Only problem is that you tried to hard to make it deep, which made some of it not make sense.
The second half is blah. Simple, played out gangster lines. Not being a bitch just giving criticism. It's like..you can't just go from "Wine served through veins" to "bomb like iraq, i be phat blah ba blah". But yes, I liked first one.


Oh, and hit up my shit. Need some advice. My verses in Temple of Darts I mean.

well thx. first of all, first one makes sense! and yes first 8 are more worked tru then second one. second one was more of an keystyle verse. kinda played out yeah^^if u dont get my verse ask instead of saying "nah doesnt make sense" hehe but thx as i said. ill check ur shit out! :D

i_ecca
04-08-2008, 10:10 PM
the necromancer, words amp like cancer
murderous, slay all the background dancers
revive, always murder twice, roam the skies
hope to die, venus to pluto distance
laser guided missions, its substance sharp
incognito darts, client offensive pencil
under, behind, formed, shaped, a torn face
left tellus jealous, all it left was a soar maze
cordless, unconnectable, feelings feelings
ordered madness, it was swedens meanest
creepy beings, travel like shadows, unseen
never glance, surroundings feels seen, unreal

new one ^^

i_ecca
04-08-2008, 11:01 PM
her eyes displayed it all, she was never old
never told, untold, one call grabbed her soul
the slopes she fought on made her weary n grey
i swear to this day, she had it but couldn't stay
to many hours without daylight, all the fights
roped her tight to the point her sight went blind
she tried but not for a long time, it ended fast
a relentless mass made by men polluted by cash
minced her pipes, to this day i remember her eyes
when i watch the stars falling in the sky i can see cindy cry

new one again ^^ some good beats iam listening to made me write these 2 verses.

i_ecca
04-09-2008, 01:16 PM
pt.1 (security codes)

security codes insecurely handled, i call it false
hold your horse, a ball rolls with yall next fall
the wall fell but did it really fall, be not sure
links, data gathered, smugglers behind the laws
security codes, security codes inside the building
a offensive firewall in the dark heart screaming
the image painted by these thief's i can not handle
dismantled planet, gold n silver left us rusty panels

pt.2 (outcome, a fatality)

public security, insecure public, a moshpit
the desk inside the office, sleeping coffins
humans, cyborgs cry wars and humans die for
heads over, heads held a well shut dutch door
molded mentality floats far from reality
controlled brain surgery, outcome, a fatality
casualties, its all over, a stone born clover
to clever never, a severed age still working

pt.3 (chaos at the railway junction)

i travel behind my sky, always marvel
i see a child playing with rolling marbles
store the charges, vintage luggage, iam thinking
sink my teeth in, a sinking ceiling never sleeping
the creepy parts born from start, a scart cable
connects my heart, lost its plating around mars
muted stars constantly appear, the graphic symbol
out of function, chaos at the railway junction

pt.4 (seconds rapidly sprouting)

disorder in the upper case, confusion in the lower
a flame set way back burned the fuses in the storage
yet the flame contains a spark yelling, fire fire
from inside the broken dryer, soon it might retire
a demonic liar hurting itself searching for fuel
trapped like neon, this demon buried the jewels
scared of loosing, scared of rules, behind the truth
dwells a secret fountain, seconds rapidly sprouting

[writing like a madman atm.]
[pt.1 & pt.2 sees light]
[pt.3 takes on a new turn.]
[pt.4 the end.]
[title: chaos in a system]

BornPower
04-19-2008, 02:18 PM
i was really feelin the first eight you posted. good imagery.

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
04-20-2008, 12:50 AM
yo u got some deep lyricism you put allot of thought in ur writing and i can appreciate that. you have great imagery and your rhyme style is slightly borrowed from warcloud & abstract ghostface which is something that can be to an advantage if you truely study the style then i think you could be really entertaining.

i_ecca
04-30-2008, 01:13 PM
well thx but ive been writing for many years, long before i heard warcloud. thou i cant say he didnt inspired me so ur prolly right :)

i_ecca
07-23-2008, 04:04 PM
long time no see ^^ !

just wrote a 16 line freestylish thing, here u go.

the birds in the forest, i_crime like wallace
stand the tallest, hundred percent immortal
in mortal combat, not flawless only far beyond
megaton don, transform graphics like megatron
global audio opticom, enhanced data telecom
natures beast from the east, a wooden palm
strikes hard, nah cuz yall ain't ready yet
like who the fuck decapitated nessies head
me ofc! me ofc!
the optoelectric nuclear force
all stories told, the wooden horse
new age matrix soldier trojan war lord
score like a player but kid i ain't one
i am a saints son, the bible has its way
drink up youre chardonnay, the devil delay
mayflowers withered early at the masquerade

i_ecca
08-03-2008, 12:01 AM
on the run searching....

i_ecca
10-16-2008, 03:01 PM
when i look up in the sky i can see jane cry
her eyes is lost in the past that she hides

she grew up as a happy child
but the countless times she was betrayed

made her weary and grey, cold in the heart
from day one she was doomed to be scarred

the constant ill-treatment of little jane
left her with ugly memories in the brain

and the memories remain the same forever
mentally severed, so bright and so clever

but no she cannot get out of the trap
but no she cannot get rid of the past

of course she tried and she succeeded
but in the end of the day comes the demons

and these demons wont let her be
set her free because what she feels is real

i_ecca
11-12-2009, 04:25 AM
new text above ^_^

i_ecca
10-16-2010, 06:48 AM
two freaks on display like sookie and bill
join me at the darkside where rookies gets killed
depressed soldiers are pushing the pills
the outkasts trying to build but chill
because the whole green globe is in a man made coffin
1000 million people starving
alarming sounds, control the black flow
an eye for a gallon, bomb the grounds
tanks made of panzer, digital cancer
the solution is so far beyond answers
they protect the assets of the earth
masses gets hurt, the cash gets burned
and stacked, bullets gets packed and used
companies abuse, animals is the truth
man the virus, destroying the planet
no one can guide us, bury the casket

J.T.S.
10-18-2010, 10:55 AM
two freaks on display like sookie and bill
join me at the darkside where rookies gets killed
depressed soldiers are pushing the pills
the outkasts trying to build but chill
because the whole green globe is in a man made coffin
1000 million people starving
alarming sounds, control the black flow
an eye for a gallon, bomb the grounds
tanks made of panzer, digital cancer
the solution is so far beyond answers
they protect the assets of the earth
masses gets hurt, the cash gets burned
and stacked, bullets gets packed and used
companies abuse, animals is the truth
man the virus, destroying the planet
no one can guide us, bury the casket

i just want to applaud you and say that this is a master-thesis
i can see everything in every line it's like a movie man!
This verse is like a missing piece to impossible.

i_ecca
11-18-2010, 11:48 PM
i just want to applaud you and say that this is a master-thesis
i can see everything in every line it's like a movie man!
This verse is like a missing piece to impossible.

wow thx. that verse is the truth ONLY.

i_ecca
11-25-2010, 02:33 PM
nothing is special because nothing matters
the stars failed when they made this planet
the human race a colossal mistake
all i hear is that we must make it a better place
but that's some bullshit! since we got lost in the race
from the start and there is no antidote
the true kings and queens are the animals
a globe going heartless, darkness is near
the dark we fear but still we do not care
on and on, they be pumping hard
oil spillage all over the yard
cars in the factory, cash in the pocket
people are starving as they plan new rockets
i just want to rip out my eyes from the sockets
stick pencils in my ears but i do not fear
to think clear, sincere like a volunteer

quite similar content to the text berfore this one. follow-ups will follow!