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Originally Posted by soul controller
lol., but sosa is from america? while tom is from Ireland..
can some one do me a favour please. can you proof read this? does it make sense?
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We fully understand that sometimes there must be sacrifices for a greater good, in this case the safety and comfort of the nation, However this time it is going too far.
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^ small 'h' on 'however' followed by a comma
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These cameras will monitor everyone, the similarity to a certain famous Dystopian novel is surprising.
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^ small 'd' on 'dystopian'
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In Iran we help bring information to protesters and recover their stories of hardship, providing what help we can to restore freedom and relay these stories to the world.
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^ there should be a comma after 'Iran'
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We demand Government & Corporate accountability
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^ should be 'and' not an ampersand. i think you need a small 'g' for 'government' and small 'c' for 'corporate', too.
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This will make the Governments job impossible as you cannot represent a public that does not recognise you.
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^ small 'g' on 'government's'. should be an apostrophe before the 's' too. you've used a small 'g' on 'governments' throughout the paragraph so keep it consistent.