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adedwutang
08-23-2005, 10:14 PM
I'm Just another kid usin criminal ways to get thru the day/
i got a short vocabulary, but i do wut i can to get paid/
i drop a few rhymes on the street and listen to what people say/
not like those normal kids who like to chill back ad play/
this enviorment around me causes my brain to decay daily/
i continue to wonder why do these people hate me/
just because they see different colors these mutha fuckas turn crazy/
why dont i fight back, iono maybe cuz im lazy/
or maybe cuz i didnt c my fate turnin this way mainly/
my voice is crackin and i cant find the words to speak/
fuck man im doin a mixtape wit my cuz next week/
please let me land a deal and become one of the elite/
this way the next day i kno exactly wut im gonna eat/
is this just a dream, am i in a deep sleep/
please somebody make me bleed so i can wake and get this dragging feeling out of me/
it feels like an anchor from my heart to the sea/
only the anchor continues to fall until im down to my knees/
i pray to god that my skills pave the road ahead/
dam wut i would do to make this bread/
if i dont leave now these criminal ways will lead me to a future that involves me bein dead/

GuardianOne
08-24-2005, 07:26 AM
Its simple (the lyrical content) but the verse flowed. Although you kept to the same rhyme scheme ( not that its a problem) but it was very obvious how the verse continued. It just showed how you tried t make it rhyme well. Nothing bad in that away. Try other a topics to write on, might assist you but i noticed you have a certain style on portraying things through a basic question.

Peace
PS: Keep posting

adedwutang
08-24-2005, 11:54 AM
thanx for the feedback cuz, will keep i mind

Robert
08-24-2005, 12:02 PM
Good verse, like Guardianone the vocab was simple but you still conveyed yo message well. Told the story well but maybe your flow was a bit sloppy
good verse peace

adedwutang
08-24-2005, 12:03 PM
thanx for the advice

adedwutang
10-14-2005, 05:33 PM
im like a yung blessed soldia on a dark battle field/
take my ice water sword cuz i only need one to get u sealed/
i got a defense for any weapon u can wield/
my words continue to grow sharper like steel/
when i shave off a little bit/
chop up ya body and i save just a little bit/
i got no mercy for this little bitch, fuck awla that quitta shit/
i go from a yung man to a killa quik/
lemme giv u a little killa tip/
n e man who say hes the top dude is the one wit a little dick/
look, i break down ya rhymes and leave em as a element/
i spit flame that can take out a whole settlement/
im not a dictionary rapper screamin out words like embezzlement/
but believe me when i tell u that ma flow is hella sick/
listen, im a little yung for the wu but i still got love for the old school/
fuck these mainstream rappers who dont kno how to hold tool/
u kno those types that put chalk around these slowa fools/
the kinda punks whos flow is pooled, just watered down to a substance that no real gangsta use/
now listen to ma gangsta views, im not very tall but i still tower dudes/
cuz i got a flow like biggie so i use the power moves/
plowin thru cars and they houses to/
now listen to my quik rhymes, kill ya wit that sick line/
u cant switch hoes like i switch mine, o shit its ma bed time/

lemme know ya, havent been writin 2 much lately, made this one up as i was typin it so be easy on me
peace

adedwutang
10-14-2005, 05:50 PM
listen up punk, i got a nine in my pocket/
im lyin/
i got nine shots wit a glock in ma pocket/
for any chumps who think they can knock it but they cant knock the hustle/
my mind is shot and its troubled/
plus people get shot wen im in trouble/ cuz my shots i like them doubled/
and wen i get hot i make you bubble/.....
you think u can run around in my block/
well maybe you can but i can go faster then u just walkin on my hands/
cuz ur just a little slow/
u just learnin the shit that i already know/
and thats includin ya flo/
while u wastin time doin them hoes im lootin ya doe/
and u kno i got a sickamore style/
which is sicker and more pure then urs/
so good luck to you and ur whores/
cuz my words are pollutin your pores/
and ill knock down ur confidence/
they way the cops knock down and shoot up ya doors huh
...and you kno some girls say that a guy is run by their dick/
well i didnt hear u complainin last nite wen u was ridin that ish/
plus my dick got a head wit a mind of its own/
and i seemed to have forgot my other one at home so u leave my big one alone,get it,lol
......i got a fire inside of me that'll burn thru ya eyes/
some say its called an arsenist homicide/
but i like to think of myself as a cold killin lyricist wit the rhymes/
cuz as i walk thru the valley of the shadow of death i leave dead mic trails wit they last breath/
and i must confess that if i dont get this shyt off my chest i could start grownin man breasts/
and you kno im the number one emcee/
cuz nobody can see mee/
and its easy to see this cuz theres no other emcee near me/
and i shall never fear thee for thy flo fiercly/
and i b the one who spits fire in the sea just to get these words out of me/
so u myte say that this is long but i c it as just another song/
i can switch my flo then go on and on so stay tuned for the next episode cuz im lettin my tongue roll/
and if it rolls of nice the way i roll them dice/
then u myte start hearin my lyrics for a price
.....the whole idea of u havin a career is makin me laugh/
cuz u just started writin shit that i forgot in the past/
as a matter of fact, if u sold ur best rymes u still couldnt pay for ma gas/
u so messed up in the head that u wuldnt fall over even if i kicked u in ya ass
...please stop wastin my time wit ya punk ass rymes/
and do ya self a favor/
stick to ya day job ,makin nickles and dimes/
cuz i kno its ma flo your admirin/
dont be mad other labels are hirin, and im the reason they started firin
..wit so much drama goin on in the NYC its kinda hard bein someone as fly as me,
cuz my style is deadly,
and these other rappers dred me/
cuz im on a level that is higher by ten feet/
now u say u gangsta but cmon man u aint smokin spliffs/
u 2 busy jerkin ya dick while real men are sellin them bricks/
and even tho its some small time shit/
its still big euff to get u gunned up and clapped quick/
cuz i kno a homey that knows a homey that packs 2 fo-fifths/
both of em fully loaded equals exactly 6 pounds/
together wit the keys and im spittin some heavy shit now/
people look at me and c a white boy livin upstate and then they think to themself how?/
well u must b stupid if u think im up here milkin a dam cow/
im strait street wit my rhymes/
but that doesnt mean i got to be holdin heats and packin nines
....my lyrics will have u thinkin like u were studyin/
by the time u finish readin it over its a another joint im already cuttin in/
cuz i dont sit wit a pen and think up words/
it hits me wen im chillin back and checkin out birds/
not the ones that fly!. or the ones that get high!.. cuz i need a classy chic that i can "sit in my benzz and watch time go bbyyyy"/
and u kno i enjoy to spit gangsta ish/ cuz its funny to see/
these hardcore artists who are real men but they aint no real rapper to me/
so wut u got shot in the head wit a .22/
that doesnt justify that my skills aint better then u/
an i will never battle a friend of mine/
because wen i spit my rhymes it tends to leave scars that grow over time/
and if u not readin thru this whole verse then its a shame on u/
cuz u need my fix to make it thru the life that u once knew before someone came named who?
some say kriscross some say kriddigiss,
thats my name in jibberish,
and i take pride in my name as i take pride in my soul,
cuz im so deep that i wuld give u a dollar if u found me in my hole thats filled wit the stories ive told/
thru the words comin from my lips/
wenever there rubbed together they shoot out fire like sticks/
and at the same time are known for there famous kiss/
these various styles belong to a kid named kris/
and will take on ne body who thinks they can step to this



heres another one of mine, its pretty old, found it on a old thread and i never got any opinions on it, mostly a bunch of little rhymes that i put together into a verse so ya can rate it
peace

denaturat
10-14-2005, 10:34 PM
You got creativity, but you need to work on originality. I would ease up on the "I got big gats and even bigger dick" shit" know what I mean? (unless you battle of course) otherwise it sounds just like the next guy's. Also tighten up your flow, did you try it with the beat? work on it bro, potential's there, practice is everything.

jjh_38
10-15-2005, 02:19 AM
i didn't even try fuckin with your 2nd verse... cuz one.. ur first one was jus aight from what i gathered.. plus when i saw that 2nd verse.. no format.. and long as fuck... shit.. can u blame me for not readin it....

so.......... heres my feed......... number one... put some structure to your shit...

number two... jus keep on scriptin mayne... i liked this line

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listen, im a little yung for the wu but i still got love for the old school/
fuck these mainstream rappers who dont kno how to hold tool/

^that was tight..

peace

adedwutang
10-15-2005, 03:11 PM
good looks, def keep in mind, and for the structure on the second verse i didnt really organize it, just a bunch of old battle verses and stuff thats wy its not 2 original like dena said, but thanx for the info b, i needed someone to tell me this shit strait up
peace

denaturat
10-15-2005, 04:50 PM
Write some more, edit it, be concise, cut out what's mediocre and leave the shit that's pure gems, best is something personal. post it again and lemme know. Peace.

adedwutang
10-17-2005, 08:19 PM
its funny how i b chillin down to the spine/
then a thought pops to my head, a new line/
dam that shit it ill, gotta get this down then im chill/
im thinkin im good for the day, but im feelin that feelin in me still/
got this flow in me thats gettin ready to spill/
its like sweatin on a cold hill/
its hot, but dont feel rite, gotta go against ma will/
puttin up the beat and im gettin ready to kill/
dam i got to make that mil/
i need that cake n im waitin/
got to finish this track that im rapin/
sittin in front of ma computer go back and forth pacin/
nah that word dont work lemme try another/
got that jay-z flow in me but im not bitin off ma brother/
hit that rite line and its smooth like butter/
got deadly multies and im wet so i stay cool in the summer/
only a few bars and runnin but ima quik muther fucker/
dam this beat in my head not workin wit my flo/
fuck it, it was just some lines i wanted to show/
i dont care wut none of ya think, im sick and i know/
wen i get heated i can take ne body wit the words that i blow/
u still thinkin u got skils above me, then dont/
cuz its a long fall from the top even if its slow/

denaturat
10-18-2005, 04:08 PM
that was dope...keep it up aded

6what131
10-18-2005, 05:07 PM
ok

adedwutang
10-18-2005, 06:43 PM
good looks

JOHNNY_TICAL
10-18-2005, 10:45 PM
Sounds.. Pretty .. Coo 2 Me.. > Just Practice.. Wit Every Thing .. {thats What I Did.. And Still Am} On Freestyle.. On Written.. . N E Thing That Comes 2 Ur Head.. Just Keep It In Mind.. Or .. Scribe.. So.. When.. U Write.. U Can Either Go Wit Something That Is On Ur Mind.. Or. . Something That Got Ur Attention ..

Good Shit.. > I Put It Down..!

Peace !!!

adedwutang
10-19-2005, 09:37 PM
good looks

adedwutang
10-19-2005, 10:07 PM
yo,i love chillin listenin to that old school shit/
learn somethin new from somethin old, thats how i do shit/
fuck all this new shit, they dont think they just spit/
listen to me quik peace to big and all the hip hop legends/
cuz im bettin they battlin up in heaven/
i can see em now just sweatin/
waitin for me to show up they begin stretchin/
gotta teach this kid a lesson/
lick my lips to get ready for the words that im wettin/
comin from the kingdom i giv u a blessin/
i continue stressin hopin i can make it thru the obstacles i will soon ensue/
gettin wile spittin it heavy thru and thru/
im comin for my crown cuz its long overdue/
u askin who am i, nigga who r u i spit that ill shit like i got a speech impedement/
fuckin wit my shit will lead to ur detrement/
my flows kickin like bruce lee so i like to chew peppermint/
comin against me these mc;s are easy come easy go/
thinkin they got skills but a flow is easy when its slo/
here we go....again ima a shoalin monk but i sin/
i degrade the forest wit my twin/
pissin on trees so people know where i been/


heres some more stupid shit i just put together, lemme kno

adedwutang
03-05-2006, 12:12 AM
havent been on the site in a while but check it

you kno it shulda been told or even written in the scrolls/
that no mc culd be released from my lyrical threshold/
i bless those, who dont got the gift that i possess yo/
jump on a chics chest and i show her ma breaststoke/
so lets go, im wit it, you call it impossible wen i done did it/
u tryin to stop the flo but i continue on wit it/
u gonna get swung on kid so quit it/
yo, my rymes are above and beyond fame son so u can just chill/
poison ya brain wit no vaccine cuz im just so ill/
its easy to see that im greater cuz im the kid from the hill/
just like method man my clan never ran never will/
look, niggas cant stand the shit that i write wit my right hand/
ayt than, you can neva match ma might man/
i fight man, my battles are lopsided despite the fact that im white man/
u tried to step up but fell off the edge of the knife man/
yea i c u got a vest on ya chest, and/
kevlar cant stop a 50 to ya brest, dam/
c in my clic there is no such thing as snitchin/
cuz at point blank range theres no such thing as missin/

Father N Dangerous
03-05-2006, 01:13 AM
Yeah Really feelin this last verse of yours man, the flow was there, and your creativity elevated nicely since i first read ya ish, good shit. ill opener man remember da opener is everything, n then again its nothing.

stay up and keep blessin

adedwutang
03-05-2006, 11:03 AM
thanx everybody for u replies, believe it or not its little comments like urs that make me wanna keep rytin
peace

BRASSKNUCKLED PAI MEI
03-06-2006, 04:00 PM
thanx everybody for u replies, believe it or not its little comments like urs that make me wanna keep rytin
peace

I concur it also helps when constructive criticism is made...PeacecaeP

adedwutang
03-07-2006, 04:33 PM
just somethin i got on my profile for aol
check it



The Lift
i woke up to a phone at 5 after 8/
my mouth was filled with a bitter sweet taste/
it was ma man callin up sayin meet me at the place/
so i went to the bathroom and washed the sleep out ma face/
he said i aint got much time and i gotta quikken up ma pace/
so my slo motion movement turned to a race/
grabbed the jewelry out ma case/
then said by to ma baby cuz i knew i plucked an ace/
waitin for my ride on the corner of the street/
ma walkman playin and my head bobbin to the beat/
thinkin to myself how i didnt get enuff sleep/
then i felt a vibration at the bottom of ma feet/
a car approached the curb and it was ma boy in the jeep/
we drove away calm and collective, lookin all sleek/
he drove real slo so i dozed off in the car/
he said wake ya ass up cuz we not that far/
we got to the place and i realized it was a bar/
we went inside and took the lift to the loft/
a man opened the door i said can we speak to the boss/
he said "listen kid u better get lost"/
my ass, i kno every man has his cost/
slipped him a twenty and he said the niggas in the back/
walkin thru the room and saw everyone was wearin black/
aint hard to tell that they was sellin crack/
the rocks was big and the pockets wasnt flat/
herd a deep voice in the shadows that instructed wut our mission was/
wasnt listenin to wut he said except "u gonna need some slugs"/
later found out we had to prove our worthiness in the set/
veterans was arguin as they were settin up a bet/
"betcha the white boy backs out" forget that man i gotta rep/
this is my life man i cant live off of checks/
my boy told me we had to merc some kid/
they didnt even let us kno what this little nigga did/
i thought to myself this is some fucked up shit/
wut could of this little boy done to get this bid/
gotta do wut i gotta do, never mind wats rite/
creeped up to his buildin in the middle of the nite/
saw him chillin on the corner so we stayed out of site/
i hesitated as my man started out into the light/
confronted him real nice, n he said wutup u wanna fight/
had my ghat in hand and i was holdin it tight/
i made a movement real slight, and this dude pulls a 40 from the right/
we open fire at eachother and he hits my man in the chest/
i emptied my clip and put my hand to rest/
then i was shocked by wut had happened next/
a cop comes around the corner so i run till im out of breath/
a quik cut to the side alley and into a random door/
i sat and waited smellin the piss on the floor/
my finger was feelin real sore, as i waited some more/
walked out prayin to god that i would b ignored/
next mornin paper says that 2 kids were found dead/
i had so many thoughts rushin to my head/
couldnt sleep all nite sittin in my bed/
woke up and looked for the paper that i had read/
nowhere to be found and i hear the phone ring once then again/
my man says where u been man how much u overslept/
i realized it was all a dream and i felt blessed/
im gettin out of this business man i never shuld of messed/

this isnt exactly how it went but i made it a little little different so i can ryme, and its more like a poem with no beat to it so u gotta add some flow to it when u read to make it sound rite
get at me

adedwutang
03-09-2006, 05:17 PM
you see i try to monaplize so im my friend and my enemy/
see in my eyes and im takin over the whole world steadily/
if im not the best pound for pound soon then i better b/
my flows like a plasma field, calm but deadly/
sometimes known to strike lightning so be ready b/
i dont think i even time to whoop everybodys ass hmm lemme c/
now its easy to spit words that just sound good together/
but when it makes sense you kno it sounds even better/
my verses are more like poems or even a simple letter/
sometimes i got shit that involves nines and berettas/
but i try to stay away from topics talkin bout makin cheddah/
shit syracuse beat uconn this is lookin like a great day so far/
pumped to play ball but i got no car/
walk to the court listenin to esco( )bar/
nas always a birdie dont settle for par/
inspiration to rhyme as i walk these streets/
listenin to only the old school beats/
sun shinin in my eye and this nigga lookin like he got beef/
wutchu want dooney ill bust ya in ya teeth/
dam check this shorty ass like a jeep/
seen her face and she look like she take it real deep/
shit bout now im feenin ta go ta sleep/
all this walkig bringin pain to ma feet/
nd tmoros friday so i cant eat meat/
w/e im about ta tear these dudes up/
if i hustle em write i ca get a buck/

not my best but i thought i wuld post it n e wayz
wrote it today as i was walkin down the street as you can tell i was rymin bout things i was thinkin about at the moment
get at me

adedwutang
03-14-2006, 05:05 PM
ne body care to criticize my last 2 posts or shuld i just stop posting since it seems not to many people care

adedwutang
03-27-2006, 09:21 PM
homey i bag hoes like crooks bag clothes/
my hooks bleed flows/
my books i read closed/
people like to look cuz they knoes/
dont nobody smokes mo droes/
gimme those/
gimme that/
gimme blunts and gimme ghats/
startin to look like a party pack/
fuck u man giv it back/
u thought i was 2 yung and culdnt rap/
well i think u thought wrong so keep thinking jack/
gettin tired of rhymin gotta stop smokin spliffs
put some words together call it a verse then call it quits/
i dont need this shit so i mite as well ditch/
no one wants to hear a kid rap so i mite as well....(shit)/

DANIEL DIGITAL
03-28-2006, 07:44 AM
http://www.nixfree.com/userdaten/1000048539/bilder/tempellogo.jpg

adedwutang
03-28-2006, 06:28 PM
thanx but i already got some one workin on my shit, besides im not plannin on becomin a rapstar cuz i hate mainstream music, but ill take it as a compliment

leave me 1 peace

adedwutang
03-29-2006, 05:04 PM
check it, cars a are driven to thrill/
criminals are driven to kill/
ima top class rapper so im driven by will/
cuz im drippin wit skill/
i stay sick and stay ill/
u half of ma stature and im the whole fill/
down south they flashin gold in they grills/
up here we smack the diamond out ya mouth wit them bills/
we dont get flashy we just chill/
stay lo pro until the first mil/
i forever stay spittin shit that b real/
u stay talkin bout people lives that u steal/
i did this and i did that/
giv us some more details wy u holdin back/
cuz u dont got the info to back it up u just crack/
keep talkin bout all the people that u clapped/
what goes around comes around, dont matter if u strapped/

its simple but im not really gettin to serious about writin ne more. lemme kno
1

adedwutang
04-06-2006, 04:46 PM
Listen, you can neva masta this kids statcha/
i blastcha, blow pastcha/
poison you wit every rhyme that u captcha/
watcha organs ruptcha/
you just hip to the hop, homey i out raptcha/
riptcha, body to the limit, put it to the test uh/
now lemme bless ya, wit ma lryical lectcha/
you cant touch my imperical textcha/
dont let me wetcha cuz i gotcha wen i getcha/
homey watch ya step uh/
gonna get wrecked yup/
homey got a tec wut/
puttin holes in ya chest/
yea, runnin outa breathe/
check it, i take 1 45. thats ten shots to ya body/
now you and ya hottie cant take the shots from the shotti/
watch me/
my lyrical flava you can neva test it/
cuz god has blessed it/
thats ma case son i rest it/
check it/
niggas wanna step but they aint got the heart/
cuz i split apart ya brain from the very very start/
and i am soo... very very smart/
rip ya bones from ya flesh yes every single part/
only 5'11 but im a wordplay giant/
take ya everyday common rules then i defy it/
you wanna fuck wit me homey yea u can try it/
thinkin that u betta then me, nah i dont buy it/

get at me

adedwutang
04-09-2006, 10:20 AM
cmon peoples, i wrote 5 verses since the last reply

adedwutang
04-15-2006, 07:15 PM
i aint post nothin in a long time here, theres no point if nobody gonna reply

get at me peoples

Luther Large
04-15-2006, 08:54 PM
it aint bad its str8 just need some more wordplay and better metaphors and shit like that and throw sum fancy ass slang in there too

i didnt read them all i just glanced at a few of'em real quick...but yeah there str8...keep doin ya thing


peace..............

adedwutang
04-16-2006, 11:37 PM
yo this kid ryte here is one sick ass basted/
steppin up means u lookin to get blasted/
blown away by these rhymes that i masted/
this aint just thought up but its crafted/
shines thru the dark no matter how bad u can bash it/
sign me up a check and then cash it/
im as good as sold homey so pass it/
cuz im just as good as ya jeezy's and lil waynes/
i can spit garbage 2 and ill make it in the game/
ill battle bow wow and romeo just to cop fame/
move up onto 50 cuz im a beast that can never b tamed/
i talk about deep shit and niggas lookin at me strange/
so i changed up to mainstream.... nah im just playin/
listen, i cant put my rhymes on paper cuz i prolly roll it up/
i dont spit it either homey i just throw it up/
up to my brain which i call the neverending abyss/
condensation causes my thoughts to constantly drip/
i heat up and vaporize the rhymes that i sticked/
causin it to b forgettin forever and dismissed/
god dam i wish i still remembered that shit/
i dont even remember wat it started wit/
next time im writin that shit down quick/
stop smokin weed, yea that myte b the trick/

get at me-

Vernakular
04-17-2006, 01:06 AM
my advice-

start usin rhymes in couplets

if you rhyme uneven it sounds stupid

also, start trying to incorporate wittier shit in battles, expand with your rhymes, use rhyme schemes

example

cpld scythe in hand with diabolical -cruel- intentions
slayin the weak, inadvertainly killin- fools- in -other- dimensions

add some pattern, make it sound better

Killer Falcon
04-17-2006, 03:00 AM
i read 'the lift'. it was a good read, but the uneven bars threw me off in places. is fairly solid apart from that, and its coherent. i may check some of the others later

peace

adedwutang
04-17-2006, 01:15 PM
good looks peeps
get at me-

adedwutang
04-18-2006, 10:59 PM
oh and by the way, those first couple of post were from a long time ago, id prefer it if u guys payed more attention to the later ones, but feel free to read them all if ya like lol

adedwutang
04-23-2006, 11:28 AM
this is somethin i got on another thread, thought i might as well put it here since its one of my verses. yo check out creepy's thread in the battlefield called the realness, go there and spit some real words


u wanna hear some real shit/
well listen to this real quick/
mainstream stayin up on the rise/
while real niggas sittin back gettin high/
we gotta get wats are's, aint no waitin in line/
fake dudes wit fake tools, waitin for a rhyme/
gettin paid any ways dam that money shuld b mine/
i put in too much time to let these niggas take it/
fuck them, they aint shit, got no skill, they cant spit/
cant battle wit a 100 bars cuz these niggas is fake shit/
my man bino shuld b in the big screen/
sittin on a caddy covered wit paper green/
bitches asses hangin all over the scene/
shit is fucked up, some niggas is crazy/
stuck wit dum luck, but then again these niggas is lazy/
aint makin money waitin for a deal, nah ya niggas is swazy/
listen, my words got levels to it like its a pizza hut deep dish/
show niggas wat it means when i tell em im puttin them to sleep fish/
creepy stay up ma dude, i hope more people read this/
cuz god knows that these real dum niggas need this/

get at me-

adedwutang
04-23-2006, 01:47 PM
listen, i spit rhymes like a lyrical ak/
hittin ya body u screamin out like mayday/
i must say/
wat a beautiful verse i contain in my grasps/
off the dome shit/
kinda words u spit smokin that grass/
bummin at home shit/
gettin crazy dissapatin ya ass/
nahhhh chill son/
i dont get down on that homo ish/
im sittin in a world full of loaded clips/
but on the real dun/
lookin to get out of this criminal empire/
im not made for this/
lookin to relax back and retire/
barely gettin paid fa this/
times runnin out comin down to the wire/
i wish it was all easy and simple/
already passed the puberty and pimples/
watchin my eulogy crumble and crinkle/
fuck that i aint dyin till im full of baby food and wrinkles/

i was just tryin somethin new, mixin up my bars and the such, lemme kno wuts good
get at me-

adedwutang
04-25-2006, 02:49 PM
anybody wanna comment on my last verse cuz im really not sure if i like it 2 much it seems kinda off 2 me but i just need sum1 elses opinion
get at me-

adedwutang
04-26-2006, 08:25 PM
ne body
get at me-

adedwutang
04-27-2006, 08:35 PM
ayt ya i just felt like writin a random verse, i kinda forced it and i changed up the subject alot but besides that it felt pretty solid on certain parts so holla back

yo i burn u from the inside out like a microwave oven/
my flow flows steady like a old man drummin/
first i work hard then i begin bummin/
just like sex/
come hard quick, then start runnin/
listen up son, im the champ wit the title/
bitchslap that brit from american idol/
take out the bitch and that nigga 2/
ima sho u how this nigga do/
compared to me ur shits lookin real shitty/
im comin wit them lines that b real grimy and gritty/
spit so hard that ma teeth lose they filling/
then ya jaw drops, and ya eyes hit the ceiling/
kick ya ass to dust now pay me for the killing/
cuz ud ratha b dead then have that real deep feeling/
of gettin ya ass shamed and ya name in need of rebuildin/
call me rambunctious, wen i b fumin/
turn up the dial, and hear the base boomin/
just to flush out the sound, of ya bitch ass losin/
im cruzin, thru these mc's, leavin them droolin/
i come by and every body got a vest on im assuming/
so i hit ya wit words strait to tha heart/
now it starts coolin/
hypothermia spreads to everyone in the room and/
dam that shit was cold, gotchya niggas poolin/
then i take ya bitches, then start spoonin/
suck they brains out the clit, leave more space for ma tool and/
heres ma number one rule man/
cut that bitch off once she starts lovin you/
cuz wen u start lovin her/
shes lovin otha dudes/
u beggin on the floor, and shes makin otha moves/
keep it strait pimpin, leave lovin to them otha fools/


get at me-

adedwutang
04-28-2006, 03:51 PM
chill back and bounce to the feel good music/
step hard and come strong thats how i do shit/
keep it real, keep it fresh, keep it deep, keep it blessed/
keep doin the stuff that got me cashin checks/
pushin drugs leadin to a timely demise/
fuckin wit fat asses and sexy eyes/
touchin on the breasts and them thick thighs/
doin big shit........ always on the rise/
check out the flo on this smooth ass beat/
bumpin in the back and feel it in the seat/
back to the real shit, stompin wit cleats/
cant touch it cant overcome the defeat/
step back and feel wat im bringin to the table/
heart skips a beat and u feelin unstable/

have to leave b4 i can finish it, this is actually the first verse i did with an intrumental playin in the back, so i was workin more with flow then lyrics
get at me-

adedwutang
04-28-2006, 05:03 PM
peep this shit, my rhymes bring they own hooks/
u prolly got ur shit out the local phone book/
spittin radio wavelengths leave ya dome shook/
nah nigga u got scared by ur own look/
my lines swarm ya body like infected insects/
i got 100 cases of proof that i just detected this reject/
im maybe b a little yung but i demand some respect/
u prolly dont walk how u talk so u need to get ya feet checked/
this nigga dont buy clothes, he bucks shots at his couch/
ur bitch dont got prada, she walkin round wit a pouch/
u spit shit like them niggas from down south/
u wuldnt kno a good line if it came out ya own mouth/
homey ill burn thru ya eyes wit my rhymes like peroxide/
u come around my block and u can run but you cant hide/
try the alley ways thats just around the side/
o yea i forgot its a dead end, sorry i tried/


these are some random little parts of old battles, just wanted some comments,
get at me-

adedwutang
05-01-2006, 03:00 PM
listen, homey u got no original skill/
u been bitin off of original lyrics/
i wuld give u my very own lyrical fill/
but u lyrically cant feel it/
u takin all kinds of lyrical pills/
and u still lyrically incoherent/
cuz u got no lyrical spirit/
u spit rhymes like u afraid some1 gonna hear it/
this red-head nigga thinkin he can take my crown/
but thats 2 much title for u so sit the fuck down/


this was a battle that i had in my school today, this is all that i can remember and its not exactly the way i said it, i think, but i thought i wuld post it anyway siince i havent had too much time to sit down and ryte verses lately
get at me-

adedwutang
05-04-2006, 09:40 PM
uppin this, cmon peoples
get at me-

Vernakular
05-04-2006, 09:42 PM
ELEVATE beyond what ur doing now

adedwutang
05-04-2006, 09:50 PM
i got u, wait for my next verse, ima really sit down for this next one and think about it fareal
get at me-

adedwutang
05-05-2006, 07:45 PM
check it, homey i bring levels of skill to every corner of the planet/
like i was u.p.s., shippin bars, runnin rampid/
my lines b heavy, leavin lunch tables slanted/
comin wit levels of elevation, words neva landed/
i got amazing preconceptions wen i lyrically start flexin/
prolificly pumpin out bars like im heavy weight benchin/
quality over quantity cuttin the mic chord tension/
not to mention, nobody can answer the ultimate question/
how did he get so good/
aint no formidable opponent wen hes heated/
comin strait out the hood/
and can neva b defeated/
u wanna hear somethin crack/
then ill give u somethin better/
this kid weaves lines around ya body/
like a lyrical wool sweater/
freestylin wit no beat/
but heads is still bangin/
i took a break from battlin/
but heads is still hangin/
if u didnt kno better/
u think this kid wus still slangin/
i got off that shit/
but i still get peoples heads rangin/
no bass and no trebble/
but this kid is a hormone driven rebel/
vocal flows b heavy around the throat/
like a gold medal/
parents is strait off the boat/
so my loyalty remains unsettled/
fuck america and fuck every other nation/
its all goin to shit ne way/
read the book of revelations/
every one gonna die someday/
no need for an extension/
best friend took a stray/
half a block from ma home/
all cuz some dude not gettin paid/
aint spittin wut they shown/
its fucked up, that all i gotta say/

ill b back to finish it tmoro and fix up the flo but im busy tonite i kno the ending isnt as good as the opener but i got lazy cuz i dont have the passion to write n e more, shit happens
get at me-

adedwutang
05-10-2006, 03:16 PM
cmon peoples
get at me-

adedwutang
05-10-2006, 07:22 PM
wow, almost 500 views and theres only 17 posts besides mine, how many verses do i have to write b4 i get some good advice, cuz i obviously need it if no1 bothers to leave a simple comment, cmon man, i feel like im wastin my time with this shit
get at me-

adedwutang
06-01-2006, 09:10 PM
i saw my old thread fallin off so i decided to up it wit a verse


now u mite make a good joke, get me good/
but u b lucky if i laugh/
cuz i leave u stuck up like an emergency elevator crash/
u swung on me so i ducked then i dashed/
hit u wut stiff fast and sufferin jabs/
now i got u stutterin like suckerin sufferataj/ (Sylvester the Cat)
u cant stop me wen im goin topspeed/
sonic boom in ya room blowin down trees/
its the hudson river flowin thru these/
sick ass bars call it high skill disease/
my minds filled to the brim, so my pen bleeds/
if writin real shit was a sin, got satan on his knees/
wenever i smell haters, homey i begin to sneeze/
im the real hurricane, these niggas is a breeze/
u thinkin u got more skill, ok, nigga please/
i got better flo in ma sperm, so u can come n suck dees/

get at me-

adedwutang
06-06-2006, 06:21 PM
just uppin the thread, please comment if u c this, even if u just wanna say u suck, thats cool, but something please.
get at me-

White_Mouse
06-07-2006, 05:46 PM
man i'm feelin your stuff man. some of it's kinda simple but it still conveys a good picture. I usually have to come up with sumthin HARD in order to convey the ideas CLEARLY. also good luck in the battle.. . . . . .........
o and one more thing, "sufferin suckatash" is said by SYLVESTER the CAT not tasmanian devil, get your WB cartoons right. LOL

adedwutang
06-07-2006, 05:57 PM
haha dam u rite, maybe i was thinkin of how the tasmanian devil always yellin out random shit, i gotta start watchin cartoons again, i used to love that. good luck to u 2
get at me-

adedwutang
06-26-2006, 11:23 PM
take a step back as i deliver this track/
water gun flow spit addiction like crack/
stackin bars like i hold gold in my chest/
wen the flows put to rest u c the smoke from ma breathe/
check, homey i got deft skill on the mic/
give you chills like the nite/
thrills parallel to a hijacked terrorist flght/
get it rite, its All Day Every Day Wu Tang/
lyrical knowledge incorporated wit slang/
u dont kno the type a hammas we bang/
directin nails thru ya thoughts to ya brain/
discombobulatin shit i cant even explain/
cuz niggas stay gettin lyrically slayed/
some shit happens and some shit never change/
exceedin limits of unbearable pain/
unbearable shame/
this is wut it is in this life slash game/
my mics stay stained, fuck this rhyme scheme/
nigga im a unwilling member of a crime team/
hate of a lyin teen released like a lion scream/
homey u kno wat bein a lion mean/
got the hunger for more, salive drippin off the jaw/
kickin it raw, kickin the door wit two 44's/
like B I G, Big L, or Big Pun/
mother fucka pick one/
this kid got rep so come n get some/

i didnt revise this at all, im 2 tired. just wanted to up the thread wit a verse
get at me-

Father N Dangerous
06-26-2006, 11:42 PM
word now thats wats up

take a step back as i deliver this track/
water gun flow spit addiction like crack/

^^^^^Try to go more along the lines of this, you still need to step it up and get more complex, to make the message your trying to get thru to them alot easier. keep dong your thang, and more COMPLEX... i'll keep an eye on u

adedwutang
06-26-2006, 11:48 PM
yea no doubt, i appreciate the feeback greatly and u came through a couple times alraedy
good looks kid
get at me-

adedwutang
06-28-2006, 12:10 PM
i was kinda fucked up last nite, spittin off the dome wit some peoples, heres wat i remembered, some parts were missin so i filled them in. check it



step rite and let me set this shit off/
i get off on sick rhymes, leavin kids lost/
my skull is like a twist off, bottle cap/
mysterious rhymes like message in a bottle rap/
shit lemme bottle that, classic like six fo's/
protected scrolls got fillin like, jelly rolls/
better b ready wen my beer belly shows/
gettin real heavy dro, mind reactin real slow/
cuz real niggas know this b the real heavy flow/
im real steady joe, draggin on to the beat/
i dig holes in my sleep cuz this nigga stays deep/
got my mind in the street/
ya better watch ya step cuzin, my clip holds a bakers dozen/
this niggas strait dummin, call me b cuz i leave ya ear buzzin/
spittin freestyles over keystyles, gettin to the beat now/
i bust ya head open leavin brain particles like a beat down/
i release now, the heats how i fire niggas from my creep town/
finally i can sleep now, soldiers fucked up so nobody gonna eat now/

get at me-

adedwutang
06-30-2006, 01:32 PM
homey ma bullets stay hollow to seal ya fate wen its swallowed/
my jobs to stop the haters actin like they followed, ma unstoppable flow/
i bottle ma foes, bodies disposed, all the hotties AND the hoes/
everybody gots to go wen this nigga gets heated/
i give props to every mc that i defeated/
a white boy wins lopsided and they say that nigga cheated/
nah duny, im the original gangsta goin back to the origins/
old schools before ma time so i gotta bring it home again/
kings bridge reppin, my hearts where the natural flow is in/
here i go again, spittin flames like a shaolin dragon/
tiger style in ya area dignity is what im baggin/
ma buddha palm will permanently leave ya face piece gone/
HEY MISTER WEATHER MAN, I FEEL A COLD FRONT COMIN ON/
lookin like ya structure been bombed by ma long silver john/
or is it long john silvers, hmm go figure, im broke nigga/
u aint gonna find a gold digger, strait pimpin wit styyyyle/
shit i fucked ya moms last nite, u can see it from her smile/
turn the dial and i turn to a nigga on the prowl/
fuck the a-town, THIS IS HOW IT GO DOWWN/ (think south accent)

no offense to n e body out in GA also

get at me-

Sirkulayshun
07-02-2006, 08:09 PM
nice verse, vocab an the flo was pretty good
"here i go again, spittin flames like a shaolin dragon/
tiger style in ya area dignity is what im baggin/"
liked that line
keep it up
peace

adedwutang
07-05-2006, 01:24 PM
good looks sirk, thanx for the feedback



call me el nino the notorious lyrical downpour/
floodin all systems wen my imperial clouds soar/
hear ma sound roar blowin out ya ear drums/
supernova bars, ma lines they b fearsome/
the fierce one i am, nigga im the son and the sam/
u can feel ma presence like the sun to your hand/
im the diamond in the rough, u the shells in the sand/
i done figured out the plan, i keep spittin and one day ill b herd/
recongnized as a great another master with his words/
my bars stay on point, aint never been curved/
i spit flames and im still better cold wen served/
cuz ma cold winds burn, acknowledge wut i earned/
ma knowlegde done turned, from a kid to a killa/
livin off nickels and dimes now im gettin that scrilla/
who u kno that b illa, this nigga got skills/
my mic made me money so this nigga got wheels/
playboy mother fucker, all ya bitches cop feels/
pimpin aint easy wen u knock shoes boots and heels/
im that nigga that takes and u that nigga that steals/



quick verse, get at me-

adedwutang
07-05-2006, 11:21 PM
ima b on vacation for a while so i wanted to up this before i left and the thread fell off, i was feelin my last couple of verses so lemme kno if you do 2. or give me ur best shot.
get at me-

adedwutang
07-28-2006, 09:33 PM
uppin the thread, been a long time



homey u aint ready for this lyrical face off/
i rip ya nose, ears, and waist off/
like u was a member of LA Weightloss/
u cant measure all the weight i tossed/
ur paycheck cant even fuck wit, MA DAYS OFF/

lil sumthin i was thinkin bout earlier, got 2 lazy to make a whole verse out of it
get at me-

adedwutang
08-11-2006, 02:01 PM
check the kid resurectin the east coast flow/
killa bees knos, pants low c ma glock show/
dont stop tho, broke ass nigga still got hoes/
creepin in real slow, check it/
now lemme finesse the rugged rymes thru ya membrane/
mastered the art form so my goal b the next game/
apart from ya thoughts ma dick hang like a neck chain/
watch it swing from left to rite, all flavors included/
these bitches gettin at me like hoods on a suited/

adedwutang
08-14-2006, 08:50 PM
check it
this homey cant complain, im risin up over pain/
livin life thru the game, all pride no shame/
nummin nerves wit my lyrical novacane/
inhalation of fumes release the beast from the cage/
from the beats to the page/
light up the streets and the stage/
let ma vocals rip holes thru ya body like a pierce gun/
niggas step to god but they all run from the fiercesome/
break beats got me flowin like the blood from ur eardrum/
u talkin like u a animal, then toss me the spear son/
watch as my arrowheads slice thru ya arteries/
thats a fatality kid, now ur soul becomes apart of me/
my whole mentality is, if i aint finished then it never started b/
cant get thru, cant even startle me, run a rampage like bartelbee/
i just created a new top 5 mother fuckers,i dare u not to start with me/

adedwutang
08-18-2006, 08:50 PM
hear the rythm of the beatbox, i beat flows u beat socks/
paragraphs in position now im waitin till the beat knocks/
everyones gets a hear come around come around/
feel my throat muscles vibratin in to the ground/
advance to the exit cuz niggas dont want it/
step to this like a bear trap, souls constantly haunt it./
fallen foes still feel the pain in the chest/
heart skips a beat every second to the tenth/
lungs collapsed so the body longs for a breathe/
fingers burnt off from my infamous mic filled with death/

adedwutang
08-19-2006, 11:12 PM
n e comments

adedwutang
08-19-2006, 11:44 PM
At first look u think this kid was just average/
Dead ass i leave niggas heads in a carriage/
Every day i drop lines just to feel good/
Debtin niggas who think they "real hood"/
What the fuck is they thinking steppin to a prodigy/
Under the assumption they got skills, yea gotta be/
Talkin like they aint never herd of respect/
Always wanna be hard cuz they think they got rep/
Nobody understands u homey, speak clearly/
Grabbin that mic gave u a new reason to fear me/

kinda cheesy but i was bored
get at me

Father N Dangerous
08-20-2006, 12:19 AM
^^^ Haha word one on ya last one feelin how ya did that i gotta do dat shit!

adedwutang
08-20-2006, 12:22 AM
yo we should make a thread where everyone makes a verse like that with there name haha

adedwutang
08-20-2006, 12:08 PM
pass that shit and lemme show u the tru meaning of ya highness/
honor the best and those worthy of recognition from ya blindness/
loyalty is a rare quality reserved for only the realest of real persons/
jealousy and betrayal is what ultimately leads to all these black herses/
settle down and lemme flow freely wit my neverending knowledge/
these verses got continuous streaks like cars do with mileage/
i done wrecked niggas wit my mysteriously vengeful skills/
i vent for bills cuz my temper swallow mc's like pills/
wash em down wit the infamous and aquatic flow/
legendary for the rep now im hot cuz i kno/
the streets we walk, got mic chords lined out in chalk/
break bones wit talk, u can c ma skills from the roots to the stalk/
everybody get wit it, copyrwrite my shit but niggas still bit it/
bring my ego everywhere and the shit still never fit in/

adedwutang
08-22-2006, 08:22 PM
comments ne 1

adedwutang
08-24-2006, 05:38 PM
comin thru, the master of the art of war/
sun tzu darts originatin from a hardened core/
brace yaself, its the king of the treachourus lava flows/
ganja grows alongside a long line of foes/
c ya mind close, losin that feelin of testoterones/
homey u bein marked for death by ma sharpie/
non toxic flavor cuz ima leave u starving/
read in between the lines/fuck you/ like u was parking/
^^^^^----> added it for fun lol
i dont see no action nigga all i hear is barking/


finish later

suav3
08-25-2006, 03:24 AM
Livin home, summin le game show..
Summin le pinto now summin le big show.. ( town now )
I hold down crowns..
Bold, fo, pound ( bounding grounds )
Make, up, dese clowns…
Town, two , town ( what updown )
Axeled globes, money molds, heaters go…
What cha know, what cha now, what cha float… ( what cha goats )
Groove,tools,fools,don’t lose your cool…
Im all ready in the pool ( cools )

Chrome twenty twos screaming, small but still listening.. ( feel me )
Christening dese villains, with d vixens… ( feel me )
P.i. restricted, T.I glistens, Wu-tang vision.. ( feel me )
Mia Heat, how I got you o’niel.. ( see me )
Ol deals, o deal, who steals…. ( see me )
Ol steel, o real, disappear.. ( see me )
Big clear, big beer, big peers… ( see we ?? )

adedwutang
08-25-2006, 12:59 PM
im not sure wut to think of that verse, but either way, drop it in ur own thread.

suav3
08-25-2006, 01:10 PM
im not sure wut to think of that verse, but either way, drop it in ur own thread.

im sorry you can understand some-thing else...... but its a hot verse.. and i never knew you had to have a thread for yourself to make yourself feel good about yourself.. shouldnt everyone put their input and work ntogether?.?.?

adedwutang
08-25-2006, 01:28 PM
nah son theres already a thread made for that. and i made this one so i can c wut other wu-heads think about my skills, not to feel good about myself. if you took a second to look thru the temple you would see thats the whole fuckin point. SO FUCK OFF jk
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suav3
08-25-2006, 02:26 PM
lol i feel that.. sorry for the quick to think notion... but your rhymes are tight still

adedwutang
08-26-2006, 03:03 PM
its all good kid

adedwutang
09-01-2006, 06:05 PM
check it, homey i stay spittin that illmatic shit like esco/
ma breastplate stay filled wit all of the best flows/
i stay crackin bones like i was excersisin a neck roll/
and trust me, ur girl look better wit less clothes/
a man in ma position is tuff, nobody but lex knows ( lex luther(villain))
and u cant even give me props cuz i already gets those/
now u kno that is shoulda been told/
or even written in the scrolls/
that no emcee could b released from ma lyrical threshold/
i bless those, who dont got the gift that i possess so/
i jump on a chics chest and i show her ma breaststroke ( get it )
so lets go, im wit it/
u tryin to do it wen i done did it/
u steppin back and im comin on wit it/
so come git it/
pussy ass nigga walkin around in a boss fitted/
u thought u was a winner but u lost in the forth innin/

couple bars was recycled in the middle, i just thought they fit really well

get at me

adedwutang
09-04-2006, 06:03 PM
comments

adedwutang
09-06-2006, 07:55 PM
im a man on fire homey, u can call me creasy/
seperate ya neck from ya head cuz its just that easy/
chics trail ma sperm cuz they just that sleazy/
u blow niggas i blow roofs cuz ma flows just that breazy/
im too powerful to comprehend so im a take it real slow n chilled out/
ur skills only fill half the glass homey, mines done spilled out/
my rymes take pages, ur shit aint even filled out./
i rap for the ages, u rap like u from down south/
u wouldnt know a good line if it came outa ya own mouth/
u already spit ya 2 bits and i aint even bring em out/

get at me-

adedwutang
09-12-2006, 08:06 PM
comments please

Bigot Hitman
09-12-2006, 08:25 PM
im a man on fire homey, u can call me creasy/
seperate ya neck from ya head cuz its just that easy/
chics trail ma sperm cuz they just that sleazy/
u blow niggas i blow roofs cuz ma flows just that breazy/
im too powerful to comprehend so im a take it real slow n chilled out/
ur skills only fill half the glass homey, mines done spilled out/
my rymes take pages, ur shit aint even filled out./
i rap for the ages, u rap like u from down south/
u wouldnt know a good line if it came outa ya own mouth/
u already spit ya 2 bits and i aint even bring em out/



The white line is the only line in this verse that good IMO. ITs in battle format,which gets boring to me, unless its simply raw.

By battle format i mean the rhymes are all like " i'm do this to you then this" and "you couldn't do this if you were this".
Try tellin a quick story in the middle of yo verses, or make a whole story verse.

adedwutang
09-13-2006, 08:42 PM
yea i kno wut u mean, i been writin story verses for a while, i got em all over the thread, its just sometimes i dont feel like putting so much thought into it. but thanx for the advice ne way

Lil' Ruger
09-13-2006, 08:45 PM
tight is all i gottta say

Bigot Hitman
09-14-2006, 04:48 PM
yea i kno wut u mean, i been writin story verses for a while, i got em all over the thread, its just sometimes i dont feel like putting so much thought into it. but thanx for the advice ne way

My battle format verses kinda got a little story in them like this:

I fund a mental pateint through lyrics that come spiritual
These are fundamental basics, foundations are critical
Potential grows exponetial, been through the white flames
The presidential has the essential credentials that ignite games
Thats of a legend, spoke to the reveren for seven seconds
On some blessin wit words, but niggas wrestlin wit weapons
Peep the message, One versus four hardcore mc's i tore
Washed them niggas upon shore, behind the discount store
Put your, thoughts together nicely
Fuck the fighting through writing, fists strike like lighting
Givin dental records to the biting
Yo Electrical techinical specticales can't see me in a wire
Medical assistance need by the opposin foes, trapped in fire
So put down that desire because death will transpire hastley
Hire niggas to sell saphires, them switchin liars try to waste me

adedwutang
09-14-2006, 05:13 PM
this is what i thought a story verse was like, wrote this a long time ago
your shits tight by the way

The Lift
i woke up to a phone at 5 after 8/
my mouth was filled with a bitter sweet taste/
it was ma man callin up sayin meet me at the place/
so i went to the bathroom and washed the sleep out ma face/
he said i aint got much time and i gotta quikken up ma pace/
so my slo motion movement turned to a race/
grabbed the jewelry out ma case/
then said by to ma baby cuz i knew i plucked an ace/
waitin for my ride on the corner of the street/
ma walkman playin and my head bobbin to the beat/
thinkin to myself how i didnt get enuff sleep/
then i felt a vibration at the bottom of ma feet/
a car approached the curb and it was ma boy in the jeep/
we drove away calm and collective, lookin all sleek/
he drove real slo so i dozed off in the car/
he said wake ya ass up cuz we not that far/
we got to the place and i realized it was a bar/
we went inside and took the lift to the loft/
a man opened the door i said can we speak to the boss/
he said "listen kid u better get lost"/
my ass, i kno every man has his cost/
slipped him a twenty and he said the niggas in the back/
walkin thru the room and saw everyone was wearin black/
aint hard to tell that they was sellin crack/
the rocks was big and the pockets wasnt flat/
herd a deep voice in the shadows that instructed wut our mission was/
wasnt listenin to wut he said except "u gonna need some slugs"/
later found out we had to prove our worthiness in the set/
veterans was arguin as they were settin up a bet/
"betcha the white boy backs out" forget that man i gotta rep/
this is my life man i cant live off of checks/
my boy told me we had to merc some kid/
they didnt even let us kno what this little nigga did/
i thought to myself this is some fucked up shit/
wut could of this little boy done to get this bid/
gotta do wut i gotta do, never mind wats rite/
creeped up to his buildin in the middle of the nite/
saw him chillin on the corner so we stayed out of site/
i hesitated as my man started out into the light/
confronted him real nice, n he said wutup u wanna fight/
had my ghat in hand and i was holdin it tight/
i made a movement real slight, and this dude pulls a 40 from the right/
we open fire at eachother and he hits my man in the chest/
i emptied my clip and put my hand to rest/
then i was shocked by wut had happened next/
a cop comes around the corner so i run till im out of breath/
a quik cut to the side alley and into a random door/
i sat and waited smellin the piss on the floor/
my finger was feelin real sore, as i waited some more/
walked out prayin to god that i would b ignored/
next mornin paper says that 2 kids were found dead/
i had so many thoughts rushin to my head/
couldnt sleep all nite sittin in my bed/
woke up and looked for the paper that i had read/
nowhere to be found and i hear the phone ring once then again/
my man says where u been man how much u overslept/
i realized it was all a dream and i felt blessed/
im gettin out of this business man i never shuld of messed/

this isnt exactly how it went but i made it a little little different so i can ryme, and its more like a poem with no beat to it so u gotta add some flow to it when u read to make it sound rite
get at me

Bigot Hitman
09-14-2006, 05:47 PM
Yeah thats what a story verse is to me too. I'm just sayin thats whats my battle shit looks like, like two line storys mixed in wit the "i'm this and that" battle format shit. like

These first two lines is like the "you can't do this" type shit:

Yo Electrical techinical specticales can't see me in a wire
Medical assistance need by the opposin foes, trapped in fire

Then the last two adds some kind of quick two line story:

So put down that desire because death will transpire hastley
Hire niggas to sell saphires, them switchin liars try to waste me

adedwutang
10-13-2006, 09:12 PM
check it, homey this aint the a-town/
i dont lean wit it rock wit it/
im mean wit it pop wit it/
i chiefed it then copped it/
feens need it i shopped it/
hot off the block dropped it/
top dis, shot missed/
got ya stocks pissed/
away, investments astray/
reflecting ya thoughts either way/
homey its redemption today/


lil different but i was just listenin to mona lisa and i started rappin 2 it.

adedwutang
11-16-2006, 08:27 PM
here comes the pain ima bring it real sick nasty/
just like ma nigga used to spit it named shappy/
bustin beats on the textbooks and lunch tables/
spittin flames shock ya nerves like jump cables/
listen to the gun fable, aint drop no bodies yet/
my bats the only thing i need to get ya body wet/
soaked in pools of ya own blood and piss/
i got tools that flood ya lil brain wit Kris/
yea thats ma name nigga dont stomp on it/
kridigis in jiberish so i flaunt on it/
cant raech the level of my skills so niggas wanna chomp on it/
well u can bite this mother fucker i boss ma shit/
go head try and spit it how i spit it, u get lossed on the shit/
get crossed up like i was the answer(Iverson) and u the problem/
aint no mathematical equation to ur loss for u to start solvin/

get at me

adedwutang
12-29-2006, 02:00 PM
i been spittin on everyone elses threads lately but heres one for my own

today was the day, atleast it seemed so/
lil negro was ready for the game of his life/
now hes followin the way of the lite/
his soul never LEFT cuz his body was RIGHT/
his heart is always present thru the day and the nite/
didnt deserve wut he got but god butted in/
shot on the block at the spot the rocks flooded in/
head in the sewer lil niggas family started runnin in/
cops never got the suspect they just threw it in/
the garbage can filled wit unsolved crimes and sins/
this is the life of coke lines, doorags and tims/
push rock to stay alive in the times of kin/
kind of family that let u down when ya lives are shit/
everyones eyes are split, from up and down not east to west/
only see the narrow vision, unnoticed to the kids who finally released there breath/
cuz its the last one there lungs are ever gonna take/
when the fuck are these people ever gonna wake/
to the nonsense replacin logical decisions i wont wait/
willin to take action for wuts rite not just the sake/


peep dat shit

Father N Dangerous
12-29-2006, 02:04 PM
hell yeah nice lil drop right here fasure! feelin it, but still room for elevation! keep droppin in ya thread and i'll keep readin thme and tellin ya wats wat. stay up keep blessin

adedwutang
12-29-2006, 05:40 PM
good looks kid, ima re post some verses from other threads, so i cant get some feeback.

adedwutang
12-29-2006, 05:44 PM
just another day on the grind in the city/
skipped school, fuck it gotta get it on ma grizzly/
thought i take a trip to canal street/
need some new kicks n discounts lookin sweet/
homey got his ipod bangin as i walk with that swagger of oneself/
seen some fly as honeys i thought i drop some knowledge bout ma wealth/
soon as i step up i hear a roar from a far, closes in now people steppin out from they cars/
what the fuck is that people started shoutin/
bitches started screamin and niggas started crowdin/
moment of silence as the masses stood still/
fuck me if the sound of a blast could kill/
if u ever seen a airplane crash into a hill/
u seen a magic show, cuz the shits not real/
the whole fuckin thing disappeared in a flash/
the remnants that remained were only fire and ash/
after all the confusion and tension another plane hit/
i figured wat was goin on and said motherfuck this shit/
death and misery arose from the scene/
chaos took over and everybody fleed/
i was out of the panic now, runnin for my life/
tellin people book it to the rite/
see canal street runs east and west/
the plane hit down south when i released my breath/
took 1 break atleast to rest/
coughs comin deep from my chest/
couldnt look back as im swarmed by strangers/
a cloud of ash rose and released more danger/
i wanna go back and help but im not that person/
im gettin the fuck out as the situation worsens/
cant find ma nigga where the fuck did he go/
looked up real quick and that nigga merked it down the road/
in the clear now expectin another attack to explode/
paranoid in the middle of a battlefield let the ghats unload/
experiencin that makes other shit seem so little/
unimportant or fragile, meaningless and brittle/
how the fuck can u compare that shit to another/
nothin else ever brought me closer to ma brother/
six years later and it still seems like yesterday/
close ones deceased, its christmas and i cant get no rest today/
they'll forever be remembered say a prayer this way/
bless osama as that bitch hides in his mother fuckin cave/
i hope him and his whole family gets takin out by a mother fuckin wave/



wrote this on the spot, peace

adedwutang
12-29-2006, 05:47 PM
this is a verse about Kramer and his little slip up



can u believe the ignorance of some to say some shit/
callin out niggas like its lunch time then play dumb, shit/
i step on stage and let him now wut im workin wit/
death by mic chord and seinfeld never even noticed it/
dam ma dude, i remember how u used to walk around like a cokehead/
always slammed the door shut like the popo was patrollin it/
now a fofo is inevitably shown and aint no controllin it/
see a nigga holdin thick and u aint livin for another moment bitch/
nah chill, i aint even mad at this incompetent wash up/
the whole world need its cleanin. but he still gon get knocked up/
atleast he had the balls to come out speak his voice/
americas so fucked up his next book gonna win the readers choice/
im so sorry fans, i really never ment to hurt you/
but these niggas keep on takin all of ma commercials/
affirmative action is in place and u cant stop it/
it aint there fault ur act died but u still cant drop it/
ya shit is whack son, unemployed and equivelant to black sons/
u cant even represent white people and u gonna fite against the black ones/


1

adedwutang
01-02-2007, 06:07 PM
bumpin

adedwutang
01-20-2007, 01:44 PM
lemme bless the stage wit a earth shatterin performance/
bass blasts in ya eardrum, lookin for a worthiness opponent/
my brain cells filled with chambers of 36, missin a component/
RZA sprinkle some production on ma rhymes cuz this nigga earned it/
give props to the fam that stimulated my very train of thought/
flow is handed down and adapted to the game i brought/
the same name i sought wound up becomin a rap star/
so i switched up my style down to the very last bar/
this nigga got more multies then a 4th grade times table/
live life like im the reason the crime rates stable/
believe or not, the pigs round here shuttin shit down real tight/
but they cant lock up my words cuz im ready for the inevitable fight/
my heats so deadly it brings dark to the shade, who the fuck needs a light/
different from the crowd, cuz in a gloomy place everyones flow looks bright/

Bigot Hitman
01-20-2007, 02:30 PM
lemme bless the stage wit a earth shatterin performance/
bass blasts in ya eardrum, lookin for a worthiness opponent/
^^^
(good opening bar, 8/10)

my brain cells filled with chambers of 36, missin a component/
RZA sprinkle some production on ma rhymes cuz this nigga earned it/
^^^
Didn't rhyme perfectly but, the flow is striaghtm lyrics is descent, (7/10)

give props to the fam that stimulated my very train of thought/
flow is handed down and adapted to the game i brought/
^^^
(nice multi, perfect flow, above average lyrics, 8.8)

the same name i sought wound up becomin a rap star/
so i switched up my style down to the very last bar/
^^^
(Good job at stickin to ur topic, another descent mulit, 8/10)

this nigga got more multies then a 4th grade times table/
live life like im the reason the crime rates stable/
^^^
(Best bar so far lyrically, pretty good metaphor, 9/10)

believe or not, the pigs round here shuttin shit down real tight/
but they cant lock up my words cuz im ready for the inevitable fight/
^^^
(ok bar, descent lyrics, ok flow, 7/10
my heats so deadly it brings dark to the shade, who the fuck needs a light/
different from the crowd, cuz in a gloomy place everyones flow looks bright/
^^^
(think u should of thrown a multi here, with needs a light, stretched lines, good lyrics, 7.5/10)

Overall-8, This verse is good for a quick one, keep up at that shit.

adedwutang
01-20-2007, 03:18 PM
good looks kid, thanx for takin the time to break it down
peace

adedwutang
03-03-2007, 01:32 PM
woow my shit fell wayyy off, ima up wit some lyrics

check it, fuck a beat kid, my rhymes bring they own base and trebble/
i raised the level to a place that can never be settled/
resurectin revolutionary rebels/
this kid got lyrics braided into a metal/
i revolve around time like the diamonds on a bezel/
blazed out the earth from my ravenous flow/
hit you with a thousand blasphemus bows/
rackin up doe's breakin backs of ma foe's/
stackin bricks in the dresser cuz ma closets packed full of clothes/
and one time 2 many i let a nigga slide on my watch/
no more hidin from cops cuz they the niggas supplyin the blocks/
police escort for drug dealers payin out they ass/
officer look the other way cuz they crazy bout that cash/
well my crazy bout to blast, legit business get pension for workin in the past/
fuck the game man im dyin to drop out the city/
makes some moves and my apartment soon to resemble that of diddy's/

adedwutang
05-31-2007, 11:15 PM
so can u blame me, do what i gotta do for the money/
get dropped dunny, not funny no jokes not sunny/
serial killer cuz im seriously read to squeaze heaters/
life and death seperated by mere millimeters/
i fear neither cuz i resurect simply bein near the lever/
liver bust turn ya blood to a black shadowy rust/
never trust a nigga wit a mouth like a battery thrust/
assault and battery plus, black mask fuck ya little bitch ass up/
a medieval soul, im the kenievel to the lyrical sphere filled wit evil/
really no equal to the retrieval of minds that i take wit no question/
previous proffession i was blessed wit the spirit of a revrend/
just to learn my lesson, some people not made to that type of essence/
my lyrical presence is a menace to a any ear that aint ready/
honorable mention wit no announcement, fuck u spaghetti/
say u got an impala but never seen a chevy b, bitch was a betty but only back in 1970/
messin wit a seventeen,nigga only type of green u seen is cold hard celery/

adedwutang
06-04-2007, 06:28 PM
call me el nino the notorious lyrical downpour/
floodin all systems wen my imperial clouds soar/
hear ma sound roar blowin out ya ear drums/
supernova bars, ma lines they b fearsome/
the fierce one i am, nigga im the son and the sam/
u can feel ma presence like the sun to your hand/
im the diamond in the rough, u the shells in the sand/
i done figured out the plan, i keep spittin and one day ill b herd/
recongnized as a great another master with his words/
my bars stay on point, aint never been curved/
i spit flames and im still better cold wen served/
cuz ma cold winds burn, acknowledge wut i earned/
ma knowlegde done turned, from a kid to a killa/
livin off nickels and dimes now im gettin that scrilla/
who u kno that b illa, this nigga got skills/
my mic made me money so this nigga got wheels/
playboy mother fucker, all ya bitches cop feels/
pimpin aint easy wen u knock shoes boots and heels/
im that nigga that takes and u that nigga that steals/

some old shit, get at me

adedwutang
06-21-2007, 06:52 PM
aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

adedwutang
06-22-2007, 05:24 PM
feeedddback please

adedwutang
06-29-2007, 11:20 AM
somebody

adedwutang
02-08-2008, 11:54 PM
feedback ppeeeppsss
hey wusup ya thought i come back and drop some knowledge on you old ass mother fuckers haha check it

Invisible Ink, the new alias of a general/
Natioanl Treasure my rhymes become federal/
no retinals, cant focus on the look of ma lines/
only pigment i contain is the blood in my eyes/
word of the wise, too hot cant throw dirt on the sun that i shine/
no cover no bullets your mine/
no time no money im crime/
pause, gimme a second its hard dam work to shit on this record/
lucky like a seven, get ya head blown off split like a melon/
come steppin/
im reppin every hood that be feelin ma message/
hard shit on this track im spittin wit method/
maybe ghost, or masta, im still killin you/
tax man u all paid up but im still billin u/
stick a ice pick in ya neck yes im chillin too/
sorry for the graphics but im just too visual/
gone for a min but a nigga got a legacy/
legendary skill not just a heisman but the treasury/
__________________

J.T.S.
02-11-2008, 11:41 AM
aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

You lyrically got some shit off your chest with this one.
Kinda reminds me of "Hungry" by U-god but better.
I only have one beef, you need to fix your spelling.

adedwutang
02-12-2008, 12:32 PM
haha good looks yo im actually really good wen it comes to grammar and all that but wen i write freestyles i put down watever but thanx for replyin son.
peace-

adedwutang
02-19-2008, 06:10 PM
the last page of the scrolls homey the dynasty is over/
ima retire and come back harder like jay to tha hova/
invisible Ink write the name down and remember it/
take a mental note of ma skill cuz it only lead to ya betterment/
the delicate flow is so ancient that they just had to relic it/
relish it, sell a cig to a sick cuz im on that goodfella shit/
infectious like staff no vaccination for the lives that im takin/
chef master i bake bad mutha's so hot u cant touch this kid sucka/
fuck up ya ankles wen i break em like half-amazin at the rucker/
bring da ruckus cuz ya never herd somethin fuckin up ma structure/
i hail from the greatest ice storm New York is back mother fuckers/
i dont act son ima hustler wen it comes to fuckin up bustas/
Big L status smoke spliffs wit the baddest rather im badder then the illest/
spillin the knowledge stone cold im the chillest/
killer raps wit science im the devil version of a chemist/

adedwutang
02-27-2008, 10:04 PM
cmon ma niggas

OTB
02-27-2008, 10:15 PM
linez 8-12 had my head bobbin yo-

nice work

adedwutang
03-01-2008, 06:47 PM
yea that was my favorite part too i tried to make a verse around it real quik but i dk cuz good looks tho
peace

adedwutang
03-27-2008, 08:26 PM
check it
nuclear rhymes split apart ya particles cuz ma flow so marvelous/
part of his method is a criminal-esque molecular level arsenist/
ima son yo ass cuz this boy got too many bitches im mackin shit/
guess whos back in it, i bust yo head aint no way of reattachin it/
smack ya koofy off, strait up dunce a nigga like ima game show host/
parasitic insect cut up ya veins til i get to ya brain then i choke/
smokin motha fuckas bring a death fog as i approach/
cant escape the mist just sacrifice ya self for the roast/
lackin the inte

Bigot Hitman
03-27-2008, 08:37 PM
aint it funny, the gap between wealth and poverty/
rich kids dont do shit and got a life set out properly/
some kids culda been a better son if they had the chance probably/
but u dont gotta do somethin u dont need to just wut u gotta be/
and it just seems that i gotta be somethin better then wat i been/
never can i win cuz i just set another goal, live another sin/
unblelievable is the pressure to take yourself another level/
10 dollars out of 2 it seems only diamond bezels is the absolute acceptable/
and then it becomes regretable, you payin thousands for somethin easily forgettable/
cash culda went to a charity fund or even a gift for a friend who acts respectable/
incredible how money takes over and greed no longer is in the frame/
would you have done the right thing with ur money, i think most wuld do the same/
u hate to think about it because its not ur problem to begin with/
until its those same issues and triumphs u gotta live with/
cant get large fries cuz it goes over ur budget/
lemme pick up a dime wen no ones lookin fuck it/
got a friend from school buyin a new lancer 2008/
happy for ma niggas but wut the fuck do i got on my plate/
wut do i gotta show for all the times i been through/
see a cheap nigga and u think hes a bum who needs you/
ur bubble jacket got holes were the fluffy shit seep through/
some days you wish god talks to your soul and says here/
i finally freed you/

If you shortened a couple lines in the begining, this would be one kind of music i would listen to. You gotta a simple and upfront style of writing, and by the end of this verse i really got the points. Reminds me of a conscious devin the dude verse, without all the rhyme schemes he writes with. Out of all the bullshit on this site, this verse is stands apart from what i've read.
8/10.

adedwutang
03-30-2008, 04:00 PM
thanx cuz i appreciate that, sometimes i get heated and i just wanna talk real shit so good looks on that. ill try n keep that up.
peace-

adedwutang
04-01-2008, 11:25 PM
pass that shit and lemme show u the tru meaning of ya highness/
honor the best and those worthy of recognition from ya blindness/
loyalty is a rare quality reserved for only the realest of real persons/
jealousy and betrayal is what ultimately leads to all these black herses/
settle down and lemme flow freely wit my neverending knowledge/
these verses got continuous streaks like cars do with mileage/
i done wrecked niggas wit my mysteriously vengeful skills/
i vent for bills cuz my temper swallow mc's like pills/
wash em down wit the infamous and aquatic flow/
legendary for the rep now im hot cuz i kno/
the streets we walk, got mic chords lined out in chalk/
break bones wit talk, u can c ma skills from the roots to the stalk/
everybody get wit it, copyrwrite my shit but niggas still bit it/
bring my ego everywhere and the shit still never fit in/
__________________

ohh man i love this verse lol

adedwutang
04-03-2008, 01:59 PM
check it, you cant dissolve the flow this kid got til im finish/
your raps i diminish, attack the track big shit u cant miss it/
punk mother fuckers in the kitchen, washed up u cant dish it/
feelin ma disses convert ur ass from wack ass to Kristian/ (my name)
best of wishes to ya homey u gonna need the help/
step up to ya father and this bitch nigga gets the belt/
think u got me in the corner better revise ur thoughts/
i rise up from the lost chop the top off the boss/
killer instinct only comes out wen u the poorest/
lolipoppin this nigga flamin like a torch in the forest/
pour gasoline rhymes til i engulf ya whole family/
satanic raps the fire in my mind equivelant to insanity/
representing all of humanity i take out UFO's wit 16's kid im dangerous/
extraterrestrial aliens cant match my intelligence nah nigga/
they aint as fly as i get, i reach space wen my dj finish wit the set/
smack the visual out ya head cuz im moving on to the next/
nigga i can deepthroat bitches wit ma balls on her breast/

adedwutang
06-18-2008, 05:43 PM
...

adedwutang
03-31-2009, 11:15 PM
whatttt my shit fell off to page 17 hahah ima bump this for tonite and ima drop some shit real soon check out ma old verses homeys
peace-

adedwutang
04-01-2009, 03:53 PM
Invisible Ink bringin you the crazy visual lyrics/
the world of imagination written clearly wit spirit/
smooth rhythm variation listen so u culd feel it/
animation of my bars come together still coherent/
cause and effect my words placing pictures in ya head/
my skills make ya mind grow like yeast does to bread/
and the beast does his best at the least for the rest/
the keys for the blessed located in the middle of my chest/
takin deep breaths so i can stop it from gettin swallowed/
throw it at my metaphysical hopefully others follow/
then my bodys lookin hollow cuz its just a organ without the ism/
Im Still the Main feature a mastermind behind the wisdom/
so listen to it twice and maybe you culd figure out the message/
im not a preacher or a elder just a victim wit a lesson/

peacee-

adedwutang
05-04-2009, 12:39 AM
check it, im bout to start spittin knowledge wit precision/
protected scrolls trippin, gotta switch it up before its rippin/
caught me sllppin, never that, just been chllin for a minute/
henny sippin, never wack, just a nigga in tha kitchen/
got that fire for ya homey, im cookin wit a recipe/
cut you inside out im like a butcher wit a melody/
better be the deadly medly ma punches flow so steadily/
BX reppin streets, and we always ready wit da weaponry/
step to me, battle rappin im slappin mad basteds/
i smack wack rappers til they the last one blasted/
mah bat crack backs leavin they black asses in traffic/
maybe on the bruckner or the cross bronx yea its classic/
so dont cross bronx unless you got mad niggas packin/
cuz the black ratchets matchin hats like they plastic/
we jackin jackets off the homeless if they have it/
im mad sick wit the words that i crafted/
back to the roots cuz im pissed and im stressed
gettin dressed, champion hoody black tims and a vest/
ghetto gear nigga its BX or its less, whos next/


just battle rappin shit im pissed off get at me.

adedwutang
03-01-2011, 05:26 PM
Some lyrics off one of my freestyles. Might have a few typos but you get it.

Yo I'm always stayin fly so I'm kinda like a pilot son/
And I'ma be a phantom up until I ride inside of one/
The livest one I'm flyin son homey n I rhyme for fun/
Blindin sun the way that skills radiate since 88/
Play me straight and you'll see I never play it safe/
Take the cake n eat to either me or you/
Got em feelin blue cuz they throwin up they lyrics/
Ballemic bars every single word breaks a spirit/
Everytime that they hear him they be fearin my appearance/
I aint just comin for the throne mother fucker ima steal it/
Comparin me to weed you see I seem like sour d/
N I rap so tight you never need the outer leaf/
Smokin more then wiz kalifa but my rhymes a little deeper/
Tooth fairy rappers come to meet the grim reaper/
But Shout out to gstat n the whole fuckin click tho/
Money makin Marty steal ya bitch Md yo/
big homey always cuffin chics we call em drama/
Thought you had swag never met ma nigga papa/
Roh tha shit uup mark I'm tryin to get blunted/
Whoever said they roll better musta been frontin/
I'm buzzin livin in the life n I love it/
You can trust it that you never catch skills lookin rusted/
Lady lustin baby pumpin since 1980 somethin/
born n raised by the rap game 20 yrs n runnin/
Listenin to 36 chambers n I soak it up/
Tokin up big L's cuz its big pun intended/
Spittin triple meanings is the super secret weapon/
Rumor is the kid got potential where he's headin/
Its just me n SP rockin melo m7's/
Double eagle reppin son listen to my message/
Guarantee they love me cuz I never let em down/
every masterpiece turns my haters into clowns/
Drownin out all the mainstream collaborations/
The last straw they pulled is what held my only patience/
Rhymin like I'm backslappin smirks off there faces/
Make you grip my bars like I locked you in some cages/
ya never gettin out now just become submissive/
deny that my rhymes caught your mind then you trippin/
My homeys on a mission in a shark pool fishin/
Cuz I'm huntin big game n I got em all missin/
Never took a loss so I never lost a fan/
My plan is to hold the whole future in my hands/
better do somethin if it stays the way it stands/
Burnin brands on your shortys chest skills is the man/
Put it in quotations skills will each your fams/
Deadly dosage only need to use a couple grams/
Hear some blams cuz I got the murder crews dumpin/
Hear some fans cuz I got em all fuckin jumpin/
smokin somethin its the big bad wolf you hear me huffin/
I'm in a state of mind that not everybody reaches/
N I get the haters stickin to me like some leeches/
You get schooled by the skills that my verse teaches/
any resistence within his path you know skills will breach it/
The world is fucked up and nonodys left to save it/
Live my life like I'm fightin death before he takes it/
N I pray to somethin after so my grandma rests in peace/
If god rejects my soul then I prolly suck my teeth/
Gimme some fly beats n watch me make some fly tracks/
Gimme some wack beats n watch me make some fly tracks/
apologies for repetition I'm just used to my consistence/
Precision so I'm winnin by unanimous decision/
Cookin up a rythm n you know I get persistent/
Like when I try to convince some pretty chics to kick it/
Live it to the fullest n I'm never lookin back/
Spittin silver bullets to these bloodsuckin bats/
Visions of the future n ill show you where I'm at/
Couple flats and a couple coupes fuckin up these groups/
classy suits Comin wit my troops pockets full of loot/
A flow that's pumpin through my veins rhymin from the heart/
But I do it for the money hustlin poet from the start/
Its the art

adedwutang
03-02-2011, 04:50 PM
Heres the lyrics to another new track of mine lemme kno peeps.

yo a menace to society this is murderous variety/
Ya never be as fly as me these skills have provided me/
A blessin that's refreshin to this so called profession/
Revealin imperfections and implantin my infection/
Or a virus on papyrus man I told you I'm the flyest/
Like Jamal meetin silus even then Ill be the highest/
Guess I'm biased or a hater cuz I'm selfish for the paper/
If I want her ima take her n I get em any flavor/
say you play the game but that don't make you a player/
Take a razor slice your wrists n do us all a favor/
That be safer then you steppin to me lyrical vasectame/
DisRespectin me and Ill annihalate your destiny/
I'm reppin g they checkin me alledgedly I'm bettin see/
Invest in me and you increase your wealth exponentially/
Cuz every other hour skills raisin up the power/
you be sweet and ill be sour but the rhymes I let It shower/

Hook:2X
N I'm just speakin my mind you hardly listen/
Pretty soon its gon be rari whippin while I'm cardi sippin/
On vacation cuz they love hearin all of my creations/
Through rythm captivation that's lyric assassination/

I'm Spittin Til we paid in full like Rico mich and ace/
Wit some clicquot sexy bitches and that sticky bud to blaze/
I just spit it a couple min nd you scratch your head for days/
Soon to catch him out on tour you can Stick to flippin kays/
Swishin treys so illeagle maybe they should lock him up/
and That's any way you want it homey skills ill box em up/
Spittin thru ya system rythm winnin when I chop it up/
Ayo Jack lob it up I slam it down we alley oopin/
yo your lines aint even hot so WTF are you loopin?/
Dam amateurs i damage ya never knew I Jeru?
Black hoody timbaland dudes runnin thru ya crew/
Rock republic button down checkers letters on my sweaters/
Man They rap about berettas but I got a sicka team/
Skills will bring it to your neck like a fuckin guillotine/
Homey I really aint playin so cypha don't get gassed/
All you Haters burn n crash man up n show a little class/

Hook:
Now I'm just speakin my mind you hardly listen/
Pretty soon its gon be rari whippin while I'm cardi sippin/
On vacation cuz they love hearin all of my creations/
Through rythm captivation that's lyric assassination/

I may never be immortal but my rhymes are eternal/
I be jumpin any hurdle wit every line inside my journal/
You a turtle to a cheetah for the cheddah I'm a fiend/
I can do it all my own but I'm betta wit my team/
Cuz I'm a new school cat rappin like the old days/
Bitch I aint Bruno mars you can catch your own grenades/
Kickin doors liquid swords step into ma range/
And my words sting ya chest like poison tipped blades/
Just coursin thru your veins yo I betchu you fugaze/
Turn the page if they rappers then take me off the list/
I gotta ocean full of flows shorty take a little dip/

adedwutang
03-10-2011, 12:35 PM
where you at haters

Guarded By Martyrs
03-22-2011, 03:43 PM
yo a menace to society this is murderous variety/
Ya never be as fly as me these skills have provided me/
A blessin that's refreshin to this so called profession/
Revealin imperfections and implantin my infection/
Or a virus on papyrus man I told you I'm the flyest/
Like Jamal meetin silus even then Ill be the highest/
Guess I'm biased or a hater cuz I'm selfish for the paper/
If I want her ima take her n I get em any flavor/
say you play the game but that don't make you a player/
Take a razor slice your wrists n do us all a favor/
That be safer then you steppin to me lyrical vasectame/
DisRespectin me and Ill annihalate your destiny/
I'm reppin g they checkin me alledgedly I'm bettin see/
Invest in me and you increase your wealth exponentially/
Cuz every other hour skills raisin up the power/
you be sweet and ill be sour but the rhymes I let It shower/



Really feeling this verse.
Pretty much flawless.

I'll have to check through your thread.

adedwutang
03-22-2011, 05:07 PM
Good Looks ma G I appreciate that. Ill post new stuff soon check back.