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    Re: need critizicm

    that was dope...keep it up aded
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    Re: need critizicm

    Write some more, edit it, be concise, cut out what's mediocre and leave the shit that's pure gems, best is something personal. post it again and lemme know. Peace.
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    Re: need critizicm

    You got creativity, but you need to work on originality. I would ease up on the "I got big gats and even bigger dick" shit" know what I mean? (unless you battle of course) otherwise it sounds just...
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