Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

these are a couple of verses i wrote, tell me what yall think.



I'm da one who be looking for da worms under ur backyard/
not a lawn man ask about me, niggaz act hard, they shit took/
fukin wit a nigga from queens, listen man look/
if they brain's infected wit plankton, they will end up in my hook/
I rhyme wit a greed for more, no satisfaction/
like a wealthy man, who only worries about traction/
TVs and cameras inside of them lights for action/
my flow's malicious like the the thoughts of John Gotti/
and carries the katana that leaves their system bloody/
their flow is weak like da blood of a dead body.


and


Slow niggas dont catch my rhymes/
I intercept tochdowns for my side/
u didnt know competition so beef, i let it slide/
my complex sentences on the field leaves us with massive friction/
have you irrational thinking like pentagon attack superstion/
blowin up from the body that holds constriction/
ur shit is stressed like niggas reducing from attrition/
they raps old like a technology mission/ immature like puberty/
soft like flowers from cannons, feel my sense of incongruety.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

Why dont you come with your OWN style rhymes??

"Come from your own heart with this" -RZA

I see a 'Shark Niggas 2' skit is needed to remind you niggas

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

son i know i got my own style, and look at the first verse, im just immitatin gza, i dont usually rhyme like this. i do it sumtimes cuz i like how he rhymes.

and word up i wanna c a shark niggas 2, in cuban linx II

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

first off there is a thread for stuff like this..........IT'S CALLED THE TEMPLE OF DARTS..........secondly i ain't hatin on you, but they were pretty wack.......i don't know what they sound like but the style was just tryin to be like GZA's waaaaaaaaay too much, it was too incoherent and i wasn't feelin it at all........just my thoughts

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

Pretty good man :thumbup:

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

wrong forum jacko

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

i like ur name nigga.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

aight, thanx for ur thoughts.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

it is weak need to come way harder to compare to gza style

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

aight look.


Fake niggas get fucked like pussies, prostitutes dead from uzies/
they wheezing for a life niggas, da shit is useless/
better have a condom on em, and i iant talkin 'bout fruit sex/
if not a gun in my hand fuckers, end up so toothless/
the streets is down for me, like Corleone's down for Gottie/
she gives me the food I need, results of da busy bodies/
I watch em get out they job, they children is screaming daddy/
my matic sprays them wit led, his kids dont know the hurt/
dont regognize the pain, think he in a polka dot shirt.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

you got any audio?

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

nah man, i tried recording with the mic in da PC, but the voice changes and doesnt sound like me.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

Fake niggas get fucked like pussies, prostitutes dead from uzies/
they wheezing for a life niggas, da shit is useless/
better have a condom on em, and i iant talkin 'bout fruit sex/
if not a gun in my hand fuckers, end up so toothless/
the streets is down for me, like Corleone's down for Gottie/
she gives me the food I need, results of da busy bodies/
I watch em get out they job, they children is screaming daddy/
my matic sprays them wit led, his kids dont know the hurt/
dont regognize the pain, think he in a polka dot shirt.

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

Dont hate on people if you cant do better for all you saying this kid is 'WHACK'

Re: Ayo what yall think of my GZA style rhymes?
 

and what are you sayin?