Thoughts...Critiques appreciated

[MosHigh]

This is some ooold shit(about 4yrs ago) I contrived in the mind before I wrote down so I wouldn't forget. I know the flow is kind off but i think it has some pretty good lines in it. Let me know what y'all think.

i'm Cocky...
do about 1000 push ups a day
head strong
wit braun
A real Beast
to say the least
but Xavier ain't never put me on
Marvel at the vagabond
roaming the system
gaining wisdom
inhaling solar dust and gas
deep into my lungs
in sync with the Earth's rhythm
igniting the blast
using my native tongue
to spark the cataclysm
from a thought i was sprung
top rung
since i begun
Ronin shogun
always ready to battle
take your cattle
have the heifers that you love
kneeling at my feet givin' em a rub
more swing then a golf club
my stroke game is mean
on or off that green
a real Tiger wit the ladies
they go crazy
for what's in my genes

(hook)
a real athelete
always ready to compete
in any meet
track and field
speech debate
in the sky
I'm Saiyan
we can leviatate
on or under water
it doesn't matter
i slaughter alma maters
schools of fools
become pupils
learn real fast
that i may be Cocky
but i don't talk trash

i outlast....
my calisthenics
diminish any of ya attempts at this
trained savant
always ready to taunt
flaunt my style
wit a smile
there's no error in my trial
you know, that Suspect wit the Usual profile
meanwhile
tribes subscribe to my vibe
take a peak inside
become mesmerized
electrified
as if my words were derived
from volatile skys
tough guys
hand me a fin
before the cipher can begin
i roll a twin
double barrell
blow minds into dark matter aparallel
nggas blend in
blackout
after a bout
wit the devout champion that's unparallel

(hook)
a real athelete
always ready to compete
in any meet
track and field
speech debate
in the sky
I'm Saiyan
we can leviatate
on or under water
it doesn't matter
i slaughter alma maters
schools of fools
become pupils
learn real quick
that i may be Cocky
but i don't talk shit

as i flex my pecs
sect's specs
magnify as I reach my apex
i wreck intellects
and leave dents
compound the elements
particles collide
while neutrinos spin off and hide
the evidence
monks and rabbis
survive to my guide
the moments that i seize
brings the masses to their knees
the compass reads east
as i rise and release
behold my glow
like a Da Vinci masterpiece
feast until you're full
if you can digest
what I manifest
but know I'm capable
to get ya amped like red bull
nggas be tryin' to fly
just to get a glimpse of the guy
more then a greco-roman myth
my gift to uplift
make platonic shapes shift
riff if you want
lumps come like speed bumps
young punks get slammed
fuckin' with the heavy hand
man that stands
erect
ready to fck wit and tear
whatever you hold dear
and try to protect
check my vitals
my alchemy is perfect
light I reflect
like gold and silver
to deliver
energy properly
like copper you see
to raise any degree
of the room's mercury
certainly for survival
I can reveal to all my rivals
that my heart is not made out of tin
so when
that lead is fed
into my grip that's equip
wit a carbon and iron blend
that feels like steel
pointed in the wind
makes all y'all kneel
i'm too atheletic
always ready to set it
wit that magnetic appeal

[J.T.S.]

as i flex my pecs
sect's specs
magnify as I reach my apex
i wreck intellects
and leave dents
compound the elements


nice darts threre

Favorite patrs real sharp,

[MosHigh]

yeah, it likes that one too...thx.

[MosHigh]

I spit it into Existence
each sentence is exquisitely designed
to wrap around and astound
those who are not left dumb deaf and blind
by my fine wine flow
linguistical spirits that not only shine but glow
those who can handle the initial blow
fall slow
so be cool as i continue
the venue of the universal cycle
just to show without a pause
Gravitational laws enhance the skill
as i spill like Niagara falls
i rise for the cause with no applause
in tune with the moon and the sun
feel the wind brush ya skin
as soon as i move my tongue
knowledge is brung
from the lessons i've viewed and done
pass or fail
but still solar dust and gas I must inhale
never fraile
spontaneously i combust
feel the sudden rush
as i exhale.....


from a single breathe
expect nothing less then finesse
what i possess
you can't resist
my Existence
consist of this
elemental allure
your defenseless against this
especially as i continue to pour
and give you more
of what you came here for....

....so go ahead and adore
i'm the new hype
igniting my might like Dolomite
reciting my plight on how I got here tonight
flight was smooth once i found my groove
to prove that with the right insight
i can delight like daylight
produce more then what the average can consume
i'm a savage illuminating the entire room
high beam on the scene
ready to go off light green
letting off steam like a machine
i'm a fiend
digesting herbal fumes
while manifesting verbal buhlloons
you know, thought bubbles
cosmic view like the hubble
scratching my stubble
vibrating on a different chord and level
resonating, elevating
so thy shall truly know the lord from the devil
i swing a subtle sword
double edge word that will not be ignored
so whenever your done being bored
come get some action
peep the close-caption
see if you can decipher
change your life or
feel the draft
as you cross my path
i may smile and laugh
but I’m at the head of the class
at will i thrill
like acclerated math
in alliance with the science
bathe in holy water...feel the splash

from a single breathe
expect nothing less then success
what i possess, god bless
this Existence
is divine like the rhyme
in time you'll find
it's senseless to resist
this moment is mine
so i insist that you desist
while i twist and you unwind...

.....from design
you might think i'm a pawn
because i'm first to step up and get it on
but i'm more like a knight
because i like to drag a zig zag
when i strike
shifting all through ya lawn
raw material, flow's serial
sneaks up on ya like a yawn in the dawn
vagabond but not a con
roam ya dome like it's my home
known to condone a head nod
as long as you respect the god
like you, i'm from the sod
the earth gave birth
so i can disperse this very verse
this ain't a facade
i'll start a fuckn' jihad
on the next ngga
that think he bigga
flashing his fuckn' wad
like he can't get robbed
i'm always on the job
timeclocks tic
and only about 5% is really rich
the rest are left feeling poor
treasures i share until i'm bare
blood shed all over the floor
i know this is more
then what you may have bargained for
lames can't hang wit the slang
my range is insane
light years appear minuscule
once enframed in my aim
superb with the good word
to pinch a vital nerve
self-served, well-preserved
galactical nerd
who's seldom seen
but always heard
my candor is above any standard
anything less is absurd

from a single breathe
expect nothing less then the best
it's like i'm possessed
when i manifest
divine rhymes
in time you'll find
patience is a virtue
so it's senseless to resist
it won't hurt you
but it gets pretty intense
when i commence
to speak on my very Existence....

[White N Dangerous]

it's like i'm possessed
when i manifest
divine rhymes
in time you'll find
patience is a virtue
so it's senseless to resist
it won't hurt you
but it gets pretty intense
when i commence
to speak on my very Existence....

that shit was tight, overall its all good very good must admit feeling ya style,

[MosHigh]

thx...this was when I turned 30...my flow evolved from the first post which i did when i was around 27...28. I'm still sharping my sword tho!!