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theheavens
06-21-2010, 09:07 PM
might as well give it a try

oDoUoSoKo
06-21-2010, 11:05 PM
i accept

theheavens
06-22-2010, 12:42 AM
nothing personal, just an exercise. here it is...


Around midnight, I ignite
Pistol-whip your wife
Slap the Hebrew out of Jesus Christ
Endorse the Chinese Water Torture device
Force you to recite the Koran out of spite

I don't give a damn about your intuition
You belong in the Colosseum with the early Christians
I'll drink the period blood of a Jehovah's Witness;
Strangle your bitch with her Fallopian tubes, listen

Inside your infant's room, creeping
I saw your baby boy, sleeping
My hands around his neck, weeping
Won't let go until I hear a death rattle for safekeeping;
As for your next of kin
I'll suffocate the fucker with my foreskin

Attack me with your fists, I insist
I'll break every bone in your wrist
Promise you'll become an amputee
If you even contemplate making a fist
Drown your baby at its Baptism for kicks

I'll send you a Hallmark card as a goodbye:
"Dear Dusk, I hope someone you love dies"

oDoUoSoKo
06-22-2010, 04:12 PM
i guess i should thank the heavens that we got another battle here
literally, while im spittin missles at the stratosphere
smashin peers, the mics by my heart like a lavalier
fashion spears out of rapper spines and apache tears
choosin to drop an impersonal verse was an act of fear
knowing im that revered at swfitly ending suckas rap careers
i hope ya face is good at catching shears, scissor kick
motherfuckers, then i twitch and brick on their sisters tits
sick isnt it, must be blasphemous
i break ya legs, lift the crutch u had to get and whip ya musty ass with it
short verse but hazardous, quality over quantity
yet the corp aint wantin me like the nazi's sponsored me
hittin jukebox's thats the fonzy part of me
and if heaven's song ever comes on then im jumpin sharks to flee
nothin personal dude, just an exercize
im god, as if anyone around Dusk would ever die..haha.....

theheavens
06-22-2010, 04:40 PM
hah so who decides who wins the battle? and thanks for the opportunity

oDoUoSoKo
06-22-2010, 05:05 PM
no doubt man, good shit...now, votes

theheavens
06-23-2010, 04:13 PM
you do any other kind of writing?

oDoUoSoKo
06-23-2010, 09:34 PM
ya poetry, screenplays, etc..

theheavens
06-24-2010, 12:44 AM
nice. I got a friend who works as a film critic in cali. he likes this script I wrote and is pitching it to studios right now. that's the best opportunity I've gotten so far

oDoUoSoKo
06-24-2010, 08:43 PM
sick bro

Jragonsoul
06-27-2010, 06:01 AM
My vote goes for Dusk I just loved his word play and I feel he was little more creative but I give mad love and respect to theheavens.

Jragonsoul
06-27-2010, 06:18 AM
Also I want to battle the winner

oDoUoSoKo
06-27-2010, 12:07 PM
if there is one..eloels..thx

Krusha
07-01-2010, 01:45 PM
I'll vote 4 Theheavens. So you're even,right?

oDoUoSoKo
07-01-2010, 09:09 PM
smh..yes..eloels.

GZAjector
07-05-2010, 10:49 PM
i'll vote for dusk

oDoUoSoKo
07-05-2010, 11:05 PM
can u elaborate a little please? thx

GZAjector
07-05-2010, 11:17 PM
who me? or the krusha? :D



there wasn't much in terms of straight dissin, but like you said, theheavens verse was impersonal, so you kept it pretty much like that. your rhymes were much more elaborate than the other dude, with well put together lines, i liked the use of apache tears.

i dunno, if i vote for someone, i don't want to have to write a review on why i did it, but if that's a rule, then strike my vote whateverwhatever

oDoUoSoKo
07-06-2010, 11:13 PM
eloels, well theres a battle guideline that u could also follow which is pretty simple..ill post them in battles in the first post from now on...what u just did is fine tho..peace

ArcherPriest
07-11-2010, 02:02 AM
mmm.. yo,, ima give it to dusk jus cuz his flow n writing mechanics stood out more than any line either of you spit.. heavens shit was raw tho, slappin hebrew outta christ, chokin sleepin baby shit, ugggh... the content was there but you got out-classed homie.. that smooth multi flow rolled right ova ya

vote dusk

oDoUoSoKo
07-11-2010, 08:46 PM
peace god^

MosHigh
07-23-2010, 10:16 AM
My vote goes for Dusk I just loved his word play and I feel he was little more creative but I give mad love and respect to theheavens.

i agree with Jragon...Dusk verses were a little more creative imo but theheavens did drop some vivid lines.

iniquity
08-08-2010, 11:56 AM
http://cdn.epltalk.com/wp-content/uploads/2009/04/alex-ferguson-yawn.jpg

oDoUoSoKo
08-08-2010, 10:57 PM
right

d22
10-09-2010, 08:37 AM
i vote 4 heavens...i came right on point.

THE MASON
10-09-2010, 09:37 AM
vote goes to Dusk

heavens had some good punches, but it lacked. like someone else said, simply out classed. Dusk flipped your lines nicely at the end with the Fonzy references, that was tight. plus i felt Dusk had a more consistent flow, lyrically both were nice Dusk just had a little more backing his then the Heavens

peace

King Tron 1
10-10-2010, 03:02 AM
Around midnight, I ignite
Pistol-whip your wife
Slap the Hebrew out of Jesus Christ
Endorse the Chinese Water Torture device
Force you to recite the Koran out of spite

I don't give a damn about your intuition
You belong in the Colosseum with the early Christians
I'll drink the period blood of a Jehovah's Witness;
Strangle your bitch with her Fallopian tubes, listen

Inside your infant's room, creeping
I saw your baby boy, sleeping
My hands around his neck, weeping
Won't let go until I hear a death rattle for safekeeping;
As for your next of kin
I'll suffocate the fucker with my foreskin

not bad, a little shaky start but decent enough to continue

Attack me with your fists, I insist
I'll break every bone in your wrist
Promise you'll become an amputee
If you even contemplate making a fist
Drown your baby at its Baptism for kicks

I'll send you a Hallmark card as a goodbye:
"Dear Dusk, I hope someone you love dies"

now this is where it gets interesting, I like the whole "contemplate making a fist" part. probably the best part of the whole verse, good enough to garner attention.

i guess i should thank the heavens that we got another battle here
literally, while im spittin missles at the stratosphere
smashin peers, the mics by my heart like a lavalier
fashion spears out of rapper spines and apache tears
choosin to drop an impersonal verse was an act of fear
knowing im that revered at swfitly ending suckas rap careers
i hope ya face is good at catching shears, scissor kick
motherfuckers, then i twitch and brick on their sisters tits
sick isnt it, must be blasphemous
i break ya legs, lift the crutch u had to get and whip ya musty ass with it
short verse but hazardous, quality over quantity
yet the corp aint wantin me like the nazi's sponsored me
hittin jukebox's thats the fonzy part of me
and if heaven's song ever comes on then im jumpin sharks to flee
nothin personal dude, just an exercize
im god, as if anyone around Dusk would ever die..haha.....

Dusk's verse right here is a bit more accomplished writing, not too many syllables per line. Kinda evident he held back a little, que no? Yeah, best line was the Fonzy one.


Dusk had more quality control of his short verse. But I could tell that theheavens sorta stopped himself, as he'd could've easily go for about another long verse more if he wanted to.


Dusk gets my vote

theheavens :stroke: don't feel too bad

Arkane
12-17-2010, 09:39 AM
my vote is dusk. I won't do a bar by bar analysis cuz' it got deleted last time

HappyKillah
02-07-2011, 07:48 PM
i vote for Dusk. both you guys are mad dope tho

HappyKillah
02-07-2011, 08:15 PM
i think that dusk just broght a bit more. dusk used more like longer and more elaborate words.