Enter the Grand Cartel

[GrandCartel]

Yo everyone, I just recently started recording our songs in my home studio. The last three tracks were using a pc mic but ive just purchased a AT2020 mic and recorded Hell on Earth with it. Although recording for us has been recent, both of us have been writing for a many years though. Below I have a few tracks that me and my friend have rapped over. Please critique and give me any suggestions. I would take many of these suggestions as a bull that pushes us furthur to maken it.

If you need lyrics just post a comment.

Sulaiman Hameed - A rapper from pakistani background
Darren Tam- A rapper from chinese and european background


Heres our songs:

Grand Cartel - Hell on Earth
Beat: Hell on Earth by Mobb Deep

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1a_m3q80kEI

Grand Cartel - Violence of Violence
Beat- Requiem for a Dream (Hip Hop Remix)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Qzq_FlIoER8

Grand Cartel - Lyrically Slain
Beat- Shook Ones pt 2 -- Mobb Deep

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jW81BGEuhcU

Grand Cartel - Tears
Beat - Wutang - Tearz

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TX2UORETpOM

[Drunken Monk]

illlesttt

i can drop u some beats

[GrandCartel]

Thanks bro
ill scope u out for em.

[GrandCartel]

No one else want to criticize and sugest?

[JehovAllah]

keep building sun, shits soundin a lil sketchy right now but keep buildin..peace

[Drunken Monk]

Supporting it

[GrandCartel]

keep building sun, shits soundin a lil sketchy right now but keep buildin..peace

Ight thanks fam for the input, but wt we be lackin? What can we do to make it betta?

[Drunken Monk]

work work work work

[GrandCartel]

hahah fianlly got a myspace

http://www.myspace.com/grandcartel

[Poison Flowerz!]

ight thanks fam for the input, but wt we be lackin? What can we do to make it betta?

delivery, energy

[GrandCartel]

delivery, energy


Thanks for feed back fam

but in terms of delievery and energy what is the best way to bring this to the track
more specifically..
i know what ur tryin to get at but like wht can i do to get it like tht

[Poison Flowerz!]

Just gotta know in yourr head what u want to sound like an itts eazy from there! Gottta build up that mic confidence to make it sound how u want or get some vodka! Sul Tan has better lyrics lyricss but I dont like his delivery at all... D-Ren has a better delivery but his darts too simple! buildd with eachother ann help eachother nah mean! PEACE

[GrandCartel]

Just gotta know in yourr head what u want to sound like an itts eazy from there! Gottta build up that mic confidence to make it sound how u want or get some vodka! Sul Tan has better lyrics lyricss but I dont like his delivery at all... D-Ren has a better delivery but his darts too simple! buildd with eachother ann help eachother nah mean! PEACE

You kno tht helped alot fam

we tell tht to each other how Sul Tan's lyrics are fire but his flow is a little weaker

and then D Rens flow is immaculate while his lyrics are usually single syllable

Do you recommend me rapping just calmly

or like sort of yellin

[JehovAllah]

Thanks for feed back fam

but in terms of delievery and energy what is the best way to bring this to the track
more specifically..
i know what ur tryin to get at but like wht can i do to get it like tht
u gotta rhyme rhyme n rhyme over any beat even wit no beat just keep rhyming, u gotta get comfortable with ur self, dont worry about wat ur voice sounds like just rhyme rhyme n rhyme, n when u think ur cant rhyme no moe...rhyme sum moe...

[JehovAllah]

Just gotta know in yourr head what u want to sound like an itts eazy from there! Gottta build up that mic confidence to make it sound how u want or get some vodka! Sul Tan has better lyrics lyricss but I dont like his delivery at all... D-Ren has a better delivery but his darts too simple! buildd with eachother ann help eachother nah mean! PEACE
werd^:b

[GrandCartel]

u gotta rhyme rhyme n rhyme over any beat even wit no beat just keep rhyming, u gotta get comfortable with ur self, dont worry about wat ur voice sounds like just rhyme rhyme n rhyme, n when u think ur cant rhyme no moe...rhyme sum moe...

Yeah i keep writing writing and writing

i dun usually memorize my lyrics
i think thts whts makin me lackk

[GrandCartel]

bump it up