View Full Version : Start of the finish

08-27-2005, 07:02 PM
im like a heat magnet
why do i attract so much heat
I got the same niggas doubting me now bowing down to my feet
im the truth, none of them made up spits
i neva go out like jay my fire stay lit
You messing wit a G nigga you know im the best
i'll have u laying on a trauma table with a shock in ya chest
i got so many charges for that murder attempt
i got niggas walking off with a weak tail limp
im like a hurricane nigga i hit real hard
i can kill with my nigga with just 28 bars
just like camron im off of that purple haze
ill have ya mind trying to find like it's going through a maze
and trust me you don't want none of this
cuz my gear stay fly
i got enough jewelry to put a sparkle in ya eye
do u know who u talking to
my niggers stay strapped up
niggers get clapped up
messing with a king that's how niggers get smacked up
and if u one of them niggers then u just got messed up

08-27-2005, 07:04 PM
yo give me ur honest opinion

Luther Large
08-27-2005, 07:48 PM
not too great you have sum good ideas...but most of them are common ideas... there are plenty people who can do that...heres my advice....use better vocabulary either try and be lyrical or get sum nice punchlines that make people laugh...and instead of trying to sound hard be creative and sound like yourself...by the way this belongs in the temple of darts

08-27-2005, 08:24 PM
this is to greeneyes63
how u trying to give me that whack mess u dumbass nigga
i can spit two bars and dislocate ur figure

Luther Large
08-27-2005, 08:36 PM
battle?you wanna do it with me!
this clown aint taken over nuthin not even his puberty

08-28-2005, 02:03 AM
greeneyes, i wouldnt even bother, 13, c'mon, they need to make a wu tang corp junior for all these lil jits

Luther Large
08-28-2005, 09:05 AM
yeah you right

Grim Reapa
08-28-2005, 01:35 PM
besides greeneyes u would destroy him if he came out in a battle with a verse like that i would destroy him, forget about what he said he's just mad cuz he aint gone through puberty yet hormones 1

08-28-2005, 03:18 PM
i looked at some of yall stuff
yall mad whack
forget all yall u just mad youngster struck back

Sicka than aidZ
08-28-2005, 03:29 PM
its alright man.....i like how u changed your approach.....u came from different angles.....beats the hell outta cats who just talk shit about your momma an homosexuals an shit
jay Z"
a buncha shit.........the last four lines were ok but u got mad skills for 13,...u can improve alot,....those 1 liners are dope.....no body's tryin to argue tho man, so dont let posts an opinions get u upset,.....you'll just end up takin shit to serious an then you'll wanna leave the site......

overall I thought u came strong...staycool

08-28-2005, 03:49 PM
i agree wit sicka for 13 little man comes strong!!

08-28-2005, 04:16 PM
thanks sicka, i understand what u saying but i just be getting tight

Luther Large
08-28-2005, 07:00 PM
takeover.... you asked for my honest opinion and i gave it to you

Grim Reapa
08-28-2005, 07:35 PM
yeah kid if u cant take constructive critisizm than get off the board 1