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Old 08-24-2005, 08:26 AM   #2
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Default Re: Criminal Ways

Its simple (the lyrical content) but the verse flowed. Although you kept to the same rhyme scheme ( not that its a problem) but it was very obvious how the verse continued. It just showed how you tried t make it rhyme well. Nothing bad in that away. Try other a topics to write on, might assist you but i noticed you have a certain style on portraying things through a basic question.

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