View Full Version : When i'm Lifted.
08-29-2010, 12:49 AM
i'm lifted and im gifted
the microphone i rip it
fuck a rap battle
í'm hear to shake and rattle
and make brains tattle
i get high
like an aeroplane
muthafucka is u insane
to go against me
i'll leave u in pain
i'm too complex
i put holes in chests
i'm diggin the th crates
like lord finesse
my shit's blessed
like god's other son
my rhymes surreal
i eat rappers for breakfast, cereal
don't fuck with my scheme
fuck, sorry, i am high as fuck atm, i suck.
09-10-2010, 03:04 PM
its good dude, im new to this so take my advice if u want or dont lol idk . it's full of good punchlines, but if its the style you would like to go for ie more complex, then try to beef them up more, make them more dense, interconnected.
peace, good stuff
09-10-2010, 07:19 PM
Hey thanks for the advice dawg. I'm new to this, trynna improve my shit. I wanna do more about life and shit, but i need to improve my vocab and need more topics.
My rhymes sick, i'm viciously equipped
watch me around your girl cuz i cause rifts in relationships
legendary like Shakespearian scrips
my rhymes so horrific
i make Apocalypse now look like a picnic
fuck dying, i turn into a fossil
get revived 1000 years later and come to the impossible
ill like a caner patient in the hospital
my bottle is half empty, so don't tempt me
cuz i ain't afraid to touch a piece
and send you up to see Jeeee-Sus
Smoke the Reefer, Turn athiests into believers
i bomb tracks like a terrorist
leave the mic decapitated like an extremist
my words piece like Paul
i was born to Roll
like Masta Ace
The mic on anyone else's arm is a disgrace
09-10-2010, 08:32 PM
Nice dude. keep writing
09-13-2010, 05:26 AM
09-14-2010, 09:50 AM
Come spar in my thread sometime keep writing!
09-15-2010, 10:09 AM
anyone has any good tips for writing?
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