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SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
12-25-2008, 10:33 PM
Whenever I write a line I employ cloners cold rover hold cha pen
I am never sober Iím always fueled by the urge to purge the game of its own germs/
You can shroom up a boom mushroom clouds will boom out sound scapes
Open mind puzzling times check the time chimes in when cycles be solar/
Colder folder hold cha thoughts put a pause in that swagger
Once I drunken jagged edge cha wedge I pledge my allegiance to no one/
Hold cha slice, keep pace cause Iím warmer than verses cursed by the geeks
I got Greek read up on Socrates and Plato doctrine options show up/
Determinate rhymes you and your people attempt to terminate
Iím the verbalization creating more followers that howls/
Get cha cowls on weíre ďBatmenĒ Grant Morrison actual in tell
Never expel the 1st without knowing why it is cursed in the 1st place/
Do youíre self a favor stay away from the flow thatís sharp as a razor?
Document cha darts by how sharp that blaze whether their dope/
Or wishing they were blessed wit the skills to flip the English language
Back into a cranial sandwich from pontiff or throne of where the pope lays/
COM cord half life cyber trifle mind wipe
Highlight regions that canít spit worth a heathen/

This ainít my best, yet
This is jut me
Spitting BS
None the less
Itís a guess youíll have to take
Breaking arms, legs, and necks
When ever I decide to ripÖ.

Whatís the quota Iím a dart donor time alchemist spitting so much?
I mind as well start writing ďHow to GuidesĒ to the ways of the rhyme/
So if you want the cannibal sheep to eat cha point bleep
Iíll leave my number behind and you can reach me anytime/
Iím off the grind so often I closed more cases than Dick Tracy
Spit heat so hot I burn the keypad Iím typing on/
Rip you from the point of inception correcting more ways
Genetically prowl through cases openly wasted taking stories/
Gory details be breached pails of shit stales given more notes
I take quotes and use them in puff of smoke to leave most stunned/
Hold cha gun my voice can no longer run so when I speak online
I type mine wit more slang quotes than fanatical folks can even open too/
Iím a ripper never a rapper I just pimp slap the beat and it does tricks for me
This mic I hold is pen I scold freezing emcees in their tracks every time I spit on a track/


This ainít my best, yet
This is jut me
Spitting BS
None the less
Itís a guess youíll have to take
Breaking arms, legs, and necks
When ever I decide to ripÖ.

Father N Dangerous
12-25-2008, 11:34 PM
Whenever I write a line I employ cloners cold rover hold cha pen
I am never sober Iím always fueled by the urge to purge the game of its own germs/

nice right here feelin it :mmmyah:
You can shroom up a boom mushroom clouds will boom out sound scapes
Open mind puzzling times check the time chimes in when cycles be solar/

decent bar just needs better structure ?? otherwise feelin' it

Colder folder hold cha thoughts put a pause in that swagger
Once I drunken jagged edge cha wedge I pledge my allegiance to no one/
Hold cha slice, keep pace cause Iím warmer than verses cursed by the geeks

i like the nice smooth transition from the last bar into this one, again better structure

I got Greek read up on Socrates and Plato doctrine options show up/
Determinate rhymes you and your people attempt to terminate

alright IMO ur weakest bar yet, but still very much felt, safe

Iím the verbalization creating more followers that howls/
Get cha cowls on weíre ďBatmenĒ Grant Morrison actual in tell

ok for sum reason i didn't get the last line of this bar n seemed kinda forced, s'll good tho

Never expel the 1st without knowing why it is cursed in the 1st place/
Do youíre self a favor stay away from the flow thatís sharp as a razor?

NICE clean bar, doesnt seem forced, flows betta

Document cha darts by how sharp that blaze whether their dope/
Or wishing they were blessed wit the skills to flip the English language
Back into a cranial sandwich from pontiff or throne of where the pope lays/

felt the first line then the other one is 2 lines? heh

COM cord half life cyber trifle mind wipe
Highlight regions that canít spit worth a heathen

alright feeling the context but need 2 get a better rhythm about it .


Whatís the quota Iím a dart donor time alchemist spitting so much?
I mind as well start writing ďHow to GuidesĒ to the ways of the rhyme/
So if you want the cannibal sheep to eat cha point bleep
Iíll leave my number behind and you can reach me anytime/
Iím off the grind so often I closed more cases than Dick Tracy
Spit heat so hot I burn the keypad Iím typing on/
Rip you from the point of inception correcting more ways
Genetically prowl through cases openly wasted taking stories/
Gory details be breached pails of shit stales given more notes
I take quotes and use them in puff of smoke to leave most stunned/
Hold cha gun my voice can no longer run so when I speak online
I type mine wit more slang quotes than fanatical folks can even open too/
Iím a ripper never a rapper I just pimp slap the beat and it does tricks for me
This mic I hold is pen I scold freezing emcees in their tracks every time I spit on a track/

haha feeling it definetly that whole 2nd part was much better as far as the flow goes n line structure, overall i enjoyed reading this. KEEP WRITING NINJA STAY UP KEEP BLESSIN

War and Peace
12-25-2008, 11:44 PM
h ha, pimp slap the beat and it does tricks for me-

that was hard yo-

SHEEPISH LORD OF CHAOS
12-26-2008, 12:22 AM
thanks 4 the feedback white n dangerous n w.a.p. i'll take the cretique to heart and work on somethings

Prince Rai
12-26-2008, 11:42 AM
sheepish, you know you the god