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    this is a pretty good fictional story piece i made up

    this is a story about a bad earth-like planetary sphere
    unlike earth, the planet was filled with stupidity and fear
    and unlike earth, they didn't have great people like obama and the pope
    cus if we were ever in danger, stephen hawking would calulate it on a microscope
    look at me, on my planet i'm the worthless shit that works for MI5
    i sit behind a pc screen all day thinking i keep it live
    i press buttons on the screen and it links up to a satellite
    which beams down unknown energy onto the victim i fight
    oh look the chest pain i've given him/her isnt enough
    let's make them feel like they're on a comedown thats rough
    i can even inject words and numbers into their head
    or make them hear sounds that arent there when they're trying to sleep in bed

    why isnt my target slitting his/her wrists like they're supposed to
    the mental hospital or the coffin thats where your going to
    i'm working for my government on this fictional planet
    and our god backs me thats why i do damage
    look at this sensor, it shows he's in pain
    i don't laugh out loud, but i do get a good kick out of this, i feel it in my brain
    and my soul tells me this is right, its for the good of people
    we must destroy these invalids for they are truely evil
    the ones who take their own path have always been destroyed
    don't look for the truth, it makes us rather annoyed

    on our planet we had an event similar to earths hitler burning down his own building
    there was this crazy guy who said we did it so we shot and we killed him
    we don't just shoot people with satellites on this planetary plane
    we do other fun psychological attacks to keep them trapped within their brain

    when i go home all i want to do is go back to work
    these evil people who research truth need to get hurt
    i'm like that guy on earth, derren brown, i want to prove powers of the mind are fake
    if you dont watch tv and be like them then your a snake
    "cut down that fucking rain forest", yes boss i'm on it
    like Earth's George Bush we hate the law of the jungle, it's shit
    NWO.. that's all i'm here for
    let's make rules for everything and call it law
    i know gods with me
    i wear my cross daily
    the governments always right, isn't that scary

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    oh shit nigha, this is too ill!!

    i aint rap to be no flashy faggot like tech n9ne
    all i wanna do is describe an experience in a rhyme
    syllables, metaphors, real rhyme editor
    i go to another dimension and back, styles make it better for
    you to understand all the shit that i'm going through
    even with all my techniques you still can't get what i'm showing you

    i aint draw shit for you who need everything sugar coated
    you want everything shiny but thats fake, you can quote this

    my art allows me to express a higher dimension down to you low lifes
    i put you in a trance state whenever i hold mics
    you want everything fine tuned and perfected down to a T
    but believe me, that weak shit aint reality

    i run both sides of the brain, creative and logical
    rap computer designs, symbolism, i even rhyme comical
    50 percent of todays population can't even control the third circuit
    i say fear, stupidity, ignorance and hating are the main culprit
    (humanity in general)

    even higher beings hate me, but they still watch contently
    my future self is king so i can eat plenty

    my art is not there to be read in critical ways
    if you cannot see the hidden brush strokes, dissing me is yourself getting played

    i'm the last poet alive who can show you the truth
    when the NWO takes over, artists will turn methodical and disappear like POOF

    [they want more son]

    they want commands and rules, but no art they fools
    no slang, you must communicate through the language of tools
    no joy, no fun only laws and lies
    how come there isnt any paintings on the starship enterprise
    no more strolls through parks, or getting fresh air on a bike
    what kind of art do you think bush, obama and the pope like?
    i bet they like that funny painting of god and his son pointing fingers
    at each other, blaming each other on whose fault it is the NWO's stink still lingers
    it takes a real man to the fucking job done
    when i see david rockefeller he better run
    Last edited by Big Baby Jesus 666; 05-14-2012 at 12:50 PM.

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    [oh man, this is that nigga that used to think that the voice on shadow boxin' was sayin 'Omen']

    on the spaceship you'll lose alot of things you don't value
    until god see's you and asks himself what are you

    you'll be on the spaceship till your finally gone
    ya torn, and it won't be until your grandkids are born
    that the ship finally lands on solid grounds
    so you want to be stuck in a spaceship where your soul is bound?

    its shit on the spaceship everythings metal
    no trees, no bees, no nature no petals
    synthetic foods, artificial and fake
    how many more rhymes do i have to make
    ..until the picture is real
    the soul needs to breathe too and it does want to feel

    when hiphop was born, the rhythm was the rebel
    it even touched the heart of the devil and made him feel special
    if 2012 is anything like the way hiphop formed
    then i might aswell say a new star is born

    we cant just take the scientists approach and document the changes
    we must feel the change and the most popular hiphop will def. be the strangest
    it aint about keeping it real no more
    the re-emergence of spiritual energy will put the fake on the floor

    "why should man believe in spirits if he doesn't need to?"
    "how can we believe in something that's see-through"
    some people don't believe in things until it affects them
    we're waiting upon an event that finally connects them
    all types of life are connected, dont cut yourself short
    i've experienced ufo's, spirits, demons, shadow creatures and things of that sort
    the earth is living too, so what energy lives within you?
    are you going to let the illuminati drain this till its no longer true?

    some people are materialistic and seem to succeed in life
    rich familes produce what the government consider's right
    some people go to uni or college
    and think they're intelligent cus they can simply regurgitate the knowledge
    but they aint got it in em, no natural talent
    the illuminati have got you within the grip of their talons
    this here structure is about to collapse
    and i'm right here waiting to fill in the gaps

    i trained my mind as a weapon using hiphop as a tool
    this style here is something unlike you get in school
    alliteration and consonance, multisyllable rhymes
    imagery, metaphors, analogies are billy analogues crimes
    the art of freestyle, i aim for the stars
    i aint know what String Theory was until i heard Canibus 100 bars

    i started smoking cannabis and read books like jermaine
    but the plants taught me the most knowledge i know it sounds strange
    now i cant take drugs cus im on medication, can't abuse it
    but like a shaman still can get into trance states using tobacco and music
    then i start writing these rhymes like killa sin
    niggaz never knew, but im the god of planet x, Linstidind

    [too much knowlege man!]

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    they've cloned another sheep and to me it sounds cold
    cus now there's another animal out there who don't have a soul
    it might still breathe and be able to eat grass
    but nigga, karmas a bitch, gonna whoop yo ass
    "hi i'm gza and i don't know if my spaceship will work"
    "ok let's put a monkey in it to test it, who cares if he gets hurt"
    gza is sick like the illuminati created 2012 olympics logo
    it's a test they created cus if you see it they call you loco

    i'm like canibus on the quest for the truth
    but unlike him i've explored my mind and other dimensions to get more proof
    Last edited by Big Baby Jesus 666; 05-15-2012 at 05:59 AM.

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    yo psychic powers vs the illuminati part 1

    yo i was reading my book and on came a crappy song on my ipod
    so i put the book down and pressed next and it randomly put on a beat for me to nod
    my head to, it was tech n9ne, einstein
    then when i looked back at the book i saw e=mc2

    then i looked down and saw 'einstein' on the page too
    can you understand the styles i manifest
    the book was on psychic powers if you have interest
    i'm just using this to train the 5th/6th circuit of my brain to be the best

    * bows *
    Last edited by Big Baby Jesus 666; 05-15-2012 at 08:31 AM.

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    i honestly love readin this shit not even tryna hate bro, do your thing man hysterical

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    Haha, cool rhymes man. Not sure what your story is. Some of this seems serious and then at other times it seems like you're taking the piss. I found some of this shit quite humouress but at the same time you threw down some pretty interesting lines. Entertaining in any case. Good flow for the most part too.

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