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Old 06-20-2009, 12:05 AM   #17
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good work by both writers.

locust i liked your rhymes, they flowed well. some witty punches.

daliff your rhymes were nice as well, killing the wordplay.

overall,
locust i thought ur first verse was straight, the gay jokes were funny but then soon after they just starting getting redundant. What's this "wack" and "i won" banter? (swaying to me it looks) Your second verse was better although i did catch acouple feeding lines, but there were no rules against it.

flow = locust
punches = daliff
multis = locust
wordplay = daliff
personals = tie
nameplay = daliff

v = daliff
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