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    drop feed wrote it on the spot and came out better then expected been a long time since i dropped summin in here



    fuck carlito i do it the john way WAY not the cowboy i mean gacy
    that means im tryna fuck whatevers below eighteen and over 80
    butt rapin babys with my SOLDIERs in this THREAD like old navy
    a nigga steal from me and i transform to the game in waist deep
    he PO'd throw my piss tests at my PO's chapped lips
    check me on your registered sex offenders list just did a bid
    slightly below your uncle and right before ya fathers dick
    SNUFF Films turned porno flicks STARRING me like several ASTERISKS
    the baddest bitch im bashin em' just to make me feel masculine
    scientific experiment gone WRONG now RIGHT the catalyst
    suffer cannabilistic damages spawned by sadistic fantasies
    scalp resemble damiens make my maids hang from banisters
    my house amity split ya family up like DCF
    double d's ill rape her chest now where the fat bitches At
    i dont wanna fuck em ill skin em up like billy buff
    mr GUMB my dicks on drugs addicted to bitches tongues
    stab and punch a niggas lungs while takin chugs off fifths of Blood

    just pick the gun ill point it up and prove to you im fatherless
    no martyring the stories far from done the ending is marvelous
    no souls to barter with satanism scattered my thought process
    later murkin my consciousness these false prophets aint obvious
    obnoxiousness noxious gases released from capsules-and
    scars your lungs with carcinogens bi-products claim harmlessness
    part of it cuz im monsterous but whats that to a group of them
    fact i see an troop of them blame it on da ha-ha-hallucinogens
    meet and greet with a few of them compare intestinal recipes
    hunger got the best of me beatin off to da human centipede
    "You like human hearts" FIX Me A PLATE
    shoot a nigga in da grill tell em fix up his face
    and im ill rollin like a big wheel peddaled by a cyborg infant
    its not rape if she not awake to say no is it ?

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    the baddest bitch im bashin em' just to make me feel masculine
    scientific experiment gone WRONG now RIGHT the catalyst


    was feeling that line alot...

    just pick the gun ill point it up and prove to you im fatherless
    no martyring the stories far from done the ending is marvelous

    nice start here...


    "You like human hearts" FIX Me A PLATE
    shoot a nigga in da grill tell em fix up his face
    and im ill rollin like a big wheel peddaled by a cyborg infant
    its not rape if she not awake to say no is it

    nice finish...

    not bad at all brotha, not bad at all was feeling it for tha most part, good structure and sum lines that stooD out ot me... keep writing stay up one love two fingaz
    Last edited by Father N Dangerous; 07-14-2011 at 09:50 AM.

    Tables Turn..Which Made it Worse, Engaged N' Searched..
    for a Way ta' Learn, how ta Take tha' Curse of the Weight of Earth
    Incase it Curved, and Strained my Nervous System..
    Rage it Burst, n' Explained in Words how ta Further Wisdom


    Take ya life plus ya afterlife -Bloodshed

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    the baddest bitch im bashin em' just to make me feel masculine
    scientific experiment gone WRONG now RIGHT the catalyst

    i like this line alot...

    "You like human hearts" FIX Me A PLATE
    shoot a nigga in da grill tell em fix up his face
    and im ill rollin like a big wheel peddaled by a cyborg infant
    its not rape if she not awake to say no is it ?

    good strong finish...

    good structure overall and pretty nice vocab. good 2 c ur stll around stay up one love two fingaz
    Last edited by Father N Dangerous; 07-14-2011 at 09:48 AM. Reason: DELETE ME

    Tables Turn..Which Made it Worse, Engaged N' Searched..
    for a Way ta' Learn, how ta Take tha' Curse of the Weight of Earth
    Incase it Curved, and Strained my Nervous System..
    Rage it Burst, n' Explained in Words how ta Further Wisdom


    Take ya life plus ya afterlife -Bloodshed

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    Quote Originally Posted by White N Dangerous View Post
    the baddest bitch im bashin em' just to make me feel masculine
    scientific experiment gone WRONG now RIGHT the catalyst


    was feeling that line alot...

    just pick the gun ill point it up and prove to you im fatherless
    no martyring the stories far from done the ending is marvelous

    nice start here...


    "You like human hearts" FIX Me A PLATE
    shoot a nigga in da grill tell em fix up his face
    and im ill rollin like a big wheel peddaled by a cyborg infant
    its not rape if she not awake to say no is it

    nice finish...

    not bad at all brotha, not bad at all was feeling it for tha most part, good structure and sum lines that stooD out ot me... keep writing stay up one love two fingaz
    word thanks man yea i been mia from this scene since i've lately been writing shit in my notebooks and been tryna get my ish on wax.. but i figured id throw something in here to see how people feel.

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    Not bad plus it's nice to see another Odd Future Wolf Gang Kill Them All fan. It's like a Wu Tang Clan 21st century style. Your shit is dirty like stained drawers.
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