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Murderous Mack
08-15-2005, 05:23 AM
I made the opening remark, and I'll have the final say,
on any mission you embark, I'm the one who guides the way,
whether light or dark, you can always feel my rays,
I turn the desert sand to ice, and set oceans ablaze,
take one leap to reach the peak of a mountain range,
buy a Benz for one cent, and still be left with change,
arrange the pieces of a puzzle, after guzzling endless Guiness,
I do it with no trouble, and I do it in a minute,
I was there at the beginning, and I'll be there at the finish,
I'm there while you're living, and I'm there when you diminish,
I'm the source of your misgivings, and the force that keeps you driven,
the regret in your decisions, the finesse in your precision,
the belief in your opinions, the relief when you're forgiven,
the impact in a collision, the facts you teach your children,
I'm zero and a million, the hero and the villian,
the oil for which you're drilling, and the blood it leaves spilling,
stable as a stone building, as I change like a chameleon,
revealing truth through lies, and using proof to hide,
broke the rope that ties my life when I tossed hope aside,
I sweat to stay dry, it's for death I stay alive,
the clock face shatters as I'm running out of time,
lock gates to escape from my own mind,
drop plates to create a beat for my rhyme,
stop the tape, and make a break for the finish line.

GuardianOne
08-15-2005, 09:02 AM
I don't know since you said its some soft stuff!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was simple to catch what it could have ment (both sides-opposite and negetive and positive). It kind of misleads, however it had the classic poetic style in the flow. What makes it even nicer is the way you used the expressions, giving another the other picture which could be the samething. Sought of interesting.

Peace
PS: Keep posting

Murderous Mack
08-15-2005, 05:37 PM
Thanks for the feed, man. The reason for the "soft shit" in the title is because I usually only post up freestyles about murder, rape, beastiality, and violence in general, haha.

BRASSKNUCKLED PAI MEI
08-15-2005, 09:15 PM
I made the opening remark, and I'll have the final say,
on any mission you embark, I'm the one who guides the way,
whether light or dark, you can always feel my rays,
I turn the desert sand to ice, and set oceans ablaze,
take one leap to reach the peak of a mountain range,
buy a Benz for one cent, and still be left with change,
arrange the pieces of a puzzle, after guzzling endless Guiness,
I do it with no trouble, and I do it in a minute,
I was there at the beginning, and I'll be there at the finish,
I'm there while you're living, and I'm there when you diminish,
I'm the source of your misgivings, and the force that keeps you driven,
the regret in your decicions, the finesse in your precision,
the belief in your opinions, the relief when you're forgiven,
the impact in a collision, the facts you teach your children,
I'm zero and a million, the hero and the villian,
the oil for which you're drilling, and the blood it leaves spilling,
stable as a stone building, as I change like a chameleon,
revealing truth through lies, and using proof to hide,
broke the rope that ties my life when I tossed hope aside,
I sweat to stay dry, it's for death I stay alive,
the clock face shatters as I'm running out of time,
lock gates to escape from my own mind,
drop plates to create a beat for my rhyme,
stop the tape, and make a break for the finish line.

those lines in RED :clap:

Sicka than aidZ
08-15-2005, 09:21 PM
yeah, why dont u just use your 411 name?...noel dirt dogg.....thats an awesome verse. peace

Murderous Mack
08-16-2005, 05:40 PM
Thanks for the replies guys. Sicka, I kind of retired the legendary noel411 name when I got tired of this forum shit. Mack only came back to drop some crazy freestyles. I don't know though. I might hang around the temple for a while. Read some verses, maybe drop some of my own, in which case I might as well post as noel.

Dae Ja Nae
08-16-2005, 06:36 PM
I made the opening remark, and I'll have the final say,
on any mission you embark, I'm the one who guides the way,
whether light or dark, you can always feel my rays,
I turn the desert sand to ice, and set oceans ablaze,
take one leap to reach the peak of a mountain range,
buy a Benz for one cent, and still be left with change,
arrange the pieces of a puzzle, after guzzling endless Guiness,
I do it with no trouble, and I do it in a minute,
I was there at the beginning, and I'll be there at the finish,
I'm there while you're living, and I'm there when you diminish,
I'm the source of your misgivings, and the force that keeps you driven,
the regret in your decisions, the finesse in your precision,
the belief in your opinions, the relief when you're forgiven,
the impact in a collision, the facts you teach your children,
I'm zero and a million, the hero and the villian,
the oil for which you're drilling, and the blood it leaves spilling,
stable as a stone building, as I change like a chameleon,
revealing truth through lies, and using proof to hide,
broke the rope that ties my life when I tossed hope aside,
I sweat to stay dry, it's for death I stay alive,
the clock face shatters as I'm running out of time,
lock gates to escape from my own mind,
drop plates to create a beat for my rhyme,
stop the tape, and make a break for the finish line.

Just dropping some honest feedback here ...

The bold lines go hard as hell ... very sick use of multies, plus I'm really feeling' the matter of fact ness. I guess this is kinda "soft" for a "stone cold killah" ... lol ... but it's still ill non the less. Now, as far as the name goes ... If you're planning on keeping it "gangsta" you stick with Mack. It's kinda pimpish so to speak ... :looking: ...

but yeah, in spite of the past days beef }) ... you know that I've always felt that you were a good writer.


Peace

Murderous Mack
08-17-2005, 09:00 AM
Cool, thanks for the feed. No need to explain yourself for posting in one of my threads, or bring up the beef. Forget about it.

MithBeatz
08-21-2005, 06:14 AM
spit it mack and hook a brother up with this shit. that's a fire verse and you know ima hit you off with some dope shit.