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07-28-2008, 11:35 AM
wattup all this is my first post on this site though i've been scoping out the chamber, hip hop shop and know the ledge for a while now. figure my first post should be something i wrote lemme knowwhat you all think...

before a moment's notice i noticed the moment
translucent component take five for encroachment
configured to disfigure a perfect world out of bounds
feel the storms gather around but i blow them to the ground
i don't make up stories just try and broadcast wise
eyes engulfed in cries tears filling in the skies
to reprimand is in-Demand but not for order
shatter all the borders back and forth no need for quarters
underground in a basement wonder around with no placement
smoke clears the way devils hidden but adjacent
hesitatin hesitation leading tracks off the pavement
won't let slave ships gather up a mason
building and distilling bricks with feeling no revealing
stack them past the ceiling let the stinging do the healing
open up the ninth inning leaving only billings
standing ovation like a red socked Schilling
poison in the mouth feeling blue with the rhyme
simple with the crime life counts more than time
uncertainty complexity leaves many dreams left unseen
off the scenes i seem to seep through seems lifes not what it used to be
cause in the mind i'm confined thoughts penetrate the gimmick
never steep for me to bend it but to sweep up the image
clueless with the sickness where it seems i'm just a witness
use diversions with the swiftness hold it off until it's cryptic
magic forces bearing down drowning out every sound
lifted off of every ground sinking when i'm seeing down
perched on a heavy frown extra pillows in the burial
comfort til i awake soon baked not trivial
puzzles broken into layers depths are never reached
jenga til the point i'm the block that can't be beat
it's a feat that physics can't echo no rhythmic
bouncing off the walls chasing lights getting fitted
condition to envision pristine thoughts of wisdom
glimpsed on certain levels telescoped mind's vision
floating in the same boat just on opposite ends
imagine not imagining would it still be pretend
parallel dimension as if Vic pushed send
unparallel comprehension leaves a blank stare again

Prince Rai
07-28-2008, 01:36 PM
welcome to the corp!

solid words right there.


07-28-2008, 02:17 PM
thanks man much appreciated

07-28-2008, 03:19 PM
this is hot.
keep it up

07-28-2008, 11:28 PM
Nice work