View Full Version : On an Idlewarship......(a verse I wrote quick)

06-16-2008, 03:55 AM
Iím on an idle warship
Spitting so much my brain felt like a computer processor/
Processing information so fast
My lips couldnít keep up with/
So I downgraded aided in flows
Ancient weaponry spears and bows/
Throwing darts and crunching down on numbers
Plunder the mainstream for their goods and gold/
Chose the moniker ďTechwonĒ cuz itís so polished
Iím colder than any titanic hitting the nearest ice berg/
You best get out the park sharpen my fast ball wit an ill steam
Think my heat be 101 clocked by the gun do you really wanna test son/
Gambling on the pamphlets manned by the percentage
Effortless when they quote the architect they tend to forget the essence/
I speak wit prominence educated off the edutainment by KRS-One did
Now that Iíve stated the facts we tend and act like it never existed/
Spit wit it flip the garden turn it from warm to frozen
Now we closing in like a nuclear warhead/
Extra opportunity now you trying get screw out of luck
This ainít no game like duck, duck goose we move real quick/
We think up plans and run wit jams without scams to get loose
Iím the proof when you drinking the alcoholic beverages/
Down off the ledges hostage negotiating this ainít Sam Jackson
This is truth and facts we rap for generating a buzz like Barrack and Osama/
I bring the drama like politics too your mama if you going to church
You best confess everything you did even polluting the earth/
Iíve been niggerized too long I broke out subsidize racism trying create passivism
Now they just identifying me as another statistic just like we another brick/
Iím thick speaking my mind quick fuck the shit cha speaking
Like we ainít broke, poor and weíve been in a recession/
Before these government officials declared it official
Now we got congressional efforts that gone unnoticed in the ghetto/
They never mingle wit the folks that give them powers over single leaders
We went from bus protests to riots in the streets to beef on wax to bushonomics/

06-17-2008, 12:43 PM
I see what your saying in the lines, don't get me wrong i like your style..
I just get a little lost with the rhyme structure, but your original.

06-17-2008, 08:33 PM
I see what your saying in the lines, don't get me wrong i like your style..
I just get a little lost with the rhyme structure, but your original.

i hear i think sometimes i don't ahear well to structure maybe it's the wu influced rhyme style or maybe it's the abstract method allot of my poetry tell me that i'm good at what i do but the structure isn't there because i'll go with normal lines then once in a while i'll truncate that into three lines for one line so i think i depends when i'm writing in that the flow i use or what ever comes to mind but thank's JTS man

06-17-2008, 08:42 PM
where u from sheep?

06-18-2008, 01:04 PM
where u from sheep?

I'm from Syracuse, NY