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Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 10:45 AM
these are a couple of verses i wrote, tell me what yall think.



I'm da one who be looking for da worms under ur backyard/
not a lawn man ask about me, niggaz act hard, they shit took/
fukin wit a nigga from queens, listen man look/
if they brain's infected wit plankton, they will end up in my hook/
I rhyme wit a greed for more, no satisfaction/
like a wealthy man, who only worries about traction/
TVs and cameras inside of them lights for action/
my flow's malicious like the the thoughts of John Gotti/
and carries the katana that leaves their system bloody/
their flow is weak like da blood of a dead body.


and


Slow niggas dont catch my rhymes/
I intercept tochdowns for my side/
u didnt know competition so beef, i let it slide/
my complex sentences on the field leaves us with massive friction/
have you irrational thinking like pentagon attack superstion/
blowin up from the body that holds constriction/
ur shit is stressed like niggas reducing from attrition/
they raps old like a technology mission/ immature like puberty/
soft like flowers from cannons, feel my sense of incongruety.

CYENCE
06-15-2005, 10:48 AM
Why dont you come with your OWN style rhymes??

"Come from your own heart with this" -RZA

I see a 'Shark Niggas 2' skit is needed to remind you niggas

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 10:50 AM
Why dont you come with your OWN style rhymes??

"Come from your own heart with this" -RZA

I see a 'Shark Niggas 2' skit is needed to remind you niggasson i know i got my own style, and look at the first verse, im just immitatin gza, i dont usually rhyme like this. i do it sumtimes cuz i like how he rhymes.

and word up i wanna c a shark niggas 2, in cuban linx II

Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah
06-15-2005, 10:54 AM
first off there is a thread for stuff like this..........IT'S CALLED THE TEMPLE OF DARTS..........secondly i ain't hatin on you, but they were pretty wack.......i don't know what they sound like but the style was just tryin to be like GZA's waaaaaaaaay too much, it was too incoherent and i wasn't feelin it at all........just my thoughts

LikwidSwordz
06-15-2005, 10:54 AM
Pretty good man :thumbup:

36chambers
06-15-2005, 10:55 AM
wrong forum jacko

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 10:56 AM
Pretty good man :thumbup:
i like ur name nigga.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 10:57 AM
first off there is a thread for stuff like this..........IT'S CALLED THE TEMPLE OF DARTS..........secondly i ain't hatin on you, but they were pretty wack.......i don't know what they sound like but the style was just tryin to be like GZA's waaaaaaaaay too much, it was too incoherent and i wasn't feelin it at all........just my thoughts
aight, thanx for ur thoughts.

100pr00f
06-15-2005, 11:01 AM
it is weak need to come way harder to compare to gza style

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:04 AM
it is weak need to come way harder to compare to gza style

aight look.


Fake niggas get fucked like pussies, prostitutes dead from uzies/
they wheezing for a life niggas, da shit is useless/
better have a condom on em, and i iant talkin 'bout fruit sex/
if not a gun in my hand fuckers, end up so toothless/
the streets is down for me, like Corleone's down for Gottie/
she gives me the food I need, results of da busy bodies/
I watch em get out they job, they children is screaming daddy/
my matic sprays them wit led, his kids dont know the hurt/
dont regognize the pain, think he in a polka dot shirt.

Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah
06-15-2005, 11:07 AM
you got any audio?

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:08 AM
you got any audio?
nah man, i tried recording with the mic in da PC, but the voice changes and doesnt sound like me.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:09 AM
Fake niggas get fucked like pussies, prostitutes dead from uzies/
they wheezing for a life niggas, da shit is useless/
better have a condom on em, and i iant talkin 'bout fruit sex/
if not a gun in my hand fuckers, end up so toothless/
the streets is down for me, like Corleone's down for Gottie/
she gives me the food I need, results of da busy bodies/
I watch em get out they job, they children is screaming daddy/
my matic sprays them wit led, his kids dont know the hurt/
dont regognize the pain, think he in a polka dot shirt.

LikwidSwordz
06-15-2005, 11:16 AM
Dont hate on people if you cant do better for all you saying this kid is 'WHACK'

Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah
06-15-2005, 11:27 AM
and what are you sayin?

LikwidSwordz
06-15-2005, 11:37 AM
Im jus sayin dont make fun of him if you cant do better.....and im not talkin about "saying your better" im talkin about proving it.....but its only directed at those who called him "whack" of course.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:37 AM
Dont hate on people if you cant do better for all you saying this kid is 'WHACK'

ayo thanx for dabacup, leave dat shit like dat.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:38 AM
My raps contaminate you like harmful gases/
the venemous compounds that kill your cells in the masses/
not immune, ur white cells violently crashes/
you lookin at the flashes as your past life passes/
through your eyes, pigment like cherries that blasted/ like violent guns/
I be the blunt smoke in your lungs/
the shit that gets niggas addicted who turn into bums/
their test has begun, lack confidence cuz their homework aint done.

Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah
06-15-2005, 11:39 AM
text means nothin if you can't spit in real life....you can't really tell the flow or anything

Sun Tzu, Tha Soul Controllah
06-15-2005, 11:43 AM
You got potential, but still need alot of practice to get better with your style. I think originality is the best thing any emcee should own....I mean, i admire alot of cats, like Tonedeff, but it doesnt mean ima rap like him....so yea, just improve your vocab, and try to make your lines more lyrical than the obvious disses...keep elevating

yeah that's what i saw too, i mean, if you wanna say your rhymes GZA style, you gotta have more metaphors than what you have.....it's good but just too basic to say it's on a GZA level.....but word, just take this and keep building, cause it's the only way you'll get better

100pr00f
06-15-2005, 11:46 AM
no one is saying he is wack...read the topic of the fourm...think befor u post u make ur self look like a ass.....nodisrispect.........

every one is saying he should pick his own style...i said his verce is no where neer the style of gza...couse gza comes hard...u have to think when u listen to him...here he just spits lines after line.....realy no story to the verce..

100pr00f
06-15-2005, 11:49 AM
he got some skill..need to work on the metas...and put a meaning to it...like not strait up killing some one or a battle verce when ur not battleing....ur word play is ok..it helps the flow

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:52 AM
he got some skill..need to work on the metas...and put a meaning to it...like not strait up killing some one or a battle verce when ur not battleing....ur word play is ok..it helps the flow

ayo good looks, and like i said b4 dis aint really my style, im jus immitatin Gza. although i do be coming wit shit like dat most times.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:53 AM
My raps contaminate you like harmful gases/
the venemous compounds that kill your cells in the masses/
not immune, ur white cells violently crashes/
you lookin at the flashes as your past life passes/
through your eyes, pigment like cherries that blasted/ like violent guns/
I be the blunt smoke in your lungs/
the shit that gets niggas addicted who turn into bums/
their test has begun, lack confidence cuz their homework aint done.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:54 AM
i know what yall be saying about battle verse, but das jus one part of my style sorry if it feel like a battle to u.



I'm like Vicks VapoRub messin wit yo fucking eyes/
the flow up your nose while your brain slowly dies/
could be a bird's brain it doesnt matter the size/
when da scent hits u from da neck up inside/
short circuit ur whole head only da lice survives/
my rhymes are contagious nigga dats no surprise/
like dirty dogz with dice, posting on da corner store/
the elctric shock wont be enough to restore ur core/
dis shit got you cryin like a virgin's pussy tore.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 11:58 AM
this is more how my style is


Summer time makes, phony niggas heated/
my bat they eat it, i swing like sosa they end up beated/
but the most real heat, is created in the oven/
so i always visit the kitchen, to cook ribs often/
boilin their veins molten, realize there's no token/
to ride the train to heaven, but for me the gate's broken/
i get a free pass, like Kelis said to NaS, but for now im woken/
the stove leaves their body soakin, with natural juice nigga's heart is open.



If you're wondering, yeh im Dominican.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 01:11 PM
yeah that's what i saw too, i mean, if you wanna say your rhymes GZA style, you gotta have more metaphors than what you have.....it's good but just too basic to say it's on a GZA level.....but word, just take this and keep building, cause it's the only way you'll get better
lol, i neva said my shit is on Gza's level, im jus immitin how he rhymes. anyways dat verse up there is how my style really is.

deadlymelody
06-15-2005, 01:13 PM
If you wanna be like GZA, don't waste any lines. Every single line in a GZA verse is meaningful, it isn't filler.

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 03:34 PM
If you wanna be like GZA, don't waste any lines. Every single line in a GZA verse is meaningful, it isn't filler.
lmao son, u late on dis, I aint gon waste no more lines xplainin to you.

Liquidswordsman
06-15-2005, 03:49 PM
Im jus sayin dont make fun of him if you cant do better.....and im not talkin about "saying your better" im talkin about proving it.....but its only directed at those who called him "whack" of course.
Shit, i think he is wack. get your own style. Trust me when i tell u Rae dont want no niggas sounding like wu-tang members on no album, or thread. I make fun of people that do shit i cant, and i love doing it

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 04:21 PM
Trust me when i tell u Rae dont want no niggas sounding like wu-tang members on no album, or thread.
trust me when i tell u GHOST dont want no nigga sounding like him, or nobody in his clan. LMAO

Liquidswordsman
06-15-2005, 04:35 PM
LOL, good detective work 'Gza style rapper'

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 04:39 PM
na, i aint no detective, i jus got a good memory of things dat must be remembered, "gza album name person"

Liquidswordsman
06-15-2005, 04:42 PM
its called Liquid Swords, my name is Liquidswordsman, Captin 'jus got a good memory of things dat must be remembered'

MaXiMus Da MaNtis
06-15-2005, 04:51 PM
its not completly wack its just your not breakin down ya sylobols with witty sickness like da Gza

Maxi Million
06-15-2005, 05:00 PM
its not completly wack its just your not breakin down ya sylobols with witty sickness like da Gza

good looks on da comment, and i was jus immitatin Gza's style, hell no im not in his level of metaphorical street shit. i jus like da shit he be sayin so i did dis for fun.